Doomsday: I Build an Infinite Train

How many people came to see the train farm, climb technology trees and fight monsters? It doesn't matter if the pace is tighter. The result is written like this set of human internal fighting and superpowers, and the dream goes back to ten years ago. Ten years ago, there was a front line where the protagonist stabilized the villain and whoever messed with me was killed. What was this about? The protagonist fights monsters, life and death, and it's not easy to get this mixed up, but the villain pops up out of nowhere and fights with the protagonist in a turn-based manner like the Joker. Either the protagonist is powerful and invincible and uses the technological advantages of mechanical torrent to destroy people. Either write about how the villain became stronger, what sacrifices he made to get to this point, and what preparations he made to ambush the protagonist. Finally, kill one or two insignificant protagonists and supporting characters, so that you can accumulate some emotions for future counter-kills. Like Negan from The Walking Dead, he is a comparable opponent to the protagonist. What the hell is this about? A mentally retarded villain who comes from a mechanical deity out of nowhere, chews gum in his mouth, and calls out "little sister" to be considered a character? Appears out of nowhere, suppresses the protagonist, falls into headwinds, and delivers a victory speech? A villain organization hiding in the dark has become a deus ex machina, so it's just such a clown? It's not like the end of the world, it's really like playing house. In the world, only the protagonist group is driven away by the apocalypse. The villain organization has no pressure from the crowd effect at all. They can snipe and kill the protagonist anytime and anywhere 😰😰😰 Really don't write about human infighting. The villain is a mess, with unreasonable motives, and there is no way to enjoy being suppressed until he can fight back. Write more about monsters and add pictures. Write more about farming, climbing technology, leveling up, suppressing monsters, and earning blood essence, which is no better than this 💩villain💩fighting within

At the end of the book, the biggest problem is that he wanted to follow the three-body route and play the immortality of death, but the author himself did not fully understand what he wanted to write, and his level was indeed too low. As a result, he did not know what he was writing in the end of this route. More importantly, as an online novel, it is quite nonsense to pursue loftiness. If you really want to be black, then don't win. After the Pioneer Plan is completed, the protagonist's mechanical heart will be directly exploded and brought down. There is no point in delaying it for so long. For the Pioneer Civilization (these things don't deserve to be called high-dimensional humans, which is an insult to the word human beings), this tool man can be executed until the Vanguard Plan is completed. The mission is over. Whatever you do in the future will only add uncertainty to the plan. A true refined egoist would just kill the mother and eat her flesh after the mother gave birth to him. Now he can even eat the mother civilization. As a result, he left a big loophole in the protagonist. This pioneer civilization is so stupid that it can only be said to deserve to perish. This is a serious plot logic problem. If you don't go all the way, it's actually very simple. Don't play with Hesse and escapism. This set of stuff was originally just thought up by Liu himself when he was laying off employees at the power plant. There is no basis for its existence in reality. If nothing else, given the emptiness of the real universe, any escapism The city faces a huge problem, which is that escaping without the support of the home planet is tantamount to suicide. If you want to ascend to a higher dimension, you will starve to death in the third dimension. In an open area that is counted in light years, you are planning to rely on a small spaceship of 100 kilometers to complete the survival or even upgrade of civilization without any logistical support. It is purely funny. Including the Hessian theory, it is very funny to destroy it when it is discovered. If it is a civilization with no future on the timeline, destruction is meaningless. If it is a civilization with a future on the timeline, destruction is equal to disaster. What is even more frightening is that if it is an already very powerful inter-galactic civilization, without communication, Under the situation of flow, discovery and destruction will only be reversely positioned and then an enraged civilized Sha family, just like Yelang, is arrogant, and a civilization that fires casually is like Yelang, not knowing whether it is the Han Empire or the Caotou King after the collapse of the Zhou Dynasty, but he still fires at will, and the result is to send. Especially in the set of things in this book, it is even more funny. The author of the civilization that destroyed the tower civilization has never clearly written what their logic is, and I guess he doesn't know it either. This civilization can collect the protagonists as figures at the end, which shows that they are not purely engaged in Hesse, and their success is broken immediately. Combined with the previous description of the tower civilization, this civilization is more like an existence similar to the cosmic police/large filter of objective existence. A pure civilization like the tower civilization The virus came to destroy it. Humanity was given 500 years to develop normally. If it can develop, it will develop. If it cannot develop, it will not be worthy of being exterminated by human civilization. It even behaves in line with human morality. Pioneer civilization, such as getting on the bus and locking the door, is directly wiped out. Human civilization is still left for 500 years. To be honest, either finally write a higher civilization cosmic ecology conceived by the author himself, whether it is Hessen's tribute to the Trisolaris, or the United Nations' tribute to the civilization that destroyed the tower virus civilization as a cosmic police/great filter, it will all work, the result is stuck in the middle. Or just for a simple online novel, Lin Xian's mechanical heart and Chu Yan's spiritual core are tools for the future struggle between high-dimensional human civilization and other civilizations on the timeline. The more people the protagonist can save, the better the future high-dimensional human civilization can develop, thereby gaining greater advantages in the struggle of civilizations. Even if it is combined with the final foundation, it can be explained that Pioneer civilization and human civilization are engaged in a timeline struggle through the Foundation and the Phoenix Society. The existence of Pioneer civilization is the result of the struggle between human civilization and Tower civilization. In the constant struggle between human civilization and Tower civilization, the timeline is revised to human civilization destroying Tower civilization, and then Tower civilization predicts this in advance and transforms the corpse of its own civilization. It becomes a weapon of mass destruction and launches a timeline attack on human civilization, thus creating a pioneer civilization that continues to engage in timeline wars in an attempt to destroy human civilization and become a survivor of the timeline war. The victory or defeat of the protagonist determines whether human civilization will survive. As a result, now everyone is on the side of the road, and there is no enjoyment. And because of personal level, it is impossible to write about the three-body problem. The problem now is to write it to the end, not to mention deducting the question, but to deduct the question, I have to ask why the ending is not written as an interstellar train to continue human civilization. What is the use of writing so much about the Sky Train? This writing was not only unpleasant at the end, but even illogical. It typically opened low in the first half and high in the middle. In the later period, I didn't even know what I had written. I can only say that there is a reason for the many negative reviews. I hope the author will be more normal next time, and will not do this even if he goes all the way to pure despair.

