Star Abyss Walker

What is this written about? I originally clicked on a novel and looked at the author and found out that it was the author of my favorite trilogy in online games. I was quite happy. I didn't expect to see your book again after so long. After reading more than ten chapters, what gb are you writing? The body travels into the game. Just one life. No one feels nervous. All cooked on their own. Just like an outing. The dead person immediately licks his bag. The same thing as playing house. Seeing it has no sense of substitution. No novice writer can write such a fragmented novel It only took a dozen chapters to go from surprise to disappointment to speechlessness after reading this book. Come on you

The only positive thing is that the content of the game is not bad, but the game content only accounts for half of the page. Most of the rest of the life content is very uncomfortable. First of all, the author, if you don't know how to write emotional lines, don't write it. Write the protagonist as an emotional 250. Many female characters are ambiguous with the protagonist. In the end, I read 120 chapters and didn't accept any of them. So don't write it. There is no place to rent a house in this huge city. , I have to share a house with a rich woman, and then stay ambiguous for a long time without writing anything or accepting any money. The protagonist MD is rich in every inch of his body. He can just take out any equipment and sell it for tens of thousands or hundreds of thousands. He is willing to give it to his teammates. He is not willing to spend 3,000 yuan to rent a house, so he has to share a house with a rich woman, and then stay ambiguous for a long time without writing anything to the readers. The settings of your games are also full of surprises. Why do you have to write a shuttle door when you make a copy? You have to take a taxi in the middle, so you can just write about entering. Do you have to be careful about the word count? There are also the most things about the heroine Lu Xiaobei, which is obviously very ambiguous. You have to play a ridiculous task and let people return to BH City. You also pretend that you don't want the prop, and then send others back without saying anything clearly. Please, it's 2026, can you not write this kind of thing? The plot of Nt is that there are few files for traditional games on the market, and everyone is rushing to watch your game. As a result, your game only takes up half of it, and the other half is about feelings, life, and a lot of history. I have no choice but to abandon the book.

You don't have to write emotional scenes. They all come to see you write games, who comes to see your stinky and long relationship drama.

It has nothing to do with the first person. After reading 30 chapters, I just felt that it was hard to finish. You have to prune the leaves, prune them. Careers have career background stories, and dungeons should also have dungeon stories. Players should also have their own will and story. I don't understand. The core of Warhammer is its quagmire. It tells the story of human beings showing their courage and perseverance between suffocation and struggle, even if they can't see the future, they are still struggling tiredly. The Mechanic is more like a traditional rebirth and salvation story with the fourth natural disaster added as a side dish. What is the core or theme of your book? Do you want to write about online games or about otherworldly games? What is the core of online game writing? What is the core of the game's alien world? What are you writing again? A new player is suspected of being reborn into the game's internal beta, but can't find the exit button. In addition, when a teammate dies, I will not mention the lame plot where the protagonist says that everything is used to its best advantage. When a person dies in front of you, should you normally feel sad? If you are not sad, you have to be a little worried, because maybe you or the people around you will be next? Following this mentality, should the protagonist change his behavioral logic? After realizing this, when the protagonist's mentality changes, should his external behavior and actions also change? I can't comment on Xiaobei's appearance and the related Internet cafe plot. I may have high expectations for you, but that plot line is not at your level. The same worldview already has gene seeds, so it's no problem to write about Miracle, Demon Realm, and Legend in 2002 and 2003. Because it can be foreshadowing. But why didn't the protagonist react at all? He went to work as a matter of course, and got a DDR2 memory stick as a matter of course. He didn't even think to himself, "Maybe the game settings are like this." I don't understand. Or maybe it's just my limited understanding. After reading Chapter 30, the gap is too big, so I probably need to slow down for a while.

The new book feels a bit like the old trilogy and Dragon Slaying. Nowadays, readers have higher requirements for the logic and rigor of online writing. Some details in this book cannot withstand scrutiny, and some routines are too old-fashioned. I just hope that the author can give a stable performance and not force changes to adapt to the times. There are still old book fans who will pay for maintaining this style.

Tsk, Ye Zi has been in love scenes for more than ten years and is still so sexy.

What kind of setting is this? The protagonist enters the game inexplicably, and may not be able to get out. There is no reaction at all, and he just plays the game normally and gets upgraded? Don't you have any idea about returning to reality? Are you not even surprised? Even if it doesn't matter whether or not he can go back due to some practical reasons, it's still okay to mention it. And if there is really no resurrection, why don't you still fight a hairy monster and level up to a hairy level? Shouldn't it be more important to save your life? Even if the protagonist doesn't care whether he lives or not for some reason, others don't care either? I came here because of the name Falling Leaves. I subscribed to more than 200 chapters before I even read the book. After reading the book, I took a quick look and found that I couldn't finish 20 chapters. . .

