Douluo: On-Hook System, Teaching the World

After reading 5 chapters, I didn't understand any of my writing. Instead, I wrote a lot of narrations about the original plot...

There are too many narrations, talking about various things in the original work, but too little description of the protagonist.

I feel that the few books you have written have too many narrations, too many explanations, and too few real-life descriptions. For example, in this book, the protagonist was taken to kill the soul beast, and he only wrote a few sentences, and then there were long paragraphs of narration and explanations.

Uh-huh, everyone who writes this kind of Douluo novels has a problem. They like to increase the IQ of Tang's continent, and they like to add endless obstacles to the protagonist's path. No buddy, I came to read a book not to see the endless obstacles on my face, but to feel good. I was just about to feel good in chapter 63. I could develop and grow first, and then a ferocious beast brushed my face. I knew it would definitely be solved but I didn't want to read anymore. Think about it for yourself. It can be said that the protagonist has been being determined in so many chapters. He could obviously develop to the point where he can make his own decisions, but he threw himself into the whirlpool of being determined. It makes people laugh.

Not bad,,, it has been good, almost 100 pictures, and there is no content at all. It's amazing.,,, The protagonist has been trying to kill himself from the beginning, and he is still self-righteous. It's inexplicable. The plug-in can't be used yet. It's written like this.,,, It's also a talent., I can't even tell whether you are mass-produced by a studio or Ai, and you can still send it out without writing anything., The author is amazing

It's so ridiculous, it's like writing an outline and then using AI to expand the sentences. I ramble on and on, wishing I could explain the solar system to you just by looking at the sun, and give you a science introduction to the composition of air after taking a breath.

Rubbish, really. The protagonist is idle and is still joking with his own life. In order to prevent Xiao Wu from exposing himself, he gambles with his own life. Please, for a hundred thousand years, a pig will not be stupid even if it lives for only one hundred thousand years. During this period, how many people have been killed and eaten too much? Young beasts, a cold-hearted group, The original book likes Tang San, not because of blood attraction, or directly, someone controls it, Anyway, I want to persuade him to quit, The protagonist has cheats, a prophet, and is very likely to become a god and live forever, and you bet on this?

I don't even know how to comment. First I said that I would compete with Tang San for the divine throne, but now I'm saying that I don't want to compete with the God Realm, and I will become a traitor 🤔

Garbage within garbage, more garbage

After watching it, I felt like I had a headache. We found a small amount of plot in the large amount of analysis and settings in the book. The protagonist is not important, the setting is not important, and the analysis is the most important.

Chen Shushu, have you considered setting up a group? I feel like your writing is getting worse and worse now. The real world novel is really the best Genshin Impact fanfic I have ever read.

The text is poor and very verbose. I don't know what I'm writing.

Tang Hao has exceeded the ability, IQ and subordinates of the original work Tang Hao is a love-minded lone wolf who can fight. In order to reasonably strengthen Tang Hao, to balance the situation, and to make the plot almost unchanged from the original work, let The protagonist can only play other people's trash behind the scenes It's good, this kind of slow-burn development is mediocre, and it is written in a direction that is one million words longer than the original work I was so bored that I fell asleep, so I ran away 😴

I just feel like it's not long enough to write. . . The author who set up the phobia is a patchwork of things like Douluo. . . You'll get tired soon

There is something wrong with the logic of this book. Since you knew that if you stayed, you would get a hammer, why did you insist on staying? You said it was for the resources of Wuhun Palace. But after you took a hammer, you told me that you didn't think about the reason for your survival at all, so you could only follow the soul beast.

The setting is good, but the plot is crappy. It's better to buy an outline for an author who has the ability to conceive plots and make a fortune.

6. BYD won't continue writing Xingtie even if he writes about Douluo

As a fanfic, the creativity is actually okay, but the narration has too many thoughts, and it feels like I am reading a very long composition in the style of narrative➕argumentation 😥

I have an idea, how could God Shura randomly choose a successor? He might have extracted his memories before he became a god, mixed in a bunch of messy knowledge about immortal grass techniques and other things, and created another self. Generally speaking, after all, the only person he trusts the most is himself, so he can get rid of the gods. After taking the throne, I can still keep in touch with the God Realm, and I can come back when I want. After all, I am a main god. When I leave, I can't give up the connections I have cultivated for many years. By the way, Tang San and the other seven people will become gods and then take the gods of their own faction with them. Otherwise, this attitude towards Tang San will be too outrageous. He is closer than his biological father.

The author's writing is good. Logically speaking, the number of readers should be much higher than it is now. I don't know why it is so bleak. I personally feel that it is much better than other Douluo fandoms in fighting monsters and upgrading to acquire girls. I feel that the characters are well created. Although the connection and conversion of the writing still need to be polished, the flaws are not hidden, and it still feels pretty good after reading it slowly.

At least finish writing it 😭

I bit the bullet and read more than 20 chapters. It was chaotic and jumping thinking. All the characters had the same personality and image. Stop writing, newbie.

To be honest, you don't understand what he is talking about in the early stage, and then you will feel very tired after listening to it later.

This book feels like a person talking to himself, always trying to convince himself from various aspects, wanting to write down everyone's thoughts and inner activities in a pure and beautiful way, wanting to find reasons for everything he does, but I am too tired to read it, and I don't understand what is being said. The plot is slow and full of nonsense.

It's a very profound book. It's a pity that it's gone. I discovered it too late.