It's really boring and uninteresting to watch

It's not quite like a post-apocalyptic farming novel, it's like a post-apocalyptic superpower battle, and it often overwhelms the protagonist's combat power. . Dancing on the tip of a knife

This book is seriously off topic. I thought it was about farming but it is not. It is completely incomprehensible. The free test chapter tricked you into coming in and started to disgust readers. Bad review

Let me start with one point. There are currently 8 people in the protagonist group, 6 of whom are women. Although the author said that it will not be all women in the future, do you think this male-to-female ratio is reasonable? First of all, the male to female ratio of 55 is not reasonable in apocalyptic literature. The survival rate of men in the apocalypse is relatively high, not even a little higher. Moreover, the three superpowers in the protagonist group are fighting to the death every day. What about the others? This is the second poisonous point. Besides, most of the men you meet are as if you have never seen a woman in your life. To be honest, you have met a few such wretched ones in real life. Except for rural areas with extremely low moral standards, modern society is big brother. People are not only driven by reproductive desires, but also one or two waves. You have set up 78 waves of crises in 100 chapters, and among them, whenever people are involved, there must be a few wretched men. It's disgusting, you know. This kind of character can't advance the story, and it can't express any truth. What's the point besides disgusting readers? There is also the issue of rhythm. I am not just saying that you have problems with your rhythm and you can't feel it. I am not against a tight rhythm, but your crisis is really not set well. There is no guidance and no forward movement. Every time the protagonist is absorbed or missing, like an NPC, a wave of marauders or monsters are spawned, and then the protagonist completes the upgrade to the limit to solve the crisis, or a wave of monsters comes to solve the problem for the protagonist. Let's write it here first. It's really a pity to abandon it because it's tasteless. I hope you can change these points

It can be seen from this book that the author has ideas. The plot and rhythm are actually not a big problem. The main problem is that the direction is wrong. Regardless of the title or introduction, everyone came to see the Doomsday Train. I thought it was a farming story, but the base turned into a train. What I wanted to see was the train getting stronger step by step, but the content of the book is about exploration and survival in the apocalypse. Basically, the train is just a save point. It's not that the content is bad. If you don't want it to be controversial, I suggest the author change the title and introduction of the book.

