Jiazi Dengxian

Summary: A collection of settings for classical immortals, everything is included but none of them are perfect What's cool: The settings for cultivation are solid and the foundation is detailed. The cultivation process not only retains the Taoist flavor of classical cultivation, but is also based on Qi and Zhenyuan, supplemented by changes in the five elements, which systematically enriches the practitioner's spell pool. The time and space settings are also huge, and different practice systems change with region and time. Coupled with the numerous famous sects, it is theoretically a world of cultivation with colorful fighting techniques and complicated human relationships. Just watching the protagonist practice is actually very exciting, and it is more realistic and immersive than other fantasy levels. Disadvantages: The above advantages turn completely negative when the author's writing skills are poor. The big tail can explain everything. Let's break it down into several aspects Characters: Except for the protagonist, there are basically no other three-dimensional characters. This is evident from the lack of character cards. For example: The protagonist's growth is consciously written, from escaping from his original family, to entering the Immortal Sect for the first time, to fighting for a spot in Cangshan Academy, and finally to his first experience in the East China Sea. The protagonist goes from an earthling (doubtful, it seems that the earth is not the real earth or the memory of the earth has been changed) to a new cultivator, to a cultivator with courage and diligence. This process is demonstrated relatively clearly. Moreover, the values ​​expressed are also very uplifting. It is not the ruthless Taoism that is often seen in ordinary fairy tales, or the difference between immortals and humans as if they have changed species, but it is in line with the true meaning of Taoism, complying with God's will, and seeking freedom and ease. What about other than that? Peers, opponents, confidants, elders, and Taoist friends in the process of practice are all, without exception, humans and machines who help the protagonist change his personality and grow his cultivation! Facialization is very serious. Taking the East China Sea chapter as an example, everyone in Sangkong Valley has no role. They only exist to help the protagonist to look familiar. With this relationship, the villain is killed to complete the cognitive change of the protagonist. He truly realizes: "You can't be a turtle. Favors cannot be avoided. When there are favors, there are concerns. If there are concerns, in the world of cultivation, you must take the initiative and avoid being passive." There is no problem with this understanding, but the problem is that there are many contradictions in the writing: Why do geniuses need to be turtles? If you don't have enough strength, why don't you be prepared for danger in times of peace? If you can't protect yourself, why should you involve your colleagues too much? What counts as a favor? Is it a favor if a beautiful sister is interested in you? With these contradictions, the cognitive change mentioned above cannot be supported at all, because there are too many nodes to prevent teammates from being killed. What finally emerges is the human-machine feel of the supporting characters.        ，，，，（），？ Finally, do you want to say that the calculation is a conspiracy? Without further ado, if the protagonist did not come, would Shang Ge and Evil Demon Realm be a fake show or a real one? Besides, is it possible to get what the villain wants without falling off the cliff? The protagonist's master finally saves the scene (there is no foreshadowing before and it will be treated as a deus ex machina). When saving the scene, I assume that the master is not far away. When I see Shang Ge in the pseudo-fourth realm, I just watch her jump up and down and send the Emperor's Seal to the disciple? Seeing the clown in Shushan also forcibly enmity?                                    