Mortal: Start Building Foundation and Practice from the Chaos Star Sea

The poison test post is not a fan of mortals, not a fan of mortals, not a fan of mortals. The important thing is said three times. It is a fan of anime and mortals. The two are very different. No matter from the character design or the background, the three views, they are all completely different. Compared with the novel, it is more open. The second setting of the anime is too serious. Whether it is good or not depends on the person. The novel is more adult-oriented, and the anime is more young-age-oriented. You can understand it.

The writing is mediocre and too boring. You either have to accept women directly, or you become a eunuch. You have traveled through time and you still mess around with people "especially those who are lower than you." I wrote so many chapters to save Yuanyao, but I didn't even write the emotional line, it was just stretched. There are too many secondary attacks. Han Li has not yet broken through the pill formation, but he has already formed the pill in the distance? Is she cheating too? Or is it that Nascent Soul can make pills at will? The combat power system is completely broken. The protagonist can be said to be unparalleled in the "early stage" of cutting grass in the same realm, but it is inexplicably impossible to attack the inner sect of Qingyang Sect. The combat power means that the author will kill instantly when he wants to express his awesomeness, and he will be inexplicably anxious when he wants the plot.

It was so boring that I looked for Yuan Yao for twenty chapters.

I finally understand why fewer people are watching. I won't mention the typos in the dialogue. Even the person speaking can change later, and even if it is a reference to the anime, it is also wrong. For example, the mutated fire python was the one who robbed Tengo and became the one who robbed Kotoko. Alas

What kind of poison will the little medical fairy take after reading this book, and she can become a fighting saint instantly?

Using a pill forming formation, there is actually a Golden Thunder Bamboo in it?

Don't listen to these people, just write what you write. Animation not only makes the novel more famous, but also makes the adaptation better. These so-called fans of the original novel will not give you rewards and support, and they have not even ordered all mortals themselves. They also want to find faults in all kinds of ways.

This book is too plot-heavy, and some things have many chapters. It is recommended to write well.

Seeing that it was an anime fan, I retreated urgently.

Golden Finger is too bland and boring, and the level of cultivation is improved too fast. It took more than ten years to go from foundation building to pill formation.

Abstract I suggest the author read it himself

The author is pretty good, and he starts to screen readers in Chapter 6.

Remember, when writing fan fiction in the future, you must read the original work. The anime is disgusting, and many plots have been changed randomly.

What's the point of boiling eggs in the introduction? Do you need boiled eggs to cultivate an immortality?

Let's talk about it. The description of combat power in the early stage was almost boring, but it was much better in the later stage.

Plan the outline well, you won't know what to do if you move here and there!

Forget it, forget about the original work and just have fun reading it

It's rare for someone to write an anime version. I've read both the novel and the anime, and I think the anime version is quite good. But for this fanfic who writes about anime, the author's writing description and the arrangement of the protagonist's setting and dialogue are indeed very immature, and the arrangement of many things is obviously problematic.

It's too watery. I grabbed the Void Heaven Cauldron and fought back and forth for 20 chapters with Super Yin, Xuan Gu and Han Li.

I'm speechless. The plot of Xutian Temple is from 127 to 228. It's good to skip and watch.

Single and long, no? If you don't reply, there will be a pitfall by default.

Borrow precious treasures to promote the book (Mortal: From the Sea of ​​Chaos Stars to Become a True Immortal) I wish the author better and better results