Call of the Pirates: Starting with the Triple Devil Fruit

Is the author capable of writing such a super hodgepodge? This hodgepodge world view is 99% eunuch. Is there any finished one? The writing is indeed good, but there are too many elements. I'm curious if it will collapse after two or three hundred chapters?

When I saw the triple in the title of the book, I thought of this triple Andy Lau😁

Pirates, delicacies and hunters are easier to sew Dragon Ball... I feel like I can't sew them together

Your writing is too messy. How about writing world by world, driving a boat to each world or island to adventure one by one, and then dragging your favorite characters on the boat to continue the adventure? It would be better than writing a mess, and it would have a wider audience. If you write the main plot as a fusion of the world view, each anime world exists in the form of various large island continents, and then the protagonist drives the Ark Proverbs to such a world to adventure. Don't write any system or the like, just write that the protagonist has a special physique. Big Mom's steel balloon and Blackbeard's physique are both there. Writing that the protagonist has a special physique is not inconsistent in the world of pirates. Also write some weird character summoning cards. You rely on this to summon your crew, which seems even more meaningless. Then why do you want to go to sea? Most people's definition of adventure is to see different scenery, meet different people, make different friends, and have fun fighting. This summoning card of yours has taken away most of the fun.

If I really want to write about multiple worlds, I might as well go with the infinite flow and go through them one by one, and write a linkage to sew them into one world. In the early stage of Dragon Ball, there are gods, Piccolo, various martial artists, and prisoners of delicious food. Who does the author think the Neptunes in the Windless Zone can stop? In a world with high combat power and high technology, pirates cannot find the sea area. The pirates' natives drove a sailboat to find and establish diplomatic relations. It is true that Ni Ge opened a kayak and discovered aliens, which started the age of navigation👍🏻

Attracted by the hodgepodge of world views and poisoned by the mysterious operations in the book, the protagonist leaves the Whitebeard Pirates to create his own pirate group. This is an inevitable plot, and the writing on this aspect is indeed good. Here comes the problem. To create a pirate group, one must accept his subordinates, but the author made a mysterious operation. In the plot of Sky Island, the original character (Eniru) in the original work was not accepted, but a self-created female warrior of Sky Island was accepted instead. This kind of plot is the fan fiction plot that I hate the most. Personally, I can never accept self-created characters in fan fiction. Otherwise, what kind of fan fiction would I read? Just go and read the original novel. And I believe that readers who read fan fiction will definitely accept the original character more than a self-created character. Of course, I admit that I have selfish motives, because Enel is a character that I really like to be. It doesn't matter whether I accept it or not, but I still can't accept a self-created character in a fan fiction.

If it's just a simple world of pirates, or if you clear the world of pirates and then switch to the manga, you'd still be interested in reading it. If you make a hodgepodge, it's really like a hammer in the east and a hammer in the west, and the road is unsteady, so I want to run away. Write a world first, look at the results, and then decide whether to switch to the manga or not.

Why do novice authors always want to run before they can walk? I can't write anything in a fan world, but I always want to create a hybrid world. Can you first think about whether you have such writing skills? Especially the world view of Dragon Ball where the combat power is broken.

Your three fruits... My evaluation is that they are not as good as the natural Thunder Fruit + Superman Magnetic Fruit + Animal Thunder God Fruit (Greek Zeus, Nordic Thor, Chinese Thunder Dragon God, etc.). These three together directly rotate through the magnetic field. If you want to play with values, play with the strongest numerical monster.

Dark, Shadow, Vampire Darkness, Underworld, Vampire all will do. Make a thunderous noise. It's a bit mismatched🙄

I don't quite understand why the protagonist wants the vampire fruit. Are dragons, phoenixes and unicorns not domineering enough? Also, the original book has the Big Buddha Fruit. Are there not enough Eastern Immortals and Western Gods for you to choose from? It's really awkward to watch vampires paired with thunder and lightning.

If you want three devil fruits, you must choose the ones that match each other. The natural thunder-type, superman-type magnetic type, and a fantasy beast type with thunder and lightning abilities. I think it is very good.

None of the three golden chapters attracts the desire to read further, and is the author sure that he can grasp the integration of multiple worlds?

After reading two pages, I advise the author to just cut it off. Continuing to write about this worldview will only be a waste of time. It is better to start a new book and write it well. Of course, I only suggest that the author has the final say in his book.

The main character's name made me think he was a saint.

