Immortality: I Have an Altar of Destiny

At the beginning, the protagonist is practicing Qi on the fourth level, and in the middle is Nascent Soul Kung Fu and spiritual root improvement. There are a lot of scattered things. Although the plot is only a few days old, it is still the fourth level of Qi training at 60 chapters. The article is not refreshing at all. What should I do?

Chapter 60: Still practicing Qi 4

Harvesting karma depends on a blind cat killing a mouse. How can you use your golden finger without any logic and clever operations? A demon cultivator is a demon cultivator, not a brainless fool. What you write is the same as a dungeon spawning monsters and a running account. If it doesn't feel good, how can it attract people?

Some of the data written by the author are really ridiculous. First of all, the sphere of influence controlled by the sect where the protagonist is located is hundreds of millions of miles away. I searched on AI how big it is, and the result is that it has exceeded the size of the solar system. The sect has only been passed down for more than two thousand years.

Why don't you practice in the sect? Are you very good at carrying huge sums of money when you go out? Why do you do this?

Harvesting the world, major events, or destiny protagonists are the ways to use this golden finger.

The manifestation of the power of cause and effect is also a kind of chance. The protagonist can understand it when he is strong.

Actually, as long as you update more often, any problem will be no problem.

There is a problem with the author's thinking. Can't the protagonist learn alchemy and talismans? How much cause and effect can be stirred up by selling these things? ? There are many things that can be done that are troublesome but not dangerous, but the author just chooses to go out to do the task. I am speechless. Is the author's imagination so bad?

The writing was good at the beginning, but when it came to the garrison mission, it was no longer good. Is the power of cause and effect so simple? You can trade with others or go on missions with fellow students, so why do you do missions? Just open a shop and the power of cause and effect comes. In short, the idea is good, but the writing by Goldfinger is too vulgar.

It is recommended that the power of cause and effect be more difficult to obtain. For example, if the protagonist kills other immortal cultivators or signs a life-and-death contract at the beginning, it is too easy to obtain it and it will easily collapse.

Bland, not very attractive

The protagonist has always had a bullish mentality. He should be decisive but not decisive. He is submissive.

The main character is a little bit short-sighted in the writing.

Very well written, keep up the good work

It feels too immature 😒 In many ways, he doesn't look like a mature cultivator. His behavior and behavior are like those of a student party

Why can I write so boringly?

What? The goods on the street stalls can become treasures, which means that the world traveled through is a low-dimensional world, which means it is a novel. The protagonist is the person in the picture.

Borrowing precious treasures to push the book, "I will clean up the Tibetan Scripture Pavilion at the beginning, and I will complete the incomplete skills." Mortal flow, Gou Dao flow, IQ will not decrease if IQ is online, the protagonist's magical power refers to ancient magic: a wonderful pen creates a dragon, scattering beans to form an army, dividing the ground to form a river, etc. Interested Taoist friends can take a look. If you are bothering me, please contact me. [Asking mortals to recommend each other's authors]

How should I put it, I feel like the writing is a bit unsmooth, but everything else is fine.

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