My Dreams Connect with Reality

I couldn't stand watching the movie after being rescued by a witch. You might as well write her and the Imperial Master as villains. The original settings are quite similar. The two of them encourage people at the bottom to fight each other in order to become immortals.

How should I put it? In the real world, you are submissive and I won't pick on you, but in the dream world, you won't die. It's boring to behave yourself.

I've already dreamed, and you still want me to obey the rules? My rules are rules!

The three golden chapters are good to read, I love to read them, the writing is very good, the setting is novel, the logic is smooth, I look forward to the follow-up ✒️Writing: Good 🎭 Character design: novel 🎬 Plot: Strong logic

The writing in Dream World is very cliche, the plot is confusing, and it's not that exciting. I might as well rewrite the previous book.

OK, the tasting is completed. This book is also a recent discovery. From the current point of view, if the standard is maintained, there is no problem with the logic. Above the grain, the main thing is to see if there are any problems with the logic, because this dream and reality are benchmark themes, and this aspect is still relatively difficult to write.

It's very messy, and the feeling it gave me was that it was very messy. It was just like a plot, but the plot was neither connected to the sky nor to the ground. All the plots give me a feeling that readers already know it by default. For example, in the first chapter, there is the demon sect and the sorceress. What are the generals and what do they do? I don't know where, and the general background is not explained at all. You have placed the protagonist at a point in time where he has entered the dream world for a period of time, but you cannot assume that the reader will understand. There is no sense of immersion at all. I feel that your book has no main line and is a mess.

When I see the comment section asking the author to adjust his work, of course I support it. Isn't it normal that everyone would like to read it if it is done well? But the author, if you are not good at it, don't force it. Otherwise, the gain will outweigh the loss if the work is ruined. Now it is actually quite safe. You can read the comments and refer to them, but don't let the rhythm be disrupted.

Pretty good-looking? You are so picky

It's considered as food and fodder for the time being, and you can look forward to the follow-up.

The creativity is good, and the early writing was okay, but in these chapters of "Becoming an Immortal", I feel that the author's writing style is a bit poor, and the writing is a bit mentally retarded, especially the real-life JC uncles (no offense intended); and the "Becoming an Immortal" in reality, in reality, there is no explanation of whether there is aura or not. This immortal is more like some kind of psychological suggestion, psychological self-hypnosis, and looks like a fool.

…Don't you dare to let yourself go even in your dreams? Learn not to eat beef anymore

The introduction is written in such a way that there is a sense of second nature. . . . Why have you, the author, never dreamed of acting like a fool? . . Do you think readers are as stupid as you? ! ! !

At first glance, the author has never had a lucid dream. You can control what the opponent thinks in the dream. If you play chess by yourself, what's the point of winning?

It's a bit exciting, the plot has its ups and downs, the characters haven't collapsed so far, and the entire training system is slowly beginning to improve. Currently, I feel that the only shortcomings are that the plot does not have a big breaking point, and the characters are relatively bland and don't have much charisma, and there is no foreshadowing.

The plot is okay, and the realistic plot is also well written.

Except for Qidian. Com, I am the first reader to post, and the post is the first. I want to be a veteran and follow the author. It is irrelevant.

It was quite novel to look at it. It feels pretty good. Then support it first.

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