Heavenly Deliverance: Dream Heritage

Good fan parts, wonderful fighting scenes, and decent growth content. Then there is Yi Tuo Xiang's original part, the so-called emotional drama, and the inexplicable literary youth disease.

It's too depressing. The protagonist is like a pressure cooker. New relatives and friends are always dying, and they are constantly dying and seeking revenge, not to mention the game part. The writing is okay, but I worked for a day, and when I came home and faced my parents' health, real money and other issues, I wanted to read a novel to relieve myself. To be honest, I wanted to die even more after reading it.

The Kingdom of Valencia, where the protagonist is located, does not look like a traditional feudal kingdom, with efficient mobilization, organization, etc., It feels more like a modern country wearing a skin.

There is nothing you can do if the parents in the dream are killed, and there is nothing you can do if the girl who has a crush on you is killed. Everyone related to the protagonist must die. If you can only continue to use the death of the protagonist's relatives to promote the plot, then the prospects of this book are gone. The pace will be slow. At first, the reader's perspective will feel ordinary, but then this kind of writing continues, which is unbearable for everyone. We are human beings, not gods. Originally, we read novels to relieve stress, not to cure ourselves of depression.

Looking back at the plot, Henry's experiences are too legendary. He has been in countless life-and-death crises, been captured, been attacked, and was besieged by more than a dozen bandits, but he can still fight back. His force level is so strong that one person can kill through a castle. His learning ability is even better. He learned Latin in less than a week, and he even learned alchemy without a teacher.

The author would like to remind you of a small problem. Chain mail armor of good quality can hardly be destroyed by a normal person's slashing with a long sword. If you occasionally do it once or twice, I will assume that the quality of this person's chain armor is not good. But too many times (the sword hit the opponent's abdomen, and the Cuman vomited blood and fell to the ground, and there were still blood stains on the sword body). This is a somewhat abstract plot. This is almost impossible to happen in actual combat. Most of the deaths of chain mail infantry are not caused by sword cuts on the armor parts. Moreover, the armor in the Kingdom of Salvation game is actually weaker than in reality. In the early stage of the game of the first generation, I used a one-handed sword and a Cuman infantry wearing chain mail to fight in the forest for more than 20 minutes before killing him when the durability of both sides' armor was basically exhausted. Even if your Henry is stronger and more stamina than my Henry at the time of the game, you can't kill the opponent with just one or two slashes on the chainmail with the Raddi sword... Even if you really kill, there shouldn't be any blood... Because this type of attack can't destroy the chainmail, and even if the opponent is killed, it will be due to blunt force internal injuries, not skin trauma...

Let's complain about the current web articles. They are all system articles. If you just fill up the attributes, it's a fool's errand. Also from the title of the book, such as: "From Recruit Egg to World Dominator", I knew that he would become the world ruler without even reading it, and there was no sense of mystery at all. And the names are the same as the old lady's foot wraps, each one smelly and long. The pure enjoyment version looks more comfortable. I have passed the age of watching Dark Blue and added some points, and it is templated. There is no difference between watching one movie and watching 100 movies. Except that the name of the protagonist has changed, the routine is still the same. I used to browse online literature websites, and I didn't know which one was good to watch. Now, when I browse the entire site, I just read the beginning and then discard it. Those who write well are all eunuchs.

I like the character of the protagonist very much. He is finally not a stereotypical time-traveler. I feel that most time-travelers speak quite intellectually.

If you have any comments, you can post them under this thread and I will read them.

The first is that the dream plot is too cumbersome. This is because many readers may have never played the game, so I have to explain it clearly. The second is for foreshadowing. I understand that everyone wants to see it more exciting, but foreshadowing is also essential. If I only If the plot of the dream is rushed through, the emotional impact of the Cuman massacre on the protagonist will be very weak. It is essential to suppress the excitement first. Only by depicting the warm daily life of this village can the impact on the protagonist after the Cumans destroy everything be highlighted. The second one is that the plot has not changed, it has no meaning and is not satisfying at all. What I want to say is that if Henry's parents had not died, Henry would not have embarked on the road of revenge, and all subsequent stories would not have happened. This is the most basic point, it cannot be circumvented, and it cannot be changed. Secondly, this is just the beginning of the dream. I cannot be like the Savior of the Kingdom of Heaven in the subsequent plots. I wrote the rescue mission like that, and I was just running errands for others every day Please have more faith in me. This is my first book, and I still have a bit of a literary problem. I want to write a good story seriously, not just a mindless and cool article. I have thought carefully about many of the opinions about dreams mentioned in the comment area. I have also revised the original manuscript of 70,000 to 80,000 words, and it has become 50,000 to 60,000 words. I have been very serious about streamlining the content of my novel. I am not just thinking about word count. In the end, I am sorry that everyone has to listen to me talk so much nonsense. Thank you again for your comments, encouragement and support.

