A Sanxian

This work is published on the same platform as many well-known online novel authors such as Chen Dong, Home Pig, Diving Squid, Foxtail's Pen, Tiancan Tudou, I Eat Tomatoes, and Get Out.

After reading Chapter 1, I forgot about this one. It was a bit unappetizing. I can look forward to the next one. It can be said that except for a few historical Internet articles, most Internet articles that involve human dynasties are quite embarrassing. . Alas, there are specialties in the art field. If you really have ideas, you might as well just write historical articles. By the way, if you are interested in historical articles, you can read the new books in July, Qin Li, Han Que, Spring and Autumn I am the King. They are all beautiful and in-depth historical articles. It is a pity that the author died young.

It feels like a robot is writing, without any vitality at all

It's not like telling a story or a biography, haha

From the first chapter of this novel, the author gave me the feeling that the relationship between plot and characters was confused. Although writing uses plot to express characters, the vivid feeling of the characters is first expressed by the character traits of the characters themselves. The logic here is like wearing clothes. When a person looks good in clothes, first of all, it is because the person himself looks good, which is pleasing to the eye of the person looking at him. The style of clothing can only be decent and flattering at best. And a monster with a distorted and deformed body will only look weird, funny, and even terrifying no matter what clothes it puts on. Only when the characters are well established and the logical structure is reasonable and normal, can some shocking plot scenes truly play a decorative role. Don't bother with the full-frequency broadcast of the golden elixir period. The plot logic of this kind of thing is really untenable. Cluttering this kind of plot will only make it impossible to express the characters, and even contradict themselves. Just like some bad Hollywood movies, all kinds of inexplicable creative difficulties are flirted with, then I am moved to a nervous breakdown, and then talk about the power of love that is stronger than everything, and then wrap up the dumplings, and finally end hastily. This kind of bad movie story with only special effects to watch would not last long in a novel, and it would not make any money. Brother, you have already written so many words at the starting point. You've already mastered this kind of literary and antique style, so you can't say that you're just a novice, right? You can't just write it just for fun, right? To be honest, I quite like this kind of writing style that seems to be frigid. After all, this is indeed more in line with my imagination of immortals who eat the wind and drink the dew. But it's really worrying that you're just messing around with the plot, and you can't make any logical transitions. Stop digging a little bit, bro, let's finish the character creation first, okay? If you really don't know what kind of plot to write and refine, let's just copy it and don't refer to books like "Lan Ke Qi Yuan", "I Didn't Want to Become an Immortal", and "The Great Way to the Sky" which are somewhat similar. Finally, I hope you will revise this book well. Clarify the plot logic, select detailed story content, and determine the character's personality characteristics. Don't dig holes blindly. Maybe you can make money by putting it on the shelves?

At first I thought the protagonist was the baby, but it turned out. . .

Vernacular Romance is a good book for those who like it

It's actually well written, and the writing has a bit of a retro feel.