Returning Again and Again from the Cosmic Locust Plague

Peak breeding period • Global locust plague: When you think of 1+1 and get 2, insects crawl out of your brain. Screws produced in the factory will be infested with insects, and even the data added to a computer will be infested with insects, etc.

First of all, you're the first author I've seen who writes about Star Iron and manages to include "traces." Most Star Iron fanfiction abandons these unique settings, which is great. Traces and Star Souls, while game-like designs, are closely integrated with the plot and faithfully recreate them, which is truly commendable.

Your book... *Sam Armor*, a high-level war weapon from an interstellar civilization spanning tens of thousands of light-years, is described with the same level of detail as a real exoskeleton armor. I can't say anything. If you really can't write, you should go to a factory and start screwing in screws.

Currently, the first part The star iron part is great, it's perfect! 👍 The real part is this 👎 How lame! Even the protagonist is dragged down with it. I'd rather you reverse the part where the protagonist is awkwardly praising others, and then have others awkwardly praising him.

Since you've chosen to interweave elements, you have to show off in reality. If you don't show off, there's no point in improving yourself. You can show off even when you're struggling, but in reality you're all timid and submissive. How can you become a master or achieve your dreams this way? A major core element of online novels now is showing off. If readers can't show off in real life, and they can't even project themselves into the novel, then what's the point of reading this novel?

It's definitely better to switch back to writing Genshin Impact. At least in Genshin Impact, the protagonist doesn't spend so much time developing their character only to be weaker than a mass-produced weapon. The Star Destroyer from Honkai Impact 3rd is barely worth anything. Estella's 200 million gold purchase of a limited-edition Star Destroyer already has a 10-20 times premium.

Well, I always feel there's a formulaic quality to it, especially in the combat scenes. They could just appear and instantly kill the enemy, but instead they describe the enemy going into the game first, then arriving at the perfect moment, then doing a basic attack, and finally unleashing a powerful attack. Yeah, that's the formula.

The depiction of the real world felt somewhat clichéd, even a little unpleasant to read, not as good as the world of Honkai Impact 3rd.

I think it's best to avoid writing about the real world in fanfiction.

1. The Supernatural Ability Management Bureau is truly garbage. They only have one supernatural ability—the ability to transform into red mist. It feels like the authorities are completely helpless against him. You meet him on the street, chat for a bit, and he's gone.