Opening a Branch School Next to Hogwarts

They made grand promises, opening a school comparable to Hogwarts, but all they got was Hermione. Even if you teach Hermione to be incredibly brilliant, it's still not a school.

The concept is good, the writing is passable, but the characters' behavioral logic is fatally flawed. Some plot points feel very contrived, and the characters' behavioral logic is built up very weakly in order to advance the story. It's the kind of thing that's okay if you don't look into it closely, but will collapse if you think about it even a little. In short, the lower limit is high, but the upper limit is low.

The content is too short and lacks depth. More content would be better. The downsides are that Hermione is the only student and the course lacks structure. There should be at least three students, then they should be divided into classes. The curriculum shouldn't follow the Hogwarts system; instead, classes should be divided according to normal magic types.

It's well-written, but having only one student seems odd; it doesn't feel like a proper lesson.

Instead of opening a school, why don't you open a tutoring center next to Hogwarts? A "Defense Against the Dark Arts Tutoring Center," start by teaching Harry to defeat Voldemort, then you can apply to Hogwarts as a Defense Against the Dark Arts professor.

... Just one student and you call that opening a school? Isn't this just taking on an apprentice? If it were a real school with many students, that would be somewhat interesting, but with just one student, it's called a master-apprentice relationship. You're just using the gimmick of opening a school and writing about a master-apprentice system... Is this clickbait?

It's too wordy. I don't know if the author wants to write about nurturing a character or building an academy. The current content is too weak. Dozens of chapters are still focusing on one character instead of figuring out how to develop the academy. Why not just write about a master-disciple relationship? That would be more interesting!

Each chapter follows its title, then it's all the same old stuff. This isn't an ocean full of water, this is the Milky Way...

At first, it felt quite novel, since I hadn't expected a branch campus to exist. The portal from Marvel's Doctor Strange didn't seem to conflict with anything, and the addition of the wandering swordsman and the Celestials was tolerable. However, the more I read, the more verbose it became.

There are no major flaws, but numerous minor ones. After chapter 100+, there are practically no comments, indicating that no one has chosen to continue reading! The only positive is that it's free for a limited time. 😃