I have now read Chapter 87 and I would like to summarize it for you. The concept of this book is good, but it has many poisonous points. I suggest you avoid chapters 24-26 and 75-85. The others are barely within my tolerance range. 24-26 Is related to kiki. You can't accept a person who is cheating and dishonest. I'm relatively okay but it also looks annoying. However, after completing the kiki background later, I feel that it is acceptable. Then 75-85, there may be a few fluctuations, but it is roughly within this range. The problem is that the writing is too verbose, and it is no problem to skip it directly. The protagonist is in danger and is trapped in the frequency band and I have written so much. The author wants to write a team flow story, but let the protagonist leave the team for ten chapters. Although Kiki's background is interspersed, I think it can be completed in three to five chapters. Two to three chapters of puzzle solving and one to the highlight of the background. In order to highlight the team crisis, montage can be used. After the protagonist escapes, the next chapter writes that the team is in danger when the protagonist disappears, and then uses one to two chapters to write about the team's response until the protagonist appears. The most important thing in writing a book is to position yourself, either short and concise, or short but long. I think the author has almost eight pages per chapter, which should be stuck on the edge of 2k words. Since you divide it into chapters, you must write concisely, otherwise there will be too little effective information. At the same time, breaking into chapters will cause everyone to be disconnected from the story, making it difficult to follow the story. This is also the reason why everyone hates the plot between your 70s and 80s. If you merge these dozen chapters into about five chapters, or make it a 2k chapter but with condensed content, the look and feel of this section will be much better. Another point is the rhythm of the crisis and whether the train can bring relative safety. The author lacks grasp of the rhythm. Many people here have pointed out that after experiencing one or more crises, there must be a relaxation period to allow the protagonist to rest or develop. Rest and development can be the daily routine of the team or the collection of resources to upgrade the train. This can relieve the reader's reading fatigue, especially when you write neither refined nor too much content in each chapter, you must pay more attention to the rhythm.

I can only say that after going overseas, I really can't stand it anymore.

1. Don't go off topic, keep close to the changes in Infinite Train (intelligent weapons, etc.) And the growth of the protagonist group (ability, state of mind, awareness, etc.) 2. Don't write eunuchs, if you have no inspiration, write about the event points encountered by the protagonist group on the way (monster lair, extreme environment (radiation dust storm, hallucinatory poisonous fog), villain organization's monster creation experiment, supernatural events, camp black market, ally betrayal, degeneration reversal, contaminated AI puppet, teammate rescue, biological characteristics mutation (Swarms of glowing butterflies) Edible vegetation, etc.) [Events serve the characters and themes: each event should promote the growth (or fall) of the characters, test team relationships, and deepen the core themes (class, humanity, hope, and the fragility of the system)] ③. Taking the protagonist to fight monsters and upgrade as the main line is too shallow. Do not modify the train to fly into space at the end (this is purely high-speed and low-speed, unless you want humans to reach a new planet and accumulate power and technology to fight back to the Blue Star). [It is expected that human beings will explore the secrets of the night, desperately survive and accumulate strength, and human beings will fight back and defend their homeland to usher in the dawn of light.] From the very beginning of escaping to constant resistance and then to a full-scale counterattack, the living space for human beings will continue to expand. ④. In addition to the growth path of the protagonist group, you can also describe some related events from the perspective of the protagonist group to show the light of humanity of passers-by or small people. (The sacrifice of the 52nd Iron Guard Brigade in the empty alley to protect everyone from evacuating is good) It is not just the forced sacrifice during the escape process, but also depicts some meaningful active sacrifices, human fire, the relay of life, the will to live, etc. (The growth and portrayal of the protagonist's state of mind is also very important). ⑤. As the protagonist group expands, each addition of an important member will be accompanied by a major event (if there are none, you can make up for it later, focusing on describing the degree of correlation between the member and the events encountered), increasing the spiritual bond. In One Piece, the growth of everyone on Luffy's team is traceable. ⑥. Come on, the author, I hope to clarify various relationships and development lines, avoid excessive filling of holes and collapse of the content in the later stage, sort out the core story line, and get the content back on track.

