Huo Yuhao's Journey to the Dragon King

1. Book title and introduction: Although I don't know whether the author wants to put it on the shelf or just leave it like this, your book title and introduction are not very good. Let me teach you a basic method. For the introduction, pick out some plots or interesting things that you think will be interesting, or even directly show your golden fingers. Look at how the introductions of Huo Yuhao are written in the few books of Lao Nia. If you don't know how to write, just copy them. Only in this way can the traffic conversion rate be achieved, otherwise no one will read it if you recommend it. Don't tell me about any suspense. As a newcomer, how can you attract others if you don't show off your most attractive things? 2. Character setting: Many people hate the original Huo Yuhao. Why? Because many problems in the original work were difficult for Huo Yuhao to discover, he needed someone else to guide him. In short, let him discover the problems and correct them. Huo Yuhao actually has many problems. First of all, the most important tone of Huo Yuhao is actually a kind of gentleness. Although this kind of gentleness is often used as a kind of cowardice, how do you understand Huo Yuhao's gentleness? Also, Huo Yuhao has a serious self-destructive tendency. He has a serious self-destructive tendency in many plots. The reason why he is still alive is not because he wants to live, but because someone still needs him to live. According to the original plot, if we abandon those messy gods Plan, if you read Huo Yuhao as a simple cool novel, then he will definitely commit suicide after revenge on the White Tiger Duke, because there is nothing to support him to live. At this point, you have to let him learn that living is his own business, not because others don't want him to die, so he lives. But because he himself wants to live, he lives. This is why the original Huo Yuhao was used, because he didn't care about himself at all. Huo Yuhao's foresight problem, Huo Yuhao also has another problem, that is, he can't see far. Although in the original work, he did all kinds of things for the Spirit Transferring Pagoda, the problem is that he did not design the Spirit Transferring Pagoda well at all, because it was too hasty. You have to learn to re-evaluate this problem. I recommend you to read "Douluo: Huo Yuhao Lives Ten Thousand Years Later". The design of the Spirit Transferring Pagoda in this book is very Very good, but because he is a time traveler, there are many things that the original Huo Yuhao could not think of. By the way, as a fan, my suggestion is that you look at what your other fans have written, and learn about other people's excellent settings and plots. First of all, you can't copy directly, but the settings can be used, and the plots can be adapted. Why are many people accused of copying books? Because they copied it intact, they would of course be considered to be copying. 3. Plot problem: Your own plot was written too hastily. There are many places that need to be written more, but you simply didn't. The first is the relationship between Huo Yuhao and the Silver Dragon King. Damn it, I don't know if you are doing it to promote the plot or something. It's too fast. Xiao Chunan is so pinched. The emotional line should be stretched to write, and you write a little bit of the plot each time. The focus is to highlight his sweetness, use a lot to foreshadow it, and then point it out. You wrote part of the plot okay, but there was still a part that was written too fast. Fighting is fun! This is the basic theory of fantasy writing, but the focus of fantasy writing is not about fighting or winning, but how to win. For example, you have been holding back a big move for a long time and kill the enemy instantly. Although many people think that the moment of instantaneous action is very satisfying, but the real pleasure lies in the time when you accumulate that power. The focus is on accumulation. There can be a few well-written battles, and the battles also serve to advance the plot. For example, the battles and slaps in the face in many plots are actually isomorphic. This is why many people find battles exciting, because at this time, it happens to be a slap in the face plot. The pleasure is the slap in the face, not the battle. As for the emotional line, Xiao Chunan, let me teach you. If I don't know how to write, I just write about the feeling of something about to happen but not yet. For example, in a plot like this, the simplest woman looks for her own pleasure. Why do readers find such a plot sweet? Let me teach you, first you have to describe the mood of the heroine. Why was tsundere so popular at that time? Because that kind of tactful expression means that although every word is not about him, every word is telling you that she just likes him. Of course, the version has changed now, and you have to hit the ball straight, but you can't hit the ball directly. For example, you can't dress up because you like him directly. You can use the feeling of placing your affection on things, or use some small actions and small thoughts, such as looking at him from time to time, and then secretly thinking about the scene he saw, the corners of your mouth curled up, as if your heart has been fished away by someone. When you find it, you press it down quickly, but the curvature of the corner of your mouth is like the bright moon (Xiao Chunu, you must have been tricked into a pout). After a lot of laying out, you can finally point it out gently. For example, when the male protagonist asks the heroine why she did this, because we have seen the heroine's entire mental journey, the heroine will make a straight shot at this time, because she likes you, simple and powerful. Xiao Chunan, have you learned it? Once you learn it, code it for me as soon as possible 4. Update problem: Learn to use the robot's automatic update function so that your update time is fixed. This will better cultivate readers' reading habits, and your current grades should still be average. It depends on whether you want to get results. Don't imitate them and cut everything. Even if you cut it, it's best to throw out an outline. This way you will at least have a little credit in the future. Cutting casually really loses credibility. When you are free, it's hard for people to say anything. If you pay, people will scold you.

I won't go into details about the plot, but it's interesting to argue with Leng Yaozhu and others. I haven't seen Yu Hao with this kind of character in other fanfics, so I don't feel comfortable with it. The fighting aspect feels a bit strange. Yuhao's soul skills have very little linkage in fighting. The author seems to prefer to highlight a specific soul skill in fighting (such as Yuhao's self-created telekinesis) to weaken the performance of other soul skills (such as detection) and not use some soul skills (such as soul impact). There are also some soul skills that are basically never used in fighting (such as: simulation). The author did not introduce in detail what soul skills Yuhao has and their specific effects. I still don't even know what specific soul skills Yuhao has. I hope the author can describe it in more detail. At the end, there are a lot of typos, which makes it a bit uncomfortable to read. The author would like to thank you for updating. I really like Leng Yaozhu in this work! ! ! I hope to give her more drama, more drama, more drama! ! ! She must be there! ! !

Byd insists on making it more difficult for him. Let's not talk about the ones from the Douluo God Realm. The protagonists from other God Realms have no reason to help Tang Fozu.

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