The Condor Shooting: from Being Expelled from Peach Blossom Island

When I read the fanfic, I only watch the original heroine, not the original heroine. It's boring. Goodbye.

It's really wonderful. In reality, there are so many superstitious people who preach and believe in science every day. You have traveled through time, and you still believe in science even if you use your golden finger. Your brain is crazy, right? If I eat you, you deserve to have your legs broken.

I don't have a big problem with the protagonist's handsome face and burly body, I don't have a big problem with the heroine's loli face and burly body, I don't have a big problem with the protagonist practicing martial arts on Wujiapo, and I don't have any objections to the story about the Yue family army. As for martial arts, grudges and grudges always have a period of development. But suddenly a descendant of a high-ranking imperial official named Shi came out to show his dominance. The author started to write that the protagonist had second thoughts due to family reasons. What is my opinion? To hell with it, whatever, I'm not watching. When writing about Jianghu, I write about Jianghu. By adding party contention, does the author want me to start thinking about whether the existence of the imperial court in the world of martial arts will still be the same as in history? In the world of martial arts, whenever a treacherous official like Qin Ping appears, his life will definitely be difficult, because people in the martial arts world will definitely start to assassinate the treacherous official based on the feelings of knights and family and country. If there weren't people like that, there would be good and evil fighting in the martial arts world. After being assassinated for a long time, a treacherous official will be restrained. Will Yue Fei be killed? If Yue Fei is killed, then no one will assassinate the traitorous minister? Would other treacherous ministers still have such blatant bad intentions after seeing the consequences? If a civil servant restrains his mind and acts evil in private, will people in the martial arts world still recognize the traitor? The imperial court exists because of the rules, and martial arts exists because of breaking the rules. This is the reason why I don't want to read it after joining the historian. No matter how good the previous writing is, it can't change the history😵‍💫

The protagonist has no desires and desires, he just wants to lie down, and he doesn't care what kind of world it is. Two random people will chop you to death. The Beggar Clan is not allowed to join. If you do, do you have to take care of things? He is not capable enough, but he also likes to talk bad words. He insists on going on his own. Is this protagonist really 40 years old? He is really mentally retarded.

The plot can be said to be slow, or it can be said that it does not follow the main plot of The Condor. We are already about 10 years away from the main plot, why don't we advance the plot as soon as possible? Temple ruin plot? Maybe there is a purpose and foreshadowing. But what does it have to do with me, or the main line that readers expect? At the same time and at the same time, I can still expect the plot characters to appear, but a lot of irrelevant characters appear? If you create an abandoned disciple of Peach Blossom Island, I will be interested in continuing to watch it. I have almost finished reading the first volume, and there is nothing I expected. If I give up now, it can be considered as a sign of patience, right? What do I look forward to? What I look forward to is the appearance of those plot characters! 22-23% Of 40W words, is it smaller than 10W words? It has nothing to do with ink stains or water, it's just because the author writes that things that I think are insignificant take over the main line. After writing the above, I thought about it carefully, and the plot of the ruined temple persuaded me to give up. When I think about it more, it's that dwarf that makes me sick. What I want to see is Xia! Instead of watching a group of social scumbags living in a ruined temple. What's more, when I was 10 years old, I was standing in a ruined temple like a gangster? Do you write the protagonist, or a group of supporting characters who won't survive three episodes? The reader's attention is such a precious thing. You won, you succeeded in pulling me out of my state of concentration. I even spent hundreds of words in ink to complain about you.

I have read the latest chapter, and I always feel that the writing of the protagonist is frustrating and contradictory. There are also typos, the preface does not match the following, and the image of the key characters in The Condor is not written out. It is like looking at the paper man. The character description and plot context, and even the most important thing is the personality and belief of the protagonist. In the early stage, the writing was OK. Later, when the force came up, it was not working. I suggest you change it again. I will order it after a while. If it doesn't work, I'll say goodbye.

The useless protagonist, the sister with incredible talent The protagonist keeps cheating, but she eats and sleeps every day, gains weight, and then loses the fat to catch up with the protagonist. She is 4 years younger and has a figure of 185 cm. Her qualifications are a whole Huang Yaoshi higher than the protagonist. She is born with supernatural powers and has a strong foundation that surpasses Guo Jing° + the female version of Qiao Feng. I wanted to skip watching, but the key is that this character is inseparable from the protagonist.

