Please Ascend to Immortality

Just from the introduction, you can tell he's a bit of a hipster.

Everyone pretends when they talk; some are extremely pretentious, some are exceptionally pretentious, and some are incredibly, exceptionally pretentious. Is this what it means to be a "literary youth"?

Have you ever cultivated immortality? This is just random writing, based on assumptions.

Actually, don't you find this strange? The protagonist is disliked wherever he goes?

You couldn't write such a neurotic story without some degree of depression.

The author, suffering from a kind of pretentious, artsy writing style, constantly pushes the protagonist along, inexplicably offending people and inexplicably helping them—like the gang leader's wife. Is she helping the gang leader because he died because of the protagonist? Aren't they supposed to be close? And then, in the end, they have to offer a convincing excuse like "I have a clear conscience."

Could the dialogue be any more awkward? The characters are trying too hard to be profound, it's genuinely cringeworthy. I'm dropping this; you guys can watch it later.

You can read this when you're bored; most of the characters are disgusting, including the protagonist, and they don't speak like humans. If you plan to write a book like this, I wouldn't recommend continuing this style.

Why did you change to an even more cringeworthy name? Oh well, it's alright. I thought you were going to change it to something like "Starting from the bottom of the mountain, you become the Lord of All Laws," hahaha.

The writing feels a bit bland. Also, who is the protagonist's master?