Obviously this is a book that was written very seriously. Some suggestions: write less scene descriptions and more plots. After deleting too many battle descriptions of blood, fire, shields, and spears, the plot of this book seems very thin. The charm of Western fantasy lies in the characters and deeds. Fighting is to shape the image of the hero and describe the hero's deeds, not the other way around. What's more, there is no need to describe the battles that non-protagonists participate in in the book in such detail. The scenes of these people are all exactly the same, "tragic and tragic." There is no need to describe in detail how they died every time. Successful Western fantasy, such as Ice and Fire and Lord of the Rings, have few battles and only a few famous battles will make people impressed.

After seeing Chapter 27, the death of Henry's parents, I honestly don't want to read anymore. Previously, Henry's father Martin killed six Cuman soldiers in an instant, and then was killed by the Cuman commander directly on horseback with a knife in the back... The difference between your two results is too big, not to mention other things. It is impossible for a soldier to ignore the cavalry chasing behind him, and there is a horse behind him. Even if Martin turned around and resisted the cavalry attack to protect Henry's mother and was severely injured and died in the siege of Cuman soldiers, Henry's mother would be killed by an arrow shot by the Cuman pursuers. It would be much better than this hugely different outcome.

I feel that the author suppressed the human side's combat power a bit harshly. Although there is the glory of the Knights of the Sun fighting for blood, the author wrote that it was a disastrous defeat, which is... Hard to comment on. I still feel the same after re-reading it several times In addition, he keeps giving eye drops to the protagonist and setting up blood feuds. If As the plot develops, the protagonist's kingdom falls like Warcraft's Stormwind City in the First Orc War. It can only be said that the protagonist is quite incompetent and furious However, if the author has an idea, the protagonist's kingdom will explode and push the orcs.

It feels like many people feel that Henry is not valued by Raddi just because he is an illegitimate child. In fact, Radji is very precious to his son. The older generation of lords near Scaritz didn't know that Henry was Radji's eldest son. When Henry returned to the village to settle his parents in the first part, the second-in-command of Talmuburg personally led the team to find people. You must know that it was a war, and Davis was actually willing to divide his troops to rescue people when the enemy's situation was unknown. It is enough to see how much Radji valued his son. So in the first part, as long as you didn't commit too big a crime, you would just go to jail. And when Henry sneaked into the enemy camp and was caught by Istvan, he also made it clear that Raddi had already said that no matter who captured his good boy, he could get a large reward from him and never kill him. Including all the subsequent tasks, Radji won for Henry. He sincerely wanted to train himself, a great boy, to make him better and get more opportunities to climb up. Also, in the latest chapter, the young master was arrested because he had a fight with Henry and Hannash assigned the two of them to hunt. Otherwise, the young master would not have gone hunting without his entourage, or he would not have gone out at all, because Hannash would not have allowed him to go hunting at such a chaotic time. Hunting, In the first part, the young master also said that Hannash was very strict with him, not even giving him a little freedom, and always arranged a group of people to follow him, so at first I was still thinking about how the author planned to arrange the relationship with the young master, I was also thinking about whether the author would The protagonist will be arranged to trick the young master into becoming the deputy leader of his mercenary group. Because the young master himself wants to express himself, he wants Hannash to recognize him, so during the night attack on Tarmu Castle in the later part of the first part, the young master will actively apply to join the night attack team. And he is actually quite strong, regardless of whether he is His shooting skills, eloquence, and stealth are all very strong, and his status is very high. You don't even need to drag him to the battlefield to trick him into becoming the deputy captain. He is a very powerful companion in terms of logistics, and Hanash will really agree to it because of Raddi's face and the young master's persistence. Unexpectedly, the author still forcibly arranged for the young master to be captured by the Cumans. To be honest, it is quite disappointing, because it shows that even if there are changes, the author of the main line has not changed. Hey, I hope the author can think more about it, because what you should think about will be different depending on your position. Since the decision has been changed, then make bold changes, otherwise it will only be a tiger-headed and rat-tailed one, which will not please both sides.

Ah, I can't find pirated copies, ah ah!