What I feel about the chapters in recent weeks One is the plot of the story. The advancement of the large-scale plot seems loose, lacking clear stage divisions and necessary combing. Too many redundant descriptions weaken readability and make the main plot less prominent. In contrast, the plot is a compressed package in terms of details, and all the characters' actions and plot advancement are compressed into just one dialogue. Personally, I may prefer a selective description, and there is no need to explain all the characters' behaviors in detail. Second, the narrative technique is somewhat single: the development of the plot relies too much on character dialogue, which is similar to a running account and appears to be straightforward. Especially the scenes of supporting characters, apart from dialogue and fighting, lack any substantial role in shaping their characters or promoting the plot. The third aspect is terminology and writing style: blunt technical new words, complex place names, or deliberately stacked complex nouns frequently appear in the article. In fact, the sense of science fiction or technology can be displayed more deeply instead of stopping at the surface of the terminology.

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​: This is like adding ghosts to the Resident Evil series of movies. You can say that it is weird and not a ghost, but it has given me a strong sense of separation. It has successfully changed my habit of squatting in the middle of the night to read. To put it bluntly, stitching is an art, and the more elements, the better. I don't think anyone would blame you in a game about fighting zombies and monsters for not having something as abstract as catching ghosts. It is not difficult to figure out the audience type of a book and what their preferences are. If what everyone likes to read is weird, then there are so many weird articles on the website, why not just read the specialized weird articles?         ，，，，，

The plot of the female spy before the release and the latest chapter of the superpowers accurately searching for enemies are internecine, like chocolate mixed with feces 😒 The sense of oppression and mechanical torrent crushing by the apocalyptic monsters, and the daily farming inside the train are well written and feel. The writing of human infighting is really stiff and bad. The kind that jumps at a glance. Every time the train is upgraded and the nouns and data are listed, a new BOSS monster will appear, and he will be suppressed and beaten throughout the process. Caught in a headwind: The previous equipment would probably be destroyed by the group. Delivered a winning speech: It all depends on superpowers. It's really boring to watch this cycle of routines all the time. Can you upgrade some equipment and take the initiative to fight a wave of tailwind groups to harvest the blood essence? The sense of fragmentation is too strong. The protagonist is beaten to death by all kinds of explosions and cheats, and he still runs for his life in embarrassment. The passers-by who suddenly jumped out of nowhere started to fight with the protagonist at half-fight. It's like the apocalypse of a single protagonist 😒 Let's write about human infighting. The villains are all the classic apocalyptic villains from ten years ago. I have enough experience with them. Let's wait and see. It's really boring to write about the internal fighting among human superpowers.

The protagonist's ability is the most powerful. You can find a place to wait until level 3 before starting to use it. And it's so difficult for the protagonist, but it's even harder for the others.

The first few dozen chapters are indeed a little unreasonable, but most of them will be followed by a sentence or two to explain the previous reasons. After that, it just took off more and more, which was great. As a picky old bookworm, this book really amazed me. The writing and creativity are great. 😍😍😍😍