I've read Chapter 13. I was lame before, but now I'm even lame. The main character's name after 13 chapters has also been changed. There is no rule about golden fingers. Sometimes they are there and sometimes they are not. After time traveling, the body of the original owner affected my emotions. Can't stand it

Don't write about the harem, this book is definitely a masterpiece

Come on

1. The pace of the first few dozen chapters is slow, the cheat is not obvious, and the three names are changed. It is acceptable even if it is carefully written, but the serious martial arts style is suddenly inserted into modern features. The various spoof notes and nonsensical names of the skills of Golden Finger are deliberately designed to make people jump from the scene, such as Bear Infestation, Eel Kung Fu, etc. The quality has seriously declined since returning home. 2. On the way home, a strange plot of three encounters with the female costar suddenly appeared. It was smelly and long and incomprehensible. 3. The protagonist goes home to practice kungfu and simply writes it as a fusion of kung fu techniques. In a few months, he becomes a master in three years. The heroine is directly written as a big fat man, and the protagonist is written as a giant who is more than 1.9 Meters tall. 4. There is a problem with the positioning of the protagonist of this book. The protagonist, Golden Finger, who uses Taoist skills to eradicate injustice, is dragging down his family and assassinating high-ranking officials. His methods are sinister and his personality is impulsive. It is obviously different from the witty begging at the beginning of the novel. It can be said that they are two people who can bend and stretch. They are deliberately trying to outwit and the plot is blunt. 5. The journey of chivalry and righteousness has not yet begun, but he is suddenly involved in a court battle. The peace talks between Song and Jin Dynasties used poisons, aphrodisiacs and other methods, but they talked about getting rid of traitorous ministers. Wasn't it the emperor who negotiated the peace? Why not destroy it? One moment he writes like a villain who is afraid of his own death and will bring harm to his family, and the other moment he writes like a dead soldier who is impulsive and schizophrenic. There are many other details that are deliberately arranged for the sake of the plot. It makes people understand the drama at once. It is a bloody mess. I just gave up on the assassination of the person who took the elixir and jumped into the river. The martial arts did not go into detail. The martial arts did not say any big events, and the Xia did not do much. It was all about laying the foundation for the family. It seems that they want to dominate the world. You are not prepared to conquer the world, but instead engage in assassinations. It is so confusing and poisonous!

The protagonist doesn't tell the descendants of the Yue Family Army where Wu Mu's suicide note is because he is afraid that the descendants of the Yue Family Army will go to Qiu Qianren to die... Descendants of the Yue Family Army: Are we so like idiots? I couldn't stand it anymore after seeing this, so I came out to take a breath and read the comments... I didn't expect that there would be a spy war later... Stop the loss in time The most annoying thing is that the protagonist trains hard and then arranges a sister with amazing talent. It makes people feel that the entire combat system has collapsed. Just finding a beggar sister is worse than the protagonist cheating. How ridiculous are the characters in the whole book?

I have been reading books for more than ten years and this is my first time posting. It was really frustrating to write. The protagonist of martial arts does not reflect the joyful grudges at all. So there is no point in learning such good martial arts. Let's not talk about whether you can become a decent knight in terms of your behavior. Even when practicing martial arts, you must pay attention to one thought. The superior cannot serve the country and the people, and the inferior cannot punish evil and promote good. Now that you have practiced Gou Ba, your book friend's evaluation is absolutely correct. It is indeed the bloodline of Murong Fu. He is both decent and established. He is indeed a descendant of Xianbei and has no Han style at all.

A surprising start. The predecessor can still control the protagonist. Will the protagonist need to control the predecessor to help push the protagonist into the bridal chamber in the future🤣

Why are there so many masters of mechanical deity for the Zhao Song royal family? There are even five-level ones... Then it's still a fart fight. Can't Zhao Song just implement the beheading strategy? After all, in the original work, it was written that the Kingdom of Jin recruited martial arts masters, and the results were average. You write fan fiction and create so many original characters. It causes the plot to break up.

Does the author think that the Kingdom of Jin was founded by the Koreans? I'm so confused about the dog-blooded bibimbap😱

Obviously I can just write ordinary martial arts novels, but I have to write fan fiction. As a fan fiction, I want to write my own story. The most important thing about fan fiction is that it is fun, fun, fun.

I have read Chapter 50, and it is extremely poisonous. There are all kinds of stinky plots, it is difficult to protect yourself, and you are still a virgin bitch.

