Death Game, I Can See Hidden Hints

The second script idea is okay, but it uses too many narrations (especially the third scene of the campus reincarnation. I personally expected a breaking point, but the whole process is the protagonist telling the whole story flatly without much sense of substitution). It does not have the expected amazing feeling. The chat conversation with Ma was indeed a bit awkward. It is difficult to write a team book, and it is easy to make mistakes. Please do your best, author.

No, I've already jumped into a team copy. Why is there still Ma Fei in the third copy? Study in Thriller Paradise, right? Your approach to supporting characters is different from that of Three Days and Two Sleeps. Look at the supporting characters written by others. Look at your oil bottle again. It's a whole bottle of oil. Why do you want to write about him? I really don't understand.

This book is not good enough for me to stand on my head and poop.

The more I read the later dungeons, the more unpleasant I become, especially the team dungeons and world dungeons. Not only do my eyes use less and less, but because the protagonist's combat power is not as good as his teammates and NPCs, the battle scenes are not mainly about the protagonist 😅 The protagonist can't get any good things as rewards for perfect clearance (basically relying on the eyes to collect them in a way that is impossible for normal people). Why do other people not only have high attributes, but also specialize and have abnormal system effects?

The story is interesting, but the supporting characters are so disgusting, I can't stand it

The writing of the protagonist is okay, very good I feel like when I wrote about Ma Fei, I couldn't tell whether it was a game or reality. As a reader, I guess the author may want to write that this game is not just a game, but also real or something. But for now, the protagonist mentioned that there was a strange smell or something when entering the game warehouse, and then did not clearly tell the characters in the story and what happened. This game is really related to something, maybe after the mid-term, so let me just say that the protagonist knows that there may be something wrong with this game (the protagonist mentioned that there was a strange smell when entering the game warehouse), but other ordinary people don't know, such as Ma Fei doesn't know Then there is a problem. In Ma Fei's eyes, I am just playing a game, and I will die after playing a game. Death is a normal thing. When Ma Fei comes here, he yells and screams. It is too embarrassing for the Fourth Natural Disaster (do you understand the value of the Fourth Natural Disaster [Dog Head]), so the performance of this Ma Fei in the plot is inappropriate. Playing a horror game, yelling is fine, but the plot shows that this Ma Fei is too deep into the play, as if he is in the main god's space. This copy will be completely dead when it dies, a little bit It doesn't look like playing a game The main reason is that it's logical. At present, people think that they are playing a game, so the plot of the characters should be consistent with the appearance of playing a game. Don't say that they deliberately die or something, at least don't be too that. After the world view unfolds in the later period, people know that there is something wrong with this horror game. No matter what, at least it is logically sound Finally, I wish the author will get better and better as he writes.

Ma Fei's part is 0 points. It's boring and brainless. It just screams and has no use at all. It's annoying to watch.

The protagonist is a 50-50 split. After reading the author's comments, you can find Ma Feifei in the fifth copy. Moisten it first, when will Ma Feifei die in the copy and kick me. It's a pity that Ma Fei is not Ma Feifei, and the protagonist is not Lu Benwei. Otherwise, the king will explode.

The setting is classic, and the single-player script is very well written, really good; many settings are borrowed from Thriller Paradise (this is okay, classics are classics), but the author also has his own intentions. But! ! ! What did that supporting character write? ? ! ! He's a scumbag, cheap and useless, his character setting is cliche, and he has to be given a lot of drama. Can you stand a big boy acting cute? You are still a fat man, author, what are you doing? ? ? Think you can write well? Can I write single-player dungeons honestly in the future? Tonic made some scan operations that they thought were innovative but were actually disgusting (at least I was disgusted)... In summary, I will still read the single-player dungeon later, because it does have new ideas + beautiful settings (although sometimes the hang-ups are big, the description is simply a spoiler, and sometimes it is inexplicably small, playing vague word games, which is very important Not good); but when you meet this supporting character, just jump and it's over... I still remind the author that at the end of this character's plot, Shanshan, at least I don't think he is very likable. If the first copy hadn't surprised me (the worldview revealed in the 100 consecutive draws), I would have given up the book after having three conversations with this character...

They use bad jokes in dialects to increase the difficulty of reading for no reason. There are 43 chapters in a volume full of such bad jokes. If you skip it, you don't have to read it. Just keep reading. Whether this book will live or die depends entirely on the author.

The first plot was okay at the beginning, but the Candy Man in the back was hard to understand at first. What are you writing about? The protagonist and the plug-in are not happy at all.

In a team? This type of book is not one that the lone wolf protagonist has no interest in reading.

It's very good-looking. Although it obviously has the shadow of Thriller Paradise, in this day and age, it's not easy to find such a book. 😁

After reading it, to be honest, the design of the dungeon is not bad, and the second dungeon is also a bit interesting, but the horse thing really affects the perception. If I hadn't seen in the comments that the author said that his role would be greatly reduced later, I would have run away when he yelled. Except for the horses, everything is pretty good and worth a visit.

Otherwise, it would be a horror paradise.

If you feel that you are easily self-motivated, write a new chapter and find a few book friends to read it, such as Quanbing Group or Yunguan

The first copy with my brothers was too much. . . .

And the author is pretty good at controlling the number of words in each chapter to about 10 points.

Let me ask you, angels and demons should not be in the same world as the protagonist! It doesn't affect the fact that it would be a bit disgusting if the game was developed by Angels and Demons, who control the selection of seedlings. If the West just ignores Angels and Demons and goes to the East, it would be disgusting.

Meeting the protagonist of the Black Devil Skill Group for the first time

It was okay before, but it was really bad when it came to the copy of Titanfall.

From my point of view, the author's single-player copy is very good, but when there are more people in the team copy, it feels like the two people have written the same thing.

Congratulations🎉🎉🎉Congratulations to me, you can die

Is Ma Fei gone? I think the growth is okay () Just put a label of being afraid of ghosts, it feels okay