Let me state that this is my personal opinion and expectation! 1: Although a poisonous point in the early stage (Lin ⭐'s repressive explosion, Teacher Chen) lowered the first impression of the entire book, the flaws are not concealed! It is undeniable that the plot, characters and settings of this book are excellent! 2: The Doomsday Train was chased and beaten by mutants while escaping, which perfectly fits the plot that humans cannot defeat the night and the mutant settings! Full marks for the doomsday oppressive atmosphere created throughout the book! 3: Internet articles are not realistic prose after all. They should not be too oppressive or overly realistic. Therefore, although the train can be said to be chased and beaten, it is more about talking and laughing, flesh-and-blood team fights, and the relaxed laughter after the war 😁. There are no tragic casualties of the war. There are no less members of the Doomsday Train along the way, and there are more and more like-minded partners (Old Money, Queen Mo, the joining of various teams, etc.) 4: There are always pain points in the doomsday novel, gods that appear inexplicably, sudden map changes, doomsday suddenly transforming into immortals, Archangel Knights intruding, and the mastermind behind the secret family in the West 😁 (I believe that many of the brothers who saw my comment must have been poisoned by these hahaha) 5: Lin Xian, although in the early stage, he mainly wanted to protect himself, but he has experienced two more city-wide crises and realized his importance to mankind. He immediately joined in the action of fighting for hope for mankind. What I saw was that Lin went from a person who focused on self-preservation to a train conductor who understood right and wrong and joined the Phoenix Society to fight for hope for human civilization (Lin began to have responsibility and responsibility 😁) (After all, the growth time was too short, only a few months. When faced with important events, he did not immediately implement it but thought about decisions. It was the conflict with his original idea of ​​focusing more on protecting his own members, which made Lin a more character. It has flesh and blood, rather than respecting the setting and rigid wood) 6: Coke🥤 perfectly writes the source of the doomsday and the origin of the strange body (The world-class strange body is the fusion of mind and body and then twists it) The monster produced) I have to say Coke🥤You are awesome, you are a responsible author for writing such a wonderful story ❤️ Love you Coke🥤 Coke🥤Come on ❤️! ! ! ! ! Doomsday Train I love you😁

Level 3 speed is 13 seconds. Why is level 4 speed only 15 seconds? Would you like to read your own book from the beginning and sort out some levels of the system?

The content is very novel. I was addicted to it when I first saw it. Unfortunately, the updates were too slow. As time went by, my enthusiasm declined.

Alas, the update is too slow, and the ending is very confusing. I can't understand it. I still like the upgrading train escape adventure in the first part, and filling in the pits just to fill them in the later part.

It's strange. Basic people can have it if they want to build a vehicle, but the consumables 12.7 Mm and 1130 close-range anti-artillery shells are standard weapons and can be purchased locally. Why do they need to be made on the same day? It's enough to test them if there is a machine that can be made. It has to be done on the same day. Tire yourself to death

It's a bad novel. The author's level is limited. He writes too well at the beginning and can't take it back later. He still wants to write a civilized novel like The Three-Body Problem. All I can say is that the peak is right there and it can't be higher. But the first book is really strong when written like this. Xilancheng's previous writings were all impeccable, and the big scene fights were very exciting.

Can the author become the Twelve Heavenly Kings this year?

Explosive

I hope an audio book will be released soon, it will definitely sound good

，， Most of the time when the protagonist is in danger, he seems to have lost his mind. He is reckless and does not consider the consequences of his actions at all. The plan for each action is extremely hasty. If you were not the protagonist, your teammates and yourself would have died long ago. From the author's point of view, it is to create a sense of crisis, but your crisis is based on the protagonist's logically confusing actions, which makes people very uncomfortable. Many readers have problems with spending in this chapter, but you never change it. You still write in the same way of sacrificing logic. It has been like this many times. I thought it would get better and better, but the result is still the same... I feel this way until Chapter 233. If there is any improvement later, I hope readers will give me a kick. I am very grateful.

I think the most outrageous thing is that this thing of rape exists in a setting where the end of the world, order collapse, civilization is about to be destroyed... And there are still people! Able! Running around in this dangerous world? ! How can it withstand the dual pressure of the end of the world and the human government? ! How can you stay organized under such pressure? ! Can we conduct cutting-edge TMD research under such extreme conditions that even the strongest research team in mankind cannot reach? ! If a traitor has this ability, why not let this traitor organization be a beacon of human civilization? Except for the shortcoming of having a slightly crooked butt, I feel that the beliefs, perseverance, organization, execution, technological level, employee protection, knowledge of the world, and research on darkness of this traitorous organization are all far superior to those of the Phoenix Society and the Old Federation. There is a future for following them.