It has the shortcomings of a literary and youthful abuse of the main text. The author is advised to pay attention. Life is depressing enough now. They all read cool articles to relax. It is also suggested that the author jump directly to four or five years later. Teenagers have a stronger sense of empathy than children. Always a child. The sense of immersion is too bad. And after adolescence, you can look for opportunities or meet confidants. The main character's family is pretty good. The tribesmen are also very kind to the protagonist. You can find a few good internal and external martial arts to teach your family. After all, this is the world of martial arts. Martial arts is the foundation of one's life. The one from Murong's family is pretty good. Very suitable

After reading a few chapters, I realized that if I didn't destroy Huang Yaoshi and Huang Rong's family's martial arts, cut off their hamstrings, break their legs, and throw them into beggars after they got good at martial arts, I would be sorry for the beginning.

Good guy, as an abandoned disciple, you haven't learned any skills at all. You can only make a living by begging when you go out. As long as you learn a little bit, you can beat up local tyrants and evil gentry in the countryside. But the senior brothers are still so vicious after they are kicked out. The protagonist is suffering, right?

You have to follow the caravan, the escort agency, and write letters. You have to go on your own, even if you are stupid.

The writing is very good, but the foreshadowing is too long, and the protagonist does not think like a middle-aged man. He has been driven to the point where he can no longer live. He has experienced life and death, but he still doubts this and that. Does he have a sense of crisis? He is not active in practicing martial arts, and he does not want the great power of the martial arts world to be attributed to him. How can he be motivated? If you are insane, you deserve to be beaten to death and your life will be in vain.

① It does not have the fun of being in the world. From the beginning to the end, the protagonist is tied up by various things and does things with shackles. ② There is no practice to gradually upgrade, it is more fun to progress step by step, let alone Jin Yong's novels, Guo Jing, Duan Yu, Xu Zhu, Zhang Wuji and Yang Guo, these are the fun points of gradual progress from scratch, drinking snake blood and eating magical objects, entering the world and climbing to the top step by step, I can't stop reading. ③ Unlike Qiao Feng, Linghu Chong, or even the protagonist in Gu Long's works, he has a high configuration when he enters the arena, and can be upgraded when he reaches the boss. By following one of them through the plot, you don't have to worry about their martial arts at all, and can wholeheartedly experience the thrilling ups and downs and the soul-stirring emotions. The protagonist of this book has been tied up with a rope since the beginning, and the author really likes the protagonist to lead the group through the plot, and does not have the pleasure of stealing the chicken with a small gain. Character relationships: His legs were broken and he was kicked out of the school, the old beggar died, the stupid girl, the descendants of the Yue family, the Bai family, and the Wu family were all in shackles. The protagonist has not practiced martial arts well, but he has been busy arranging a lot of plots that follow the trend (protagonist positioning), and in the end he has gained very little (mosquito legs).

The writing is okay, but the plot twist is a bit too rigid and there are too many logical loopholes. It will make people think that it is written by AI. When the beggar talks about the goods, the normal time traveler should run away. What else can the beggar have other than women and children? But the author forcibly made the protagonist intellectual for the sake of plot. And he went to Wujiapo, where he obviously had food, drink, martial arts training, and someone to protect him. It is obvious that people can practice martial arts well before joining the family at an older age, but in the end they have to lose their wits for the sake of the subsequent plot. Although the writing is so good, can't the plot be polished? If you don't change it later, your book will most likely be doomed.

After reading four chapters, the main character is too mentally retarded. He is said to be 40 years old. I think he is as strong as a 4-year-old. He came to the world of martial arts and couldn't find a way to practice martial arts. He wanted to go home and lie down and become a rich man. When he meets a flower picker, he will pick your chrysanthemums and be honest.

The main story is abusive, and the first dozen or so chapters are full of cripples, which makes it frustrating to read. There are also some chapters with too few paragraphs and too many words in a single paragraph, which affects the perception.

I haven't posted anything in ten years. I'm disgusted by the height and shape of the protagonist and the heroine. I force Xiong Daxiong Er to live together. Shouldn't a martial artist run into the world and become a scholar? With this setting, two people together can crush a horse to death. It's disgusting, it's disgusting. If you subscribe to forty chapters, it's like feeding a dog 😰

I ran away after reading three chapters. I feel like you should listen to the editor and settle in. Whatever you write is messy, just forget it as a fanfic. You are still scratching your head after giving me a cheat. Brother, are you writing a thesis?

It's easy to add private goods, and it's easy to add a long section of settings. It's not as good as water and water.