The good thing about the Lost Leaf online game is that the daily routines are well written. The characters have distinct personalities and are very immersive. They are also a bit fun. But if you want to become an immortal, you need a basic foundation in classical literature to become an immortal. Moreover, if you delete all the daily routines, all I see is that the character is an invincible machine with no emotions. If that doesn't work, it's better to go to the city and be reborn. Anyway, you won't be able to become an immortal if you go to the city to become an immortal.

Ding Han is a character, better than Ding Liang. It's so cold there

Dingba update! Eight updates! I really want to read 800 chapters before reading it, but really, it's not enough at all!

Did Ye Zi play Warhammer, Power Sword, Chainsword, and let's live together for the sake of the Emperor😈

The super god who looks like leather armor Ye Shiba! You will be given a monthly pass

Here you go

These 8 chapters are recommended to be played on a single loop🔁Mao Buyi's "A Journey to the Mountain", which is more immersive! Zi Zi said in the interview that this book is like a sweet dream. As a long-time reader of Zi Zi, I started reading the Yue Heng trilogy in junior high school. Now I have been working for three years after graduating from college. I have always liked Zi Zi's books. I also think this new book is indeed a very beautiful dream. Yi Zi has worked hard to transform over the years, stepped out of his comfort zone, grown up with the rhythm of the times, tried fantasy cultivation, etc. This is worthy of praise and learning! But sometimes the comfort zone may actually be very good. Doing what you are good at and passionate about makes it easier to do things well ~ As it is said in "Cognitive Awakening", just slowly expand and extend at the edge of the comfort zone 🤓 This time, the traditional online game has been changed into a gun battle type. This innovation is really good and is in line with the current mainstream trend of games. Come on, come on, look forward to the follow-up plot, and also look forward to Ye Zi creating more excellent works! Looking forward to more sweet dreams with Ye Zi and readers!

It is true that the first person is a poisonous point, but I am good at writing in the first person, so friends who are not used to it should read a few more chapters. If you are still not used to it by Chapter 10, you can only say that you have no chance of this book. Thank you for your understanding, thank you!

I'm a new reader. Fortunately, I read the comments, otherwise I would have read it. I heard everyone said that this author wrote a book with a single female protagonist and was ambiguous with other female partners, right? This nm is not a stock trading article. If you want a harem, then you can have a harem. I can accept a single female protagonist. After all, the main thing is to watch the plot of the game, but I will never accept the missing daughter. New readers should be careful.

It's chapter sixty or seventy, and some people have entered the game. The game is an extraordinary world, and players are currently wanted by default. Live within the city walls to make a living, upgrade to fight bugs and beasts outside the city. But there is not a single word about extraordinary in the local city, and there is not a single word about extraordinary in any news or people's interactions, as if it does not exist. It should replace the reality of normal game writing with urban tranquility, but this is an extraordinary world that has no topic at all. I feel a sense of fragmentation.

Twelve years ago, the character of Mrs. Lin might have been more popular, but now I like girls who are smart, cute, and able to work hard on their own. Let's change the outline.

When I saw Chapter 90, I really wanted to run away. I thought the two heroines were well written, and at least their characters were well established. But the captain of the sentry died, and the protagonist was asked to follow his legacy and join the Great Wall. I really couldn't hold back. I told you why I didn't want to join, but I kept trying to show off my face, and as a result, a supporting character suddenly died, and the protagonist was about to join the Great Wall. It really disgusted me. Really, it's no wonder that the author's performance is tepid and he can't even make any money. I wrote 89 free chapters, and about 20 chapters were about to be released soon and I started making money. However, in the 90th chapter, there was an abrupt and extremely divisive turning point, which amplified the poison that most people can't stand. It was very exaggerated, and it was a drama that disgusted both myself and the readers.

Come to the supporting building and leave the game name or real name you want. When you need a supporting role, we will come and pick it up!

I have just finished reading the free chapters. I am also a long-time fan of Ye Zi. I have read the three chapters, including Refining Gods and Slaying Dragons, but the setting of this book is really unreasonable. First, there are so many extraordinary routes in the background. Not only are there extraordinary people in the military, but there are also hostile forces, but civilians are completely unaware of them. Is this reasonable? Second, the player is "wanted" so he cannot be exposed, but where are the local indigenous extraordinary people? Isn't it a bit nonsense that ordinary people are still surfing the Internet in Internet cafes despite being beaten to death? What's more, it was later mentioned that players also have legal household registration in this world, so the "wanted" mentioned earlier is outrageous. Third, if there are a lot of extraordinary people in a world, then the society as a whole will move closer to extraordinary people. For example, if genetic warriors fly mechas, society should have schools that specialize in training mecha pilots as reserves for genetic warriors. Moreover, in this context, the status of extraordinary people should be very high, but there is no description of this aspect at all in this book. Fourthly, the daily line does not show that the protagonist is in an extraordinary world at all. It is still the ordinary daily writing method after the previous online game novels were offline. However, this is completely inconsistent with the background setting and is very unreasonable. My current view is that Ye Zi still writes this as an online game, but ignores the impact of extraordinary abilities on society, which makes the whole book very fragmented. It affects the rationality of the whole article, and I can't stand it anymore.

