A Record of a Mortal's Journey to Immortality: Starting from the Game Shop

The protagonist travels through the world of immortality wearing a top-notch gadget. Then he scheming with a group of mortals. But the author still thinks this is very normal. If it were normal, would there be so many people saying this in the comment area?

It feels like the author has sacrificed everything for the sake of the end. With this kind of mall system, as long as you have enough stones, the magic weapons, elixirs, and exercises are almost infinite. It can be said that, and then you keep writing about dealing with a mortal. In fact, Qi training can make a quick transition. You can go directly to the basic building, and then engage in reselling, pretending to be a master of alchemy or weapon refining, etc., You can develop quickly with just a few stones. The advantage of this system is that you don't need to download a dungeon.

This plot of exchanging gold for spiritual stones is enough. You've been writing it for a week.

This plot of Mortal Dynasty makes my scalp numb. There is really no need to write this. If you have a golden finger and earn the price difference, you can take off. What does it mean to scheming among mortals every day?

To be honest, I have read so many mortal fanfics. This book is definitely one of the first ones. Unfortunately, the original copy of Mortal Dynasty was not well designed and even a little dissuasive. This book is not even like a fanfic. It is almost all original. The protagonist's growth process from imitating Han Li to be a loner at the beginning and later becoming Mingwu is also well written New Taoist friends, please don't be misled by some people in the comment area. The writing style and content of this book are definitely pretty good

1. None of the female characters who have had a relationship with the protagonist have a happy ending. One whose life and death are unknown will not be found, and one who knows her whereabouts will not save her (it is also that she only knows her whereabouts, but it is completely difficult to say what happened to her). The second one can still be explained. The opponent is Yuanying, and Jiedan is unable to fight against it. The first one is completely incomprehensible, because you didn't encounter any particularly powerful enemies in Wulonghai, except for the convulsions and swelling, and you had to kill people casually on the way back to the sect after the mission. It turned out that the opponent had a father who was in the core formation stage, but your follow-up plot also said that you can deal with the opponent in the foundation stage. And to this day, I still don't understand why we designed a plot in which the protagonist hides his identity and encounters a difficult woman. Is there any big conspiracy behind your return to the sect after the period of stationing on the island to report? And then you just don't explain the reason and just offer bribes to let people go. Is it normal for people to suspect you? In the original work, Han Li went to the mine with a token that could summon traveling disciples. The focus was on "traveling". Han Li didn't think the mission was dangerous, so he went. The protagonist could have had a more normal behavioral logic at that time, but he had to forcefully create conflicts, but this plot was considered a minor problem. Then the follow-up protagonist, you, wanted to escape the war, so you ran to the Sea of ​​Stars, and you didn't have much time to look for her. OK, it's understandable. I kept writing about how much I missed Hua Yuerong, but in the end, I didn't go back to look for her after forming the elixir, and I didn't have any plans to get the Nascent Soul soon. Seeing this, I really couldn't stand it anymore. Han Li had offended the Ghost Spirit Sect at that time. Wang Chan also knew Han Li, and he even knew the location of the teleportation array. Who did the protagonist offend if he didn't return to the Five Dragon Sea? The Danjie elder who could fight him in the foundation building stage? Does anyone know the location of the teleportation array? Your book reminded me of the historical novel "Step by Step" written many years ago. It also had a plot where the protagonist was harmed by someone and lost his first love, but the author handled it much better. Even if the protagonist's first love really died in that plot, readers would not criticize it, because the relationship and separation are so wonderfully written. The first love has a reason to save the protagonist, and the protagonist is strong enough to immediately take revenge on the person. 2. The author really has a big misunderstanding about fan fiction. I think your writing style is okay. This book is not very popular, and it is indeed related to the fact that it was too far away from the mortal story line in the early stage, but it does not mean that readers like Han Li will like to read it. The author went too far later, and confessed to Han Li. The logic is reasonable, but it is very awkward. The Land of Ghosts and Grudges is full of plots and insights from Han Li, so why not watch the original work and anime. I hope the author can really think about it carefully and grasp the degree of fandom. Personally, I think the primary purpose of fan writing is to make up for some of the bad plots and endings in the original work, and even try to trick Han Li. However, some people accept this method of writing without leaving as many regrets for Han Li. Didn't the author realize that most of the current Mortal fandoms actually borrow the story framework of Mortal, and most of the characters who appear are supporting characters in Mortal rather than the protagonist Han Li? Normally, I personally like books written by younger readers. In this book, the author does have a lot of profound ideas and insights into life. Later on, he even writes that the protagonist is still changing his thinking and growing. This leads to the fact that the protagonist in your novel has a miserable life. In terms of satisfaction, the feeling is not much higher than that of Han Li in the original work, but the story of suffering and hatred is much more than that of the original work. I have to say that the protagonist can grow, but this kind of plot should generally be written in the early stages of the novel. According to the current progress, the protagonist of this book is already at 70 or 80% of the pill formation stage before Zi Ling, who is much younger than the protagonist, points out that the protagonist's life is fake. I really doubt how you, the protagonist, can survive the inner demons of Yuanying? If you are truly dedicated to pursuing the great path, you should not fall in love, let alone accept disciples, and you should not interfere in other people's lives from the beginning. As a result, there was karma, and something happened to someone close to me. Let me say: This is God's will, and I can't help it. In general, this is what this book is like. The writing and story are good, but the protagonist in the author's book is unlikable and too sanctimonious.

There is such a big thing, it's only after it's put on the shelf that you can reach the foundation building

The writing style of this book is better than that of most mortal fanfiction, but many people come to the fanfic to see the intersection between the protagonist and the mortal characters (not necessarily Han Li, but also the characters in the book). However, the author set up such a big plug-in and ended up writing a slow-paced workplace story 😥. Many readers couldn't wait for you to write that the protagonist met the characters in the book and abandoned the book. I can't hold on after reading it now. I'm destined to see you again.

It would be most satisfying for this kind of top-level plug-in to directly act as a bad guy in the two worlds. Wouldn't it be good to engage in a chamber of commerce to buy low and sell high? If you put it into operation, 1 million spiritual stones a year is not a dream. You must have said it. The low-level people in the world of cultivating immortals should be content with it. But the problem is that this plug-in of yours is a game. You can definitely get Yuanying puppets to come out to protect you. As long as it can come, it will snowball.

I'm afraid I'm not from a female channel, and I'm scheming with mortals in articles about cultivating immortals.