The author's writing style is very good, and the atmosphere of western fantasy is also right... But the book is still not very good. The proportion of the main plot and the branch plot is unbalanced. From the perspective of chapters, by the time it is released, the main line accounts for up to 20% of the total chapters, and the rest are branch lines. Furthermore, the branch line is set to improve the main world, which is also quite contradictory... The main line has knights and orcs. Obviously, the level of world force is much higher than the branch line of heavenly salvation. Although the so-called force is not enough, it can be made up with skills, but I remember that after about 60 chapters, the author personally denied this---no matter how powerful the skills are, it is useless. The funniest thing here is that people around Pigfoot saw that Pigfoot had diligently practiced swordsmanship for more than ten years, and finally told Pigfoot... Brother, you practiced in vain 😂👉🤡👈 Pigfoot's father and his knights probably hate Pigfoot🤣 In short, I personally think that the main and branch plots of the author would be better if they were reversed: Henry, the son of the blacksmith, slept with him one night Suddenly, he began to dream. He dreamed that he was the eldest son of an armed baron on the border of a certain world. He had strictly trained his combat skills since he was a child, and encountered orcs and more powerful difficulties. He also improved his abilities through dreams, gave up the title of Thief Saint along the way, and began to rely on the experience of dreams to start an unparalleled push, and finally avenge his parents, the village, and Qingmei. What do you think of this? But to be honest, I actually want to see you kill orcs more than you write the game again, but unfortunately, I have to wait until you write chapter 1,000 and skip all the "Dreamland" heaven content. I estimate that only 200-300 chapters can be read... I think zz's writing is good, and I am also very interested in the main line of the book, but I feel that zz has no control over the original content. It is far inferior to the content of the adaptation. There are many bugs in the main plot. For example, the clown mentioned above has been practicing sword skills for more than ten years without being reminded by anyone around him. For example, he ran to the royal capital alone and inexplicably... Although I know it may be to echo the branch story of running to the wooden castle in his dream... For example, he went without evidence... Without his head, etc. Who would believe it? The platypus specimens were suspected to be fake at first... These arrangements were too deliberate. In short, the future is promising, just keep it, I hope it won't die.

As a player who has played Kingdom Come 1.2, I am already very familiar with the plot. If the dream plot is just a simple retelling of the game plot, there is no need to go into too much detail. So much so that I skipped it as soon as I saw the plot of the game. The protagonist finally woke up to advance the main line of reality, and fell asleep again in the blink of an eye. I don't know what the experience will be like for non-game players, but right now I feel like there is no prioritization. The best thing is that the plot is 91%. Just like Daogui, you can gain skills or physical improvements in dreams by advancing to key nodes, and the character arcs are also shown in key events to provide some tips for counterattacks in real desperate situations.

The author's writing style is quite good, but it's obvious that he is a newbie in online writing. The rhythm of the reality chapter is not good, and the connection between reality and dreams is basically invisible. This kind of writing usually involves getting all kinds of cheats in the dream, and then killing everyone in reality. Now I basically don't see the use of dream experiences.

You also need to write about the main world. Most people are attracted by your title of heavenly salvation, right?

Only for old bookworms, novices cannot eat fine chaff. If it can be grander and use plane wars to develop high-dimensional maps, it will be difficult to grandly narrate the world with low martial arts. It is easy to go in and drink tea. Reminds me of another top western fantasy "Sin City", with some shadows. Description of fate is difficult, involving cause and effect, character, and a sense of powerlessness over fate (almost the nightmare of all strong people). You can appropriately add group portraits and the suffocating feeling of suffering. The terrible thing about fate is that it always makes a joke to you inadvertently. It is a kind of constant struggle, constant facing of the unknown, and constant letting go. The road to heaven only requires legends, and the road to the strong is often filled with regret and loss. The more important it is, the more it will be lost. This work has some intensity, and it would be even better if it had more tragedy and staying power.

Whether it's plot design or character creation, the author's writing is very good, come on!

It's very beautiful, but the quantity is too small. I hope the author can work hard and update it.