I've caught up to the latest one now, so I'll probably give it a review. Rating: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Quite beautiful. There are two biggest features. One is that the climax of each chapter is great. The scene is macroscopic and smooth, making people want to watch it more and more; The picture is strong, the author seems to be describing a movie, and has divided the lenses. When watching, there is a picture in the mind, like watching a blockbuster, which is very refreshing. Another feature is that the setting is sufficient, and the plot lines can be extended very far and are very complicated. Big brain and plenty of knowledge. It can be seen from this that the author has worked hard. I believe that the author has written more than 30 meters of outlines. I feel that there may be tens of thousands or hundreds of thousands of set outlines. This kind of richness is impossible if the author does not pay attention (because I have also been an author, and I can see at a glance that this is completely different from the kind of popular and refreshing articles, which can usually be completed in one day. The rough chapters and outlines are enough for this book. It takes a long, long time to think about it, and I guess I have to look up information while writing, and it also needs a lot of inspiration.) The remaining small advantages are that the group of characters are quite exciting. They can't be said to be lifelike, but at least they can be said to stand up. There are so many real people, and characters appear in every big chapter, so that many of us readers can't remember the characters who appear at the beginning. In short, the advantages of this book are the climaxes, ups and downs of the plot, wonderful settings, rich illustrations, and substantial content. It is really a good article. But it also has the following disadvantages: Disadvantages: The stakes are not big enough, the combat power is suppressed and the doomsday is too tragic, making it difficult for readers to survive. The other one is that there are too many battles and it is always tense (especially in the early stages of this book, which is basically the same as not developing, and constantly searching and fighting). Critical review: Good writing, but there are also some problems, which prevent it from reaching a higher level overall. The problems are mainly concentrated in the first half, and there are two big problems. One is, of course, that the author's quality was a little low in the early stage, the rhythm was a little wrong, and it was always tight. The second is also bigger: what the author wants to write is different from what many readers who click on the title of the book want to see. To put it simply, what readers want to see is a post-apocalyptic farming and development flow that is cool and cool, and what the author writes is an ultimate difficulty mode apocalyptic flow. You see, those who clicked in and read the title of the book thought that you were one of those doomsday farming and development streamers, just like the heavy card in the apocalypse a long time ago, cool transformation and development, others are desperate and the protagonist is very rich. Conquer a few more guys and women and then go out and show off. The core strength feature is the expansion of mechanical abilities and the development of imagination. The core cool thing is that although it is a stormy and desperate doomsday outside, inside it is a down-to-earth farming life with sunny wind and sunshine. It is such a refreshing feeling of contrast. (Most of the apocalyptic books may be like this now, but to be honest, although the background is the apocalypse, the essence of this is the upgrade flow of superpowers and monsters. It is just that the background is set in modern times and has a more sense of substitution.) But this is not the case. The author's book features an extremely, extremely, extremely desperate apocalypse! What this author wants to write is an absolute apocalyptic novel. It is an apocalypse where the protagonist has to keep running even if he opens such a big laurel. This is a story about the end of the world where everyone in the world is always making progress but is in despair, and the protagonist acts as the savior again and again, gathering the power of the masses to break through the desperate situation and rush towards the dawn. Below this, there are many high-octane scenes (the following contains light spoilers, newcomers can avoid them): the high-altitude climb in the first chapter, the huge war in the second chapter, and the turning of the tide in the third chapter. (Trying to be as vague as possible, there should be no spoilers 🙂) In short, the core and exciting point of this book is the hope in despair, the united struggle against the doomsday, and the protagonist who saves the day from danger time and time again and acts as the savior. It's quite nice to watch, but it must also be quite difficult. This makes the protagonist very frustrated and difficult in the early stage. As a result, readers are easily "poisoned to death" at the beginning and cannot see the excitement behind it. Think about it, when they see this book that guarantees good grades and look at the title, they must be full of expectations that they have found a treasure. But who knows when they come in and see that WC is fighting and running all the time, with no time to develop their roots, of course they feel uncomfortable and want to spray. Before this book was released, the plot was mainly about "search, fight and withdraw", and the frequency of fighting was quite high, leaving very little time for development, and there was no time for crazy development. This is also concise and makes readers a little unhappy, because the protagonist in the reader's book is the protagonist. After experiencing a war, the protagonist has no gains, or the gains are not big enough, so he feels unhappy and feels that his combat power is deliberately suppressed. Therefore, it is easy to abandon the book in the early stage and cannot see the exciting parts later. Those readers who can hold on until it is released are quite capable. They must be old bookworms with a high level of appreciation. Above, the core of the author's main plot is not the post-apocalyptic farming, development and invincibility pretense style that everyone thought at first. That's good, I also liked watching it before. But the style and core of this book are also good. Let's not talk about whether it is superior or inferior. If the style is different, you can also try something new and fresh. My suggestions to the author are, one is to pay attention to the rhythm, don't fight intensely all the time, there must be meat and vegetables, and balance. I'm doing pretty well now, and I can see that I've made a lot of progress. Another point is to add more excitement. To put it simply, after the protagonist takes the adventure, the harvest must be big enough, and cannot get nothing, otherwise the readers will feel aggrieved and uncomfortable. The bigger the harvest, the better it is. Of course, if there are too many, it will become a cool article, and it may not be the author's original intention. You can make up your own mind. When you have time in the future, you can revise the previous ones a little bit, and your results should be much better. Or the next book will serve as a warning, and the results should be even better. (Of course, everything is just a personal opinion, the author can completely ignore it. Now your rhythm is right, just stick to it, don't care too much about other people's opinions to affect yourself 🌹🌹🌹) In summary: Writing power: 85 Outline: 90 Tension: 88 Overall review: 88 Above the masterpieces, below the masterpieces 🌹🌹🌹