If you want to write online games, then write online games well. You have to be completely different. Look at how many readers you lost after your trilogy. You are killing yourself.

Survey friends who saw Chapter V

I see people keep talking about the first-person issue. In fact, it doesn't matter which person a good novel is in. What makes it uncomfortable to read is a matter of plot. 1. He often loses money when fighting monsters, and has to borrow money many times to buy ammunition and fight monsters without being able to get back his money. The male protagonist spends tens of thousands to buy bullets, and he is reluctant to pay the rent of two thousand. He will fight as much as he earns later. A poor guy can sell more than ten thousand for equipment worth more than ten thousand 2. The female protagonist is vague, not sure whether she has a harem, but the writing is very ambiguous. So many tasks are all for the female boss. I have never seen this kind of skill acquisition method like yours. You will not be given to the female boss by killing monsters. Aboriginal women are all written about having extraordinary backgrounds, and then after breaking up with their female bosses, they are blocked as soon as they send messages. If the author doesn't know how to write the chat plot, you don't have to write it. 3. The most important thing is that after being attacked by a surprise attack, they did not eradicate the root cause. The preface and follow-up of the writing did not match. One moment it was peace talks, another moment it was said that the peace talks were forced by other factors, and later it was said that the other party's people were seeking revenge and had a grudge to take revenge. There were still internal conflicts. 4. The people on the other side of the Great Wall also have brain problems. They insist on inviting people if they don't want to go, and they insist on protecting the protagonist even though they are a novice. That monster is basically just a matter of seconds for the protagonist, and the protagonist is too late to save him. His sister is written to have an inexplicable affection for the protagonist and take care of him, and then Captain Qin inexplicably threatens to stay away from her as the protagonist player. 5. After changing the map, there was another thoughtless sneak attack. The protagonist revealed his identity and still had to fight. He knew clearly that he couldn't beat him. Is the good equipment on him so easy to grab? It feels like there is no outline, and the author fills in many pitfalls once he comes up with it, which is far-fetched. 6. Forget about the dishes written by the protagonist's brother, he is also greedy for life and afraid of death, which is a tenth level difference. I think it is just a drag. 7. The protagonist's hostile forces have attempted to assassinate him many times, but each time they failed. It was like teleporting. There was no news, and he didn't know how to find the protagonist and directly attacked him. I am a reader and not the protagonist, so what are you trying to prevent me from doing? I just kill the protagonist without any plot, no information, and no arrangements. Anyway, during the reading process, I felt that there were many unreasonable places. Some places had pitfalls, some were unreasonable, some were not comprehensively introduced, and some were awkward. Of course everyone has different opinions, this is just my personal opinion, don't criticize if you don't like it.

If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, then just write emotional scenes in the same easy way as you fight monsters and level up. Xiaobei said that Aken is a softie, and pig's feet are equal to Aken.

I only have one opinion, or suggestion, don't mess with several women, and be more direct if you want more female leads, or just have a single female lead and play pure love, it will be very annoying if you are entangled and confused.

After reading more than 80 chapters, the setting is too self-contradictory: outside the city are Zerg, alien beasts, the bloody storm of the extraordinary battlefield, and the death of comrades. As soon as I return to the city, I will stay up late and work as a network administrator, forcing myself to be poor. Not to mention extraordinary attributes that are dozens of times higher than ordinary people, not to mention various extraordinary skills, anyway, I can only support myself as a network administrator. Killing so many monsters yields no materials, and killing so many soldiers can sometimes capture bullets and firearms, but sometimes not at all. The settings are contradictory and fragmented, and the worldview is completely unreasonable. It is impossible to read a book without thinking at all. . . Goodbye👋🏻

The male protagonist is a pure coward, no matter what kind of girl, no matter how many girls, no matter how many girls are given to him, he doesn't want it. He doesn't dare to ask for it for one reason or another. He keeps saying that he is a player and must focus on upgrading and give up everything else. In the game, no matter how disgusting the villain is, he just doesn't take the initiative to kill him. If someone kills him for the first time, he will always take the initiative to ask for peace. When others come to kill you, you still say that you should leave now and forgive him as if it didn't happen. He has to kill you a second and third time before you are willing to passively fight back and kill others. It's really too weak.

Can't I buy a new one if it can't be charged? Can I buy a new foreign version and it won't work? It's too obvious for AI ghostwriting

The author's attitude is really good.