The logic of character behavior in the East China Sea Chapter is only superficial. It is the logic of character behavior artificially crafted by the author. It is a dumpling under a plate of vinegar for the cognitive change of the protagonist. The result is that everyone else is a human-machine, and even makes readers think that the protagonist is also a human-machine. Fighting Techniques: The fighting technique pool in this game can be said to be rich and colorful, including spells, spells, taboos, techniques, magical powers, secret techniques, external skills... But the fighting scenes are not colorful. It is not that the writing is not good, but there is one aspect that has been ignored: if it is not an energy confrontation, how to crack the opponent's skills. The fighting method in the article should be a knowledge-intensive competition. The techniques vary depending on the individual's internal strength and spiritual understanding. In the article, the competition between the same disciples is much more interesting, because the protagonist consciously analyzes the opponent's technique and changes the five elements. But it will die after you leave the mountain gate. First, the casual cultivators and demon cultivators who paved the way should have rich fighting experience. Although they do not have solid skills, they should be able to take advantage of others, sneak attacks, and pincer offensives. Even if there are more people and fewer people, they should be able to, right? As a result, in addition to the three Shenzhen bandits at the beginning, they also have three-dimensional combat with spirit, energy, and debuffs. The villains at the end are all wheel battles. You sing and I will appear. It is so competitive. The second is to forcibly give the protagonist a buff that I don't know about other people. If the protagonist does not have much time to practice, he must fight in such an encounter. Except for communicative battles such as Dharma meetings, wild encounters should try to avoid pretending to be a pig and eating the tiger. Killing with one hit is the lowest risk approach. As a result, when you leave the house, someone will say: I am going to kill you! Then he took action slowly, like a cat catching a mouse, and he had to defeat the opponent in the field where the opponent was good at. It was like going out for an outing. Either you show that you are a genius, I am just here for an outing, and you are not afraid of anyone else, or you show that your peers can fight, and that a lion can attack a rabbit with all its strength. Forcibly giving the protagonist intelligence will only affect the perception of wild encounters. Plot: It is also a matter of writing. It seems that there are basically no chapter comments along the way. I feel that there are many people walking in the East China Sea. The feeling is: there is no plot climax. The biggest climax is the killing of the two clowns in Emei, but based on the shit eaten before, it is difficult to judge the significance of this climax. In fact, there should be many points that can be written. 1. The foreshadowing of the protagonist's life experience is deliberately buried, but the grievances between the stepmother and Tianshi Dao have not been mentioned until now. This can be enriched before entering the mountain gate. The stepmother's human power and the people under Tianshi Dao colluded in southern Xinjiang to hinder the protagonist. The protagonist escaped from the dragon gate and thought about the vastness of the world, which also cultivated the protagonist's tolerance to imitate Lu Zu and ascend to immortality even if his soul was injured. 2. First explore the secret realm of Donghai Fairy Mansion to get things, then go to the core area and plot with Shang Ge, then escape, and finally narrowly defeat the Emei clown. Let the opponent escape, and there is no need for a deus ex machina. There is no need for the master and the opponent's master to appear. The Emei clown does not even need a clown, just arrange for the protagonist to get the magic weapon first. The conflict of interests is far greater than the conflict of character personality. 3. The part about the Seal of the Emperor of Heaven is too instructive to the protagonist. The characters in the book get far more information than the readers realize. How could it be possible that the readers all know that the true divine method passed down by the Emperor of Heaven is for the purpose of descending into the small world, but the protagonist is not aware of it. And this should be a branch plot. The main plot should be the protagonist investigating the murder of his biological mother or the time-travel incident. As a result, the important plot information has to rely on the master to show the movie. This is putting the cart before the horse. No wonder there is no plot climax. Suggestion: I can feel that the author wants to carry forward the refreshing point of classical cultivation and upgrading, but the realm of cultivation is the realm of cultivation after all, and it should serve the plot. If the plot also has to serve the upgrade of the protagonist, it will be incompatible with ordinary fantasy. When reading novels, you still have to return to the characters and plot. No matter how detailed and rich the upgrade is, in the end it is just numbers, which cannot give people the motivation to continue reading.