Location: The square in front of Orochi Castle in the Flower City Time: The third week after Oden started dancing naked Kaido had nothing to do, and flew over with his cadres to see how Orochi was ruling. The square was surrounded by people who laughed at, scorned, and threw leaves. Center of the field—— Kozuki Oden, naked, jumping up and down, giggling while jumping. Kaido had no expression on his face: "... Huh, idiot. It's really embarrassing for a strong man to do this." Jin whispered: "Lord Kaido, although this man is strong, his mind is disabled, so there is nothing to be afraid of." Kaido was about to nod, but suddenly his eyes widened. As the crowd in the square gave way, another person slowly walked up to Oden. A bloated body, entangled with shadows, and disheveled hair—— It is Moonlight Moria. He had just recovered from the serious injuries suffered by Kaido's annihilation team. His face was still pale, and his eyes should have been malicious, crazy, and heroic. Results. Moriah took a deep breath. Take off your clothes. Stand next to Oden. Follow Oden's rhythm and jump, jump, swing your arms and giggle together. The movements are uniform. The two of them were like a pair of dolls whose brains had been pulled out. The whole place was silent for a second. Kaido: "...?" Jhin: "...?" Quinn: "Huh? Isn't that the pirate who fought with us before?" The flesh on Kaido's face tightened a little bit. He has seen countless strong men, lunatics, heroes, and cowards in his life. Never seen this before. Kaido's heart went crazy and the screen flashed: Is that Moria? Moriah who dares to fight me head-on and not retreat even to the death of the whole team? I beat you to a pulp once, and now you dance naked with Oden and pretend to be stupid? Forget it if one person is stupid, two top strong men should be stupid together? Kaido suddenly took half a step back, and Hachisai gave him a heavy meal. "... There is something wrong with this country." "It's not the people who have the problem, it's the land." Jhin was stunned: "Lord Kaido?" Kaido's voice was low, serious, and even a little frightened: "I have seen all kinds of strange things in the new world. Curses, viruses, evil spirits that can turn strong people into idiots in batches... This country of Wano has that kind of thing." He stared at the duo of Oden + Moria who were still dancing, and his back felt cold. "Oden was normal at first, but he became stupid when he came back from the sea. Moriah was fierce before, but when he came to Wano, he became stupid." "This is a contagious intelligence-destroying virus." When Quinn heard this, his eyes instantly lit up, and he took a half-step forward with excitement: "There is really such a virus!! Can I study it!!!" "Hmm~~~!!!"×2 Kaido's Hachijie was already raised high, and Jhin's knife was instantly placed on Quinn's neck. Quinn was instantly frightened and jumped up and down with an awkward smile on his face: "Ah~~hahahaha! I suddenly thought that my red bean soup is still on the fire! If I don't leave, it will turn into red bean paste!" Jin said expressionlessly: "Let's go." Kaido made a decision immediately, turned around and flew high into the sky, his voice trembling with coldness: "Give up the country of Wano. Evacuate immediately, immediately, all of them. No one is allowed to come near this place, no one is allowed to contact Kozuki, and no one is allowed to contact anyone from the country of Wano." "I don't want to dance naked with them one day." Jhin and Quinn immediately followed. (Jack has not yet joined the team at this time, so he is not present) That day. All members of the Beast Pirates broke camp, retreated from the island, and disappeared without a trace. The liberation of Wano. The people looked at the two shirtless people dancing with bewildered expressions.

There are too many additional characters and there are too many dialogues between Xiaoyu and Jackie Chan. Although they have been restored, they are very tiring to watch.

There is a saying that it's just a hodgepodge, and it's not like I don't have the desire to try it out. Maybe it's not but the introductory directory "Ancient Sleeping Town" was the last weight to persuade me to give up. I don't know where the author saw the translation or what he thought. I can't get used to it.

Soul Thunder Vampire, how come this combination seems to have been seen before?

No, I still want to say something. A book on the Renren Fruit has been developed, but the Big Buddha Fruit is not available? One Piece is just like Big Bear and Brother Ming's fruit development. A world of pirates that is all about imagination. In addition to combustion and magnetism, the first choice is the Big Buddha. Not to mention the many levels, multiple abilities, good, evil, and many bosses. If you create the Holy King of Heavenly Wheel, there is nothing you can do except Dragon Balls and other super-standard ones. You can't recommend it! There are a lot of super-standard Buddhisms!

The entire ancient species, the Super Saiyan Fruit

Your writing skills are almost useless, so you have to take your time and figure out the logical structure.