Don't Panic, the Great Lord Is Here!

In fact, your writing of Earth Players in the early stage was really good, and it was at its peak. There was no need to change the script or character design. However, the transition to the interstellar world in the later stage was a bit broken, and the span was too big. The foreshadowing pit of the Japanese Prime Minister has been written, and the situation of each protagonist character has been written and the progress has been controlled. If you change it like this, it will easily cause drama. I won't lie to you. {"NickName":"The Seventh Rubik's Cube","UserId":160011511} Hurry up and take a look at how you originally wrote the Earth Player, otherwise you will still be scolded for this book.

It is not a follow-up, a new book with new ideas. The eminent monk predicts that he will drive high and go low, and then he will make a brainless reversal and then be sprayed by the formula to the eunuch.

I love reading the book "Earth Players", mainly to see the players come to reality in a daze and pretend to be cool. In particular, the rich second generation was bullied by the official second generation, leading the family to take off, and made a fight with the second generation of the fairy world. There is also a rich second-generation girl who brings her mother to show off and slap her grandpa and playboy dad in the face. The descriptions in games are of average interest. Looking at your game descriptions, I might as well just read a game novel. They write more comprehensively than you do.

In fact, I think you can copy the earth players back. Just call them Blue Star players. Improve the details and storyline inside. What you write is basically all the protagonists instead of a single protagonist, so the plot and story pace can be slowed down without rushing, and the story of each character can be perfected. The worldview you built for players on Earth is very big and the protagonist is very big. From the beginning, I felt that you wrote it too hastily and too fast. Push it slowly. Isn't this the fourth natural disaster? Push it slowly. So don't rush to write ten thousand chapters. To be honest, I feel that your single book "Earth Players" will be read by more people than your other books. I think it is completely feasible to complete the small storyline in it with a few chapters. And seriously, why don't you steal character names from other novels. You keep using the name League of Legends and all kinds of shit. It makes people's balls ache when they watch it, and I'm just thinking of naming the characters.

I just found out today that this is the follow-up to Earth, but some people say it's not. Don't do it, author, why can't you continue writing from the academy competition?

The Goblin King laughed loudly: My first smile showed no wisdom at night. The protagonist ran away and temporarily changed the commander. The second smile was intelligent and incompetent, and the foundation was unstable. The hidden flaws of the general base were completely exposed. The third smile Pu Yunchuan was incompetent and failed to plug the loopholes in time. Now I have a strong army and a strong horse. I have an advantage of 300,000 against 1,000 people. I won the base and captured Xiaobaicai alive.

Is this a reboot for Earth players? No, where is my Xiye? Dead from the start? I still like Xiye. Isn't Wang Goudan's name Wang Xiaojia? Isn't Li Goudan's name Li Jiayi? Oh my God, I think the Earth Player is quite good. It's just that there are some plots that are written without any details.

It is recommended to rewrite. The devil has been resurrected four or five times, and you are only once. Group portraits are difficult to write and slow to develop. Why not change it to increase the importance of the protagonist and reduce the presence of his gay friends. Don't write about the CCP on Earth. It is easy to be sensitive. Write it as an imaginary one. Increase the territory. It is a superpower on the Pacific Ocean. It is convenient for the protagonist to annex and use legal principles.

To be honest, I don't feel that these chapters are very good. There must be at least a dozen names in these three chapters. Each of the five players has their own names and IDs, and there are also some scattered supporting characters. It is impossible to figure out who is who. And Xiye went offline too early, right?

@Everyone in the group let everyone know that you have reopened@

To be honest, it's not about the market or not, it's not about simply writing. Every chapter gave me a very messy feeling, and I had no idea where the plot was going. At least a rough outline should be visible to readers. As for the most basic point, how can any lord be offline directly in the first five chapters? Where do you want the readers to place their emotions when reading it? Who is the protagonist? New readers will just feel confused and have no idea what kind of story you want to tell. I suggest the author to check out the second-purpose ability store. It can also be said to be a group portrait, but there should be a basic order of priority and a gradual progression among the characters. At the beginning, five or six people tried to bloom in many aspects, but they could only lose everything.

That's it. Actually, I think it's pretty good.

Rain Girl Wu Gua and Xiao Baicai's counselor Alice, don't forget that woman from the underworld {"NickName":"The Seventh Rubik's Cube","UserId":160011511}

But the writing, plot, and continuity make it indescribably uncomfortable to read, and it feels a bit like shit-flavored chocolate. I'll go check out the Earth book first.

Ambitious

The author opens a Douyin or Kuaishou account to promote this book, otherwise I won't send it if I don't know enough about it.

Rain Girl Wu Gua hasn't been released yet, why is it gone?

Is there any update tonight? ? ? {"NickName":"The Seventh Rubik's Cube","UserId":160011511}