I have caught up to the latest. The enemy is too powerful (the orcs are relatively weakened in the future. Since ordinary people can fight with stone spears, the orcs did not fight in the field at the beginning, nor did they rely on elite raids). Now the undead are actually resurrected in Valencia to build troops. The things obtained from dreams are too weak and do not widen the gap. There are great knights in this world (but no magic appears). Except for the protagonist Leon, the presence of others is too low. You can look at how to write "Let go of the witch". I suggest that Leon can continue to dream and use what he has learned in dreams to fight against strong enemies in reality. The elves are not handled well and they directly become enemies (I originally thought there would be a plot of elves and dwarves fighting the undead). The war scenes are well written. There is also a delicate sense of urban life, and the sense of fragmentation in the dream world is too strong. It has a sense of insanity. Leon now feels like a tool man. At heart he is a brave man who protects mankind. It is superficial.

Is this plot of asking for help too hasty?

Readers who are interested in the Lord's article and have passed the video game of Heavenly Salvation are here to appear! The author's writing is really good. The male protagonist's behavior is very reasonable. There are not many male protagonists who have a sense of responsibility and upright views. However, I have said but, it is the most discussed topic in the comment area. The proportion of the two worlds is not prioritized. At the beginning, I read both worlds seriously. By the time I got to Chapter 49, I had already started reading. I started to crazily jump into the plot of Kingdom of Heaven to save the world, maybe because the world of Leon is full of crises, and the world of Henry has just lost its family, and the anxiety is doubled, which is very tiring. And because I know Henry's world, I am more eager to see how the road of Leon's world will go. I feel that the plot of Henry's world is a bit like an old lady's foot wrap, and I have lost my desire to read. In short, the author's writing is really good. The Knight Lord article is well written and very precious. I hope the teacher can go further. Come on, author! Recommended votes for you

I read the latest chapter in one go. It's so well written. Do you have a group to talk about?

[Notes written at the top] Since I personally tend to read novels and experience the joys and sorrows experienced by the characters, in my rating, the protagonist's character, behavioral logic, spiritual core, and the portrayal of emotions and characters in the book will play a major role in the conclusion of the book review. If your reading style is different, please ignore my subjective judgment and make your own assessment based on the reviews. [Character] (Protagonist) I like the character of the protagonist of this book very much, and I feel very immersed in it, so I can give it a high evaluation. The protagonist is a local, not a time-traveler, but he has a more correct outlook than the time-travelers in some novels. He has goals, knows how to measure, and knows how to advance and retreat. The protagonist written in this novel truly has a "soul", unlike some ordinary protagonists who keep asking for things but cannot fill the emptiness in their hearts. Although the protagonist in this book is powerful and talented, he is more like a human being, a person with growth, feelings and flesh and blood, rather than a mask for the author's desires. (About the sense of substitution: Most people talk about bringing themselves into the protagonist, thinking that the protagonist is themselves, and using their own three views and principles to deal with the problems encountered by the protagonist. This kind of introduction is essentially treating the protagonist as a fill-in-the-blank question, and arrogantly filling in oneself; I think the real introduction should be to bring the protagonist into oneself, review the protagonist's experience and thoughts, and regard the protagonist as oneself, standing from the perspective of others, not oneself.) (Supporting Characters) This book has a rich supporting cast, whether it is the salvation side of heaven or the main world side. Best of all, no Facebook! Each of the main supporting characters is a "human", with flesh and blood, capable of fear, pride, shortcomings and advantages. You can feel that this is a world, not a game dedicated to the protagonist. [Plot] The plot is easy to summarize, that is, the protagonist is killed by his relatives and then takes revenge. However, the protagonist has plans and ideas, not just a passion. In addition, the author's detailed description of battles and emotions makes the simple plot not monotonous. That's about it. It's mainly because I forgot what I was going to write as I wrote (laughs) This is my first time to post a long comment. If there are any mistakes in wording and sentence making that make you feel offended, please bear with me.

Brothers, I am Shennong, this is really good grass, for me, this is even fairy grass. The switching back and forth between Heavenly Salvation and the protagonist's own world is not abrupt, but just right. The two worlds also give this book a broad perspective, giving this book a lot to write about. So far, this book is really to my liking. The heroine is also quite good. She is gentle and smart, and her identity can bring a lot of help to the protagonist.

Both the writing skills and the character creation are very good, and there are no bad points. At most, there are some small details that can make people complain, but they have little impact. The only problem may be that the author writes very carefully, and some readers are not patient enough to read it. I feel that this book is different from other cool short-term novels, and it is suitable for old bookworms.

This is my favorite book recently. The theme is my favorite medieval aristocracy + heavenly salvation. It is real and logical. I really like the depiction of reality. The depiction in dreams is also very enjoyable after the plot breaks out. The only regret is that it is too short. In terms of content, I feel that it is the book that best suits my taste! ! !