There was a big problem in the early stage. Originally, I came to see the doomsday upgrade train to create a mobile fortress, as well as the emotional bonus of Snowpiercer. However, after reaching chapter 30, the upgrade progress of the train was still 0. On the contrary, more than ten of the thirty chapters are all about women, or the protagonist goes out to fight with a short knife. The talent of the Heart of Machines only has a sense of existence when it provides skills, and there is absolutely no content I want to see.

The author has not grown up at all. How many chapters have it been? The protagonist is also intermittently intellectual. He is deliberately creating danger for the sake of danger. It can obviously be prevented, but he just doesn't prevent it. Hey, it's just for fun. Fuck it.

1. Miscellaneous The biggest feeling after following it so far is that the elements are mixed. The key is that it is not spread out. It feels like there are a lot of lumps. The characters are also produced a bit too fast, resulting in less descriptions for each person. Then the characters cannot be established, and it looks a bit messy when put together. The plot is also a bit messy. You can probably understand it at the beginning. It is just a line, save the female teacher, and then drive around. Later, the elements become more complicated, and the plot becomes a traditional apocalyptic adventure. 2. Writing Power The biggest problem is writing power. Some details are not described in depth. How to understand it? There are more introductory sentences and less descriptive ones. It should be the other way around. If you think the plot is not important, give an introductory introduction and describe the important ones in detail. This way, a detailed rhythm can be formed. Describe more and introduce less, and a clear plot will be formed. At present, it feels like it is stuck together. 3. Theme Always write with your theme in mind. I saw that the author introduced a lot of things about the worldview in the introduction, but most of the authors who clicked in didn't care about that. They should just read the word "train". Because you are a road writer with a very clear purpose, to escape from the eternal night, then this is your main line, and the most important thing is the Infinity Number. You can't write ten short plots as well as write one daily life on the Infinity. For example, how do people survive on the Infinity, what is the scenery outside from the Infinity, the psychological state of daily life, how to arm the Infinity, what problems are encountered in the process, you can go deeper and write more, because this is your topic, no matter how you write, it will not be wordy, no matter how you write, you will not go off track. 4. Poisonous Points Last point, readers who read about shelters or RVs like the flood outside, and I enjoy the security of shelter in a small safe zone. If you write that the protagonist always runs out, it is equivalent to crawling out of bed in a ghost movie... Although no one says it, this is actually destroying the sense of security for your readers. Assuming that the description totals 100 points, then the distribution should be Infinity>Protagonist>Team>Individuals in the team>Survivors outside Infinity. Infinite accounts account for 45, the protagonist accounts for 25, the team accounts for 10, other individuals account for 5, and outsiders + side plots account for 15. It's not the people outside who take up 15, it's the people and things outside who take up 15.