Astral Traveler

There are too many trivial things in the family ethics drama, which is very annoying

To be honest, the beginning is well written and can arouse emotions, but this dungeon is really stinky and long. The power system and world view of the dungeon are not attractive yet, and it is not exciting at all. I think it will end quickly. The second dungeon I feel combines traditional immortality, Taoism, wizards and the like.

Things like oath tokens shouldn't exist at all, but there are such things. It is impossible for subordinate forces to rebel. You made all your subordinates swear that they would never surpass him. That's nonsense, it's really the same name for all time.

I saw it in the introduction, and I saw the Astral Apostle in a trance. I clicked in to take a look.

I thought it was a book about Leather Armor, but it turned out to be the title of the book. . . I saw it wrong

What's the meaning? Forced recruitment into the military, for such an important thing, how can someone else help me sign up? No confirmation is required from the parties involved

I remember why I didn't read it. The pace was too slow and not exciting enough. I added it to my bookshelf a long time ago.

It's really hard to stretch. I thought Qi Peijia had updated it. I think the beginning of it is quite similar. Did you borrow it from it?

As long as you say this kind of article is unreasonable, a bunch of "original families" will immediately come out to scold you 😜

I'll give you a 3-month pass. I hope you'll write well. That book was called Eunuch. I hope you can continue writing this one. I quite like this type of book. Come on.

Don't have children. The most disgusting thing about this kind of astronomical drama is the emotional drama, because if it is written well, no points will be given, but if it is not well written, basically no one will read it. The first copy is long and not interesting, but this kind of astronomical drama that does not stress the level will still be read by people. If there are emotional disputes such as children later, it will be really over. I feel that it will be finished immediately.

The first dungeon is normal for novices. When it comes out, the main world is poorly written. Maybe it will be better if it is cut.

? ? ? ? Backdoor listing? ? ? ?

After entering the world, I feel that the writing is too verbose. Is the focus wrong?

More than grain and grass, but not enough fairy grass. Copy is the main theme, reality is secondary. The overlap with Qi Peijia's star apostle is very high. There is no obvious toxicity, but structural control needs to be improved. Generally speaking, one world is one volume, but here I write about one world for a long time, then suddenly stop, and then write alternately. The secondary world - the main world, takes turns to be long. The sub-world is long and the main world is short. The secondary world and the main world alternate. The three writing methods are all correct, and each has its own excellent works, but once the tone is determined, don't change it easily. This is also the reason why I said the jelly grass is not full. The author does not look like a newbie.

Does the author know that there is a eunuch novel called Star Realm Apostle😃😃

Drawn from "Apostle of the Stars"?

He has level 3 strength, but he is still playing house with level 1 people. He pretends to be a pig and eats the tiger. Sooner or later, he will take the pill.

Five yuan for horse urine, four yuan for a good product, okay

There are too many worlds, and there is no subject. I only see the real world, and it returns and becomes blurry. No title is written. . There is no sense of immersion. The beginning was good, but I have no desire to watch the rest.

The writing style is still sloppy, but the writing is too rigid. It's all about logic, but it's a bit verbose. Although it's not too poisonous, it doesn't make it very enjoyable to read.

No, don't write about family, how women get along, etc. I have over 200 funny photos and never seen a happy ending.

Write according to your own ideas. Everyone has different preferences. There are always people who like you. I think your writing is very good. I give you 16 votes and keep writing~~

The front of the Gate of the Heavens is set as a superpower, but the back becomes a treasure of the Heavens?

Please update more, there are too few updates, I will give you the monthly pass.

It looks good, without any big logical problems or poisonous points. The male protagonist belongs to Gou Daoliu, and he is not aggrieved. As the male protagonist has hundreds of millions of trump cards, it is normal for him to hide a big realm. But it only took more than one million words to write about three worlds, which is a bit watery. I hope there will be more and want to see the follow-up

Is this a copycat of "Apostle of the Stars"?

Read 240 chapters in one go for free. Cool.

Read ten chapters! Would you like to ask the book friends if they can meet in half an hour?