Look at the title of your book Jiazi Dengxian. To put it bluntly, everyone who reads your book comes here because of the fun. To put it bluntly, from my point of view, I don't need to pursue writing and logic too much. As long as the protagonist and supporting characters are normal people, I will pay for it as long as it is fun. These recent chapters After all, it is also the point of a small climax, but it is not pleasant at all. The author is really too stubborn. To put it bluntly, these chapters show his talent and shock everyone. It is difficult to write a pretentious ending. Although it is cliché, I think this is what most readers want to read.

Why are there so few classical articles about cultivating immortality? It's because the threshold is high, and you really can't write classical articles without some culture!

Classical fairy tales are too difficult to write. They either have to be updated constantly, they have to be updated every month, or they have to be unfinished. Too few of them are completed normally.

Why does it look like Shushan Zhenshi Dixian? The plot is really similar, especially when he enters the world and saves a rich young master, a young master on Poyang Lake, this one is also on the island.

Except for the golden evil spirit, the other effects are not big... It's obviously just fine except for the golden evil spirit. However, the impurities were not completely removed in the end. It was quite embarrassing to leave the foreshadowing at the last moment.

I feel like it's better to call women senior sisters and junior sisters. It's easy to read. Otherwise, sometimes you don't know the gender. The novel is for readers, not archeology.

Is this the cover of Xianxia now?

In addition, I feel that sometimes several chapters are dragged out to explain how to practice Qigong, this acupuncture point, and understand the essence of the scriptures. I feel that there is no need to write in such a complicated way. Is it possible that in the future, those who learn this and that will be carefully explained how to practice, how to learn, how to break through this palace, and enter that purple mansion? Don't let the next three or five chapters be about how the protagonist breaks through from head to toe. Just explain this and that. You know this is the truth. You should charge your mobile phone when it is out of battery, and unplug it when it is full. You can't explain the big topic of function integrals, talk about the fourteen-five steps, this theorem, and that definition. After all, we readers don't learn it. But fortunately, it is almost the same now. There are not many such plots. I hope that in the future, it will be simplified and appropriate, add, delete and modify, otherwise it will be the same as hydrology...

Hearing the words, he was stunned for a moment. He was stunned. Why do you love writing so much?

It's pretty good, but it has to be majestic and genius-like. It has a lot of fun. This kind of plug-in has a better look and feel than other systems or Lingbao.

I started squeezing out toothpaste again and had difficulty in giving birth. Is it human to take one chapter a day! ... At first glance, it turns out that some eunuch is playing the trumpet. This is the rhythm of entering the palace.

Could it be that this guy came out wearing a vest? He doesn't look like a new writer. It reads a bit like the guy who had the golden elixir removal surgery.

Personal opinion: Pretending is a must, and it will become boring if it continues forever.

Genius flow, how should I put it, is quite interesting at the moment. In the final analysis, if you can write about the atmosphere of cultivation well, genius flow doesn't really matter. I am afraid that the writing is sparse and has to be hard-pressed. The reason why Zhetian was successful back then was because he created a wonderful enough world.

I feel that it is not as powerful as the master or the ancestor. It is not completely refreshing, and it is not a refreshing article.

The spiritual setting in it is good, but the world view is not in line with today's tastes. It is too classical and has a small feeling. It does not have the infinite vastness of the world after cultivating immortals in people's imagination. I suggest you do some thinking after opening the next book. The spiritual setting can retain the original classical feel, but the world view must be larger, and the humanistic style in it should not be too classical to make it look like an ancient novel. A more modern online style will give readers a better reading experience.

It felt like there was no more flavor behind it, only pure pretense and a slap in the face, which shocked passers-by.

The writing is good, although there is a bit too much about how to practice cultivation, but it is not too watery. The article has connotation. The writing is smooth. Come on!

I have a question, isn't the master a woman? Why do a group of heads and heads call her junior brother? I'm probably mistaken.

Is this written by the Shushan Dixian author on a trumpet account?

I think you don't really need to care too much about other people's opinions when writing articles. I just think the author writes well. I have always believed that fairy tales are the most test of the author's skills. After all, many people nowadays can't persist in reading paper books, let alone ancient texts and even Taoist texts. This book has a very fairy tale feel to it, I support the author.

More than 90% of Xianxia. Absolutely immortal grass level.

The writing is quite good, why are you a eunuch?

Except that it's a little messy at Jiuchongtian, everything else is pretty good.

Be diligent, it's not enough. I finished reading the dozens of chapters I saved in one go.

The writing is good, the plot and setting are very serious, keep up the good work! Good books need to be plentiful before they can take off!

Why don't you even write a request for leave?

Is this enough? Fortunately, I didn't read too much, otherwise I would have suffered a huge loss.

The writing is very good, why is it a eunuch?