Douluo Laid the Foundation, Waves in the Sky

Author, you who wrote Zhu Tianwen just killed Tang San in this competition, and then fucked Shura, and then Zhu Tianwen became invincible. Don't be so cheap and annoying. You have been writing for so long, and there is no climax. It is just mediocre. What are you doing? Tang San is obviously so disgusting, just because you want you to write so disgusting. If you kill them, why are you dragging your feet now? You still hide your level and hide a ball. Just kill them all in one go in the finals.

It's well written, but it's a little offbeat in some places. For example, in the latest chapter, Xueer, you also know that in some fantasy worlds, there are spiritual chefs and herbal chefs. And you don't stop writing, which is very uncomfortable to watch. You didn't fix the quotation marks in the dialogue. You can break up a few more chapters. Overall, the writing is good.

You have to worry about this Under One Person. Even if you write about a dragon, it will be better than Under One Person.

I hope you can stop licking Bibi Dong, the little fairy, and let her die. Don't accept such white-eyed wolves. It's so disgusting to see that there are so many good women in the world, why do they have to wash themselves like this?

The author worked hard and spent tens of thousands of words in the previous chapters to give the protagonist so many awesome settings and background. In fact, you don't have to work so hard. You can just summarize the protagonist in four words: "All your wishes come true"

Not segmented? Is such a long paragraph appropriate?

Byd AI's water-filling writing is so verbose

Obscene, small vision, no imagination, not as good as AI

After reading so much, I still don't want to deal with Tang San, so I'll say goodbye

The three golden chapters are just a mess.

How should I put it? When the main combat force is Ye Fan's Perfect World, Tang Chen and Tang San can still be used as cannon fodder. You can understand how ugly this book is.

The first three chapters have been identified as self-interest stories, and they have been setting up nonsensical wishes.

Like the title, I suspect the author has never left the ivory tower and entered the society to work...

There are too many fandoms under one person, and the quality is poor, and now it has become disgusting.

The shortcomings in the book can be summed up as taking it too much for granted, and the logic behind many behaviors cannot withstand deep thought. This is a common problem among newcomers.

The first few chapters are so wordy that I don't want to read them. The first few chapters are so wordy that they talk to themselves and make people irritated and hard to watch.

It's so difficult, a lot of private orders and popular science. Listening to the book gives me a headache

Although it doesn't look like it was written by AI, we want to say that the author is purely venting his negative emotions. There are a lot of verbose things at the beginning that don't get to the point. Apart from a bunch of negative emotions, nothing else can be seen.

After looking at five or six pictures, I didn't find it interesting at all. I threw out a bunch of setting collections and people ran away. I don't know what the author is thinking. Just write the plot. You can adjust some things later. If you throw out the settings from the first 10 chapters in one breath, what are you thinking? The person has already run away and disappeared.

The author's stereotype of other Douluo fans is that of Li Tangliu. So I'm more curious about when was the last time the author read Douluo fanfics?

It's too high-spirited to practice martial arts. If nothing else, the levels of the two worlds are different. The martial arts practitioners are still digesting food to develop their internal strength, while the people next door are directly absorbing the spiritual energy of heaven and earth, and using the spiritual energy and blood in their bodies to develop their magic power. Just like things weighing one pound, one pound of cotton and one pound of iron, cotton is just like wool

As the title says, his nonsense is like an ocean, and it releases more water than Itachi Uchiha did when he beat Sasuke.

I want to write about everything, but I can't write anything well.

The first three pictures feel like they are written in a very ancient way, they feel very stable, but they also feel very messy. I made a bunch of powerful settings and added a lot of restrictions. I added a stable character to the protagonist but couldn't let it go. Most people in the same genre either start the game at the beginning, or directly cheat to rise to the top. Here, they will directly fight with themselves first. He looks a little tired, like a neither fat nor thin person who is carefully overeating to lose weight.

The material is pretty good, and the front part feels okay. But the first woman should be the emotional scene between Dugu Yan and Ye Lingling. There is almost no writing about these two, so what is the meaning of these two in your collection? At the end, the small head controls the big head, and the girl is attracted wildly.

Come back with a curse, just in time to fight Nuo continent.

Recommend a million-word niche book "I Can Go to the Past and the Future". The first chapter is voiced by a female loli author. It is a male-channeled light novel. Hot-blooded adventures are interspersed with daily love affairs. The floating city in the interstellar era is the world view, and the magic potion sublimation + sequence is the core timeline setting text. The plot is interlocking with the plot, and there are many foreshadowings such as grass snakes and gray lines. There are no bloody routines and brainless plots. It is easy, interesting and semi-invincible. If you are interested, you can read it,

The level is uncertain, and can be considered from quasi-spiritual grass to quasi-food grass Settings: relatively complete, with advanced plug-ins and advanced mechanisms, but the routines are generally old routines, but the blending is pretty good. Writing: A bit self-talking, but you can see signs of progress. Secondly, the writing level is a bit old-fashioned and needs to continue to improve. Plot line: Excellent, has its own thinking, and the exciting brain circuits are also fun. Overall evaluation: You can read it if it is constantly updated. The prerequisite is that you are not picky about the writing style and do not mind if the author talks a little bit to himself. If you are not picky about food, you can count it as a magical herb, which is quite fun to watch. If there is a request, it can only be enough food and grass to be full.

What about group chats? There have been no live broadcasts recently. Have you become a vase?

Although it is quite to my liking, there are still many flaws 1. There are a lot of settings in front 2. A long paragraph of despair, densely packed at a glance 3. Silently muttering to himself, how did I come up with it?