The Sword Comes Out of the Stars and the Poison Becomes the Edge

It's a pity that the Mangoku Clam has been offline like this. It would be great to have this gadget as your own pet, just like Bulbasaur.

Wooden Man

This man, after eating delicacies from the mountains and seas, his mouth has become rough, and he can't eat simple food. He used to hold his nose to read some books, but now it's boring to read them. He sits at the table every day and waits for the old gun to be updated. It's like he's addicted to cigarettes.

Don't mix up the mandarin ducks, thinking about stealing Duan Yu's wife and giving him another one. Abi is loyal to Murong Fu. The protagonist, who is used to scheming, doesn't really think of Duan Yu as his younger brother. The character is confusing. Do you really think of yourself as a great and upright hero? In my opinion, Wei Xiaobao is top-notch. I advise the protagonist to stop meddling in other people's affairs and be greedy.

It is recommended not to write too much about modern people's understanding of martial arts and their solutions, as that would be a thankless effort. Since it is a martial arts fan, readers will naturally immerse themselves in the martial arts world, and the more you explain, the more dramatic it becomes. In addition, don't be too obsessed with martial arts moves, as you will fall behind. I would like to ask how many of the current readers like to see tricks and explain them one by one? You only need to write that the protagonist has excellent qualifications, can practice martial arts quickly, and does not delay his level. The sooner he becomes a master, the better. After all, in martial arts fan fiction, everyone basically knows what opportunities there are. What you see is the martial arts crushing caused by the information gap, and the pursuit of pleasure...

The author's writing skills are very good. Why did he write such nonsense? I originally thought I would see the story of Ruyi's grudges and laughter, but I didn't expect to see a drama about ethics. It was really off-putting.

The last few chapters have not been very good. The protagonist has become a drug addict. Does he still want to be a good person? What bothered me most about the original novel was the dog-licking Duan Yu. The most speechless thing is that the author made him even more dog-licking. However, the protagonist actually still begged him. I really am. . . . . Author, don't you dare to deviate from the plot? Wouldn't it be better to send Duan Yu offline with a bunch of poisonous fans when we meet?

The beginning of the book is relatively innovative, and the three golden chapters are well written and captivating to attract the reader's interest. It's considered a high opening. When I got to the apricot forest, I felt boring. The plot follows the original work, and there are no special features or innovations. There is no difference from ordinary Tianlong fans. They are all looking for Qiao Feng to become their eldest brother. It's bland and nothing new, and I'm tired of seeing it. The male protagonist is also written in a bland way and has no characteristics. When writing characters, they are either too righteous or too evil. As long as they have characteristics that make people remember you, it means that the character is vivid and the male protagonist does not have these or those characteristics, such as happiness and grudges. Anger will be repaid. Both good and evil. Just for his own preferences, he will not hesitate to stir up disputes in the world, playing in the world. Or a hero dominates one party. There are none of these charming descriptions. It's better to write something new at the beginning. Even if the male protagonist is written as a villain, I have no problem with it. It's better than a character like the male protagonist who has no characteristics or charisma.

The author is a great talent. Brother, I have worshiped the old immortal Xingxiu since I was a child. Today I have to encounter the divine book, but I regret that the content is too little. I give all my monthly tickets 32, and I only ask for 10 a day, so don't be afraid. Describe the ferocity and viciousness of Xingxiu Dafa a lot, just to have a quick look at it

The author has too many secrets. Azi, a vicious woman, has more scenes than the protagonist. He also forced this disgusting and vicious woman to be the heroine.

There are too many female protagonists, except Azi, all of them are cut and copied, leaving little impression on people; too obsessed with "revealing the secrets" of the Xiaoyao sect, lacking other motivation to promote the plot; obsessed with being nannies for the original protagonist group, lacking originality. In short, the future of the work is worrying, and I am afraid it will have to be cut off

I've read Chapter 30. Are these hired trolls bragging? I thought it looked so good

The protagonist's internal strength is now equivalent to an average person's 120 years of internal strength. But looking at the protagonist, you want to steal martial arts secrets and cheat? Also wearing a few vests Martial arts and martial arts, a real man walks around the world, whether he changes his name or his surname. When you were weak, you acted ugly and I didn't pick on you. Why are you so strong, yet you still act ugly every day? Your behavior is not grand at all. It's really disgusting

Alas, author, this is the third masterpiece I have read by you. Every time after 200 chapters, I have a feeling that it is tasteless and that it is a pity to abandon it.

The beginning of the book is very exciting. After Xingzilin started making suggestions for the Murong family, he fooled around. It seemed that he had new ideas and wrote new things, but it was too idealistic. The characterization was far inferior to that of Dali. The details were blurred and there was no martial arts flavor like before. This book was at its peak at the beginning.

Why are the book reviews all positive, but the ink at the beginning is terrible? At the beginning, when I met Ding Chunqiu, he said that the protagonist is also good-looking and has good qualifications, so it still needs 2 chapters to get started? Later, I went back to have sex with Azi for another 2 chapters...

It's all crap🙂

I have read most of it. The author escaped from the Xingxiu Sect and was fine with Prince Duan. He met a lot of confidantes. Then things started to go wrong when he arrived at Murong Villa. He pretended to be a military adviser to paint a big cake for Murong, and wanted to help Qiao Feng get justice. His fighting power expanded rapidly. He wrote a lot of confidants but they all stayed in the ambiguous stage. Then after the plot of the Shaolin Temple went viral, I felt that I couldn't continue writing it. Sure enough, it was finished in just a few chapters.

It sucks again, well done haha

It's getting worse and worse, the updates are slow, the plot is slow, the update experience is rubbish, just keep it for now.

I came here for martial arts, so I had to add a sticky emotional scene, which is watery and smelly.

Drive high and go low, it was pretty good before Chapter 200

Around chapter 70, I felt the taste changed. Chapter 34 was really good before

Why doesn't anyone write about Yijian Fengyunjue? I feel like Yijian has been doing pretty good martial arts in recent years.

I'm speechless. I didn't expect it to end so badly.

What is written about Shaolin? Too poisonous

How can Xiao Ding, who has never known Beiming, absorb Wu Yazi's internal energy? Besides, the Shaolin Temple Child Elder also mentioned that there is an upper limit to the internal power. She was surprised that the protagonist was not exploded, which means that the upper limit of the protagonist's ability is already very high. Later, she absorbed Murong Bo's internal power and raised it one level higher. Could it be that Xiao Ding's upper limit is higher than that of the protagonist?

Is it over so soon? In fact, the update speed is not very fast, but the volume... I feel that Jin Yong's fan fiction is not suitable for writing more than one million words. The original work is only 500,000 words, and it is difficult to double it if it is expanded. Moreover, the rhythm is difficult to grasp. It is difficult for the protagonist to grow up quickly. If the growth is slow, it is difficult to enter the plot. If the growth is fast, the plot will end soon.

I'm just thinking about it. Why do I feel like I finished the book in less than half a month?

If the author is not ready yet, why not write a fanfic of "The Deer and the Cauldron" with a broader idea?