Myriad Worlds: The Chronicles of Zhenwu’s Demon-Slaying

If you don't advance the plot properly, why are you so crazy about adding those nonsense secondary designs of yours? I'm really convinced

What the hell is that Pasiba you wrote about? He is so powerful that he cannot reach the heavens. Your golden wheel will reach the tenth level in the blink of an eye. Even if you are tenth level, you beat Hong Qi like a dog. Just spank the conference, and Hong Qi will not be able to do it? Where do you put the Five Jue when you write like this? Sixteen years later, even the tenth level of the Golden Wheel will not be able to defeat Qiu Qianren. You just upgraded your Golden Wheel, and your skill doubled in just a few days? Joke! The martial arts moves are weak, and the use of weapons is even worse. How can you beat Hong Qi, not to mention that Hong Qi is now much more powerful than Jin Lun. You wrote that Jin Lun is more powerful than Hong Qi? Hong Qi couldn't catch it. Sixteen years later, the Ecstasy Palm is as powerful as the Eighteen Dragon-Subduing Palms. What's the performance of your Golden Wheel? Who can't catch it at the Wujue level? It's illogical to brag. You shouldn't do this to set off the protagonist, it's disgusting!

Really invincible: push everything, hit more than one, and win for sure. Invincible at the same level: If there are more than one at the same level, you will win for sure. Invincibility in the eyes of the author: In a one-to-one duel, I have a high winning rate. Don't trick readers into thinking they are Japanese and trick them into killing them.

As far as what Li Mochou did was done, it was not unjust, and Xiao Longnu was imprisoned. Why do you want to make such twists and turns?🙂

The battle strength is not the least bit broken, it makes people disgusted when watching it. It really makes the Tibetan barbarians look like gods, and the five unique skills of the Central Plains look like dogs. What does the author want to express in this way? He is really just like the current Gou Gongzhi, a double-standard monster who tells lies with open eyes.

1. Literary Youth Disease 2. The protagonist lacks a sense of agency and his behavior is even more hypocritical. 3. The setting is too novel, Dugu Qiufei is a woman, Xiao Longnu is a descendant of Murong Fu and Wang Yuyan, and so is Dugu Qiufei. For those who can accept the above, this book can be regarded as food and fodder. I only read about Dugu Qiubai and Xiao Longnu's life experience, but did not read the rest.

The writing of Golden Wheel is so awesome! Is the Longxiang Boruo Gong blowing too hard? It is said to be a huge power. Sixteen years later, the ten-level power of the Golden Wheel will be much greater than that of the Five Jue. Not to mention it was just a breakthrough. Did sixteen years of training appear out of thin air and be even more powerful than sixteen years later in the original book? And why did Yeluqi fight Yang Guo? It's reasonable to cheat!

It's too poisonous. In order to highlight the protagonist, the author uses Hong Qigong as a stepping stone. Even if you write that the protagonist defeats Hong Qigong, I will accept it. After all, it is a combination of nine yins and nine yangs, and there are cheats that can win. It's normal, but if you write about Jin Lun The Dharma King mastered the tenth level of Dragon Elephant Prajna Kung Fu sixteen years in advance. It is already very poisonous. This directly doubled the qualifications of the Jin Lun Dharma King. It is also written that the Jin Lun Dharma King can defeat Hong Qigong in a single challenge with 300 moves without any injury. Five rounds are better than the dog-beating stick method. , Beat Hong Qigong to the verge of death, and Wu Jue had no cards at all. Qiu Qianren still fought fiercely with Jinlun Dharma King sixteen years later with thousands of moves for three days and three nights before he ran out of gas. He could still hold on until he apologized to Yinggu. The person who passed away after his great enlightenment, to put it bluntly, was consumed to death. As for the actual combat of Jin Lun Na's crotch pull at the beginning of the Divine Condor (in fact, the actual combat of Jin Lun sixteen years later is still far behind compared to Wu Jue). How can he defeat Hong Qigong? Can he throw away five wheels with every move? Can Guo Jing be allowed to come and go freely in the Mongolian camp with him and the three Mongolian heroes? (If Yang Guo hadn't tricked Guo Jing, he would have escaped unscathed at that time.) The author should respect the original work when writing fan fiction.

Are you traveling through time with your family? Boring

This is writing martial arts as fantasy. The battle scenes have no details at all, and they are not willing to expand the plot, so the novel can only be reduced to a running account. The plot relies on the villain insulting Xiao Longnu to advance, which is too crude. It is said that it is on par with Tian Dao, but I don't see the respect and fear the characters have for the protagonist. Shang Xiuxun has become the first disciple. Under the influence, Li Tianfan still comes and speaks rudely again. It can only be said that it relies entirely on the lower third route to advance the plot, which makes people uncomfortable to watch. The evil king died so easily. Has the author ever thought about how much of the plot in the original novel is related to the evil king? How to advance the plot after the evil king dies? In the first volume, there was a Pasiba for no reason, and Hong Qigong, a five-level master, was beaten half to death by a golden wheel, another extremely poisonous thing. Writing about martial arts fan fiction is not appropriate. I suggest you finish the second volume hastily and start the fantasy book directly.