American Comics: My Sling Ring Lets Me Transmigrate Between Worlds

Gwen is really miserable. Basically, when the screenwriters change, they also change the partners. From Peter to the little black spider who is the DEI screenwriter, there was a period of time when he had a son and daughter with Norman Osborn (yes, the old one). They were like a useful footcloth and were thrown wherever they were useful. Fortunately, the Golden Retriever became the president to interrupt this process. Otherwise, according to the urine of mice, it would be a lesbian next time 🤫

Hey ~ Adasi! In the desert of words, you have planted the oasis! The mountain of flames on the tip of the pen makes people's hearts boil! Turning to the first page of your novel, ouch - the eagles on the Kumtag Peak folded their wings when they saw it, and said: "This story of Balangzi is more translucent than the snow in the Tianshan Mountains!" The sweetness of the raisins in the sentences, the smell of the baked buns in the paragraphs, read chapter by chapter - the sandstorm in Taklimakan is not as fast as your plot! One second the tears flowed like the Tarim River, the next second the smile turned into the mouth of a split cantaloupe! In the movie theater in the reader's mind, you are a director, a lighting engineer and a ticket seller! The old elm tree in the next village chewed your book three times, and the leaves rustled while learning inverted sentences; the moon in the Pamir Plateau finished reading the finale, and its round face was so ashamed that it hid in the clouds - it was said that it was more interesting than the legend it made up! Imagination that the eagle cannot fly, and power of writing that cannot be contained in the Turpan Basin! Adasi, the glutton in the reader's stomach, has already lined up to go to Colorful Beach!

The author's writing is so sweet. At first glance, it looks like a fragrant and soft little Nanliang pinch😋

If you have any comments or suggestions, please post them here and I will take a look. Please speak rationally and scold me with tonic, otherwise I will be happy. Thank you.

First stack the buffs. Since I have been writing recently, I have been scanning the new books that have just been added to the library, learning advanced experiences and improving my own shortcomings. You don't need to look for my book, it's terrible, 30,000 words and 11 collections, it's been added to the cross-section, but I think it will be cut after cross-over. Let's talk about the shortcomings first: I only read the first four chapters, because I am not very obsessed with American comics. The last time I read American comics, or in other words, when I read the most American comics, it should be that Marvel was at its most popular, around the time (Revenge 3) was released. Now that it has been many years, to be honest, it may be because it has lost its freshness and the sense of substitution is not strong. Especially in the first three chapters, the author also likes to play the Riddler. The Golden Finger does not explain clearly, or may not even exist. The hanging ring is just a means of transportation. The pace is too slow. Considering that some people in the comment area said it was an alien demon, it is understandable. After all, it has its own fans. Let's talk about the writing style that is most praised in the comment area. To be honest, it's not bad, that's all. I think authors who have a million-word book at the starting point can write it, as long as they want to. The author likes to use simple details and actions to show off his writing style. However, the text is too bloated and the pace is very slow. The first chapter seems to explain a lot of things, but in fact, various irrelevant details account for most of it. I have read a lot of books recently, and I agree more and more with that sentence. Advanced writing is not about showing off skills, but about rhythm. The best writing is about emotion. Let's talk about the advantages: To be honest, the author does not seem to be writing about fan fiction, but more like writing about legends and immortals. The pace is slow, there are many foreshadowings, and the writing style is steady. The character of the protagonist is equal to the author's experience. This simple writing style, you can tell at a glance that it is Lao Jianghu. The character design of the pig's trotters is also more popular among Laobai readers. As long as the author keeps a steady pace, this kind of book is the easiest to order by the thousands, and even high-quality books. The only problem is to get through the early stage. Although it is said to be outside the territory, it has been put into the warehouse since the 7th, and it has less than 300 collections. It is just a small fan at most. If you think about it carefully, I have all the problems you just mentioned. Oh, let's not talk about it anymore, we still have to learn and make progress. Encouragement with the author.

It was not kindness, but naivety that Peter cringed at. Basically just a character. For example, the problems in Gotham are not just about work and food. The underlying reason is that the multi-level demon Barbatos wants to form a Batman team to help him invade the multiverse. Peter's problem is that he only raises questions but cannot solve the actual problems. So he took all the blame.

Is the protagonist a bit too weak? The plot is indeed excellent, and all the members have online IQs, but the protagonist's expressiveness is a flaw. As far as the protagonist's abilities are concerned, not to mention conceptual-level bosses, it is impossible to fight head-on against speed-type or telekinesis-type abilities. The plot written by the author in which the protagonist travels across the world is indeed exciting, but every time the protagonist travels across the world, he will be involved in an incident that could easily kill him. , After a lot of hard work, there is not much benefit, and I feel that the effort and reward are not equal. Now I feel that the protagonist is a brick, and it needs to be moved wherever it is. The author is not writing a cool article. It is understandable that the protagonist needs development in the early stage, but as the main line progresses, the protagonist will still be in this state, and the plot will appear like ordinary people who are 50-50 and can have some minor accidents. To be honest, Marvel and DC have all the big guys running around writing these two together. When comparing the strength of the protagonist, it is already a bit depressing. The plot of the confrontation with the Night Stalker feels a bit abusive. Will the strength of the protagonist be improved in the future? To be honest, at least the protagonist must have some life-saving trump cards that can help him travel across the world and not be killed by the boss instantly. He can't really rely on the so-called halo of the protagonist to almost be killed every time, but in the end he can save his life.

Don't wait, it's been half a month and it's probably a pigeon. I have read that many authors take a leave of absence and do not update for a long time. If they update again, they will inform them that they will stop writing at all or start a new book.

I am the milk dragon

So in which chapter is the plot so sweet that only a young boy can write it?