Reincarnation Space, but the Vibe Is Off

After reading the first 10 chapters, it's hard to imagine that the protagonist's first dungeon, where he learned to practice qi, learned a bunch of martial arts, conducted several biological modification experiments, and even created his own martial arts for others to use, only took 6 days. 100 Times more outrageous than the main character Suicune

I just discovered a new seedling and read it in one go. It has been updated to the third chapter of Liaozhai. First of all, it sets the tone. The whole book is very similar to Taibai Shuijun. The reincarnation space, learning ability, and sexy operation are added and modified. The development is indescribable. Of course, it is not plagiarism. It can be seen that the author has his own ideas. Method, some details in the article, such as the system at the beginning of the protagonist, and the Qi Master's starting point, are referenced. The author also said that he often reads Suicune's books, which has the flavor of Suicune. Some of the references can be regarded as Easter eggs, which are quite enjoyable to read. Generally speaking, they are good food for those who like to read Taibai Suicune's books In addition, let's talk about the shortcomings. Some book friends said that the pace is too fast. My evaluation is true. Of course, it is not bad. The fast pace also has advantages. For example, a world can end quickly, which is quite friendly for book lovers. You can read the story one by one, starting and ending without interruption. But there are also disadvantages, that is, the story is like an outline. The author's writing is okay so far. It is a bit like a detailed outline, but it can still be expanded and refined. After all, There are some good imaginary story worlds that appeal to readers. Readers want to see more stories about this world. The author can expand it a little more, but don't be like Suicune. The author's writing has a bit of a fast-travel feel. Just write more delicately. Don't There are twists and turns. Of course, the premise of good news is to update more. The author can originally send two pieces a day, and then write more carefully and write two more pieces, and send them out in one day. Don't be too watery and have little water. Try to update more after full attendance or various incentives. Then there is another shortcoming that the detailed explanation can be expanded. A little explanation is still necessary. As long as the explanation is not mentioned repeatedly in the following, other readers have also said that I have too much power. This is actually because the details are not explained clearly. I will give an example. For example, the protagonist in the first world gets the theory of nourishing the mind with six qi. He can briefly introduce the technique, such as the name of six qi. What are the six qi (I really don't know →_→), what are his abilities, let's briefly introduce it, and then explain in the side of the article that the protagonist's talent learning is very suitable for the path of a qi practitioner. The qi practitioner is also suitable for transformation. In addition, the protagonist of this skill thinks that his level is very high, and it is a high-end skill (not to mention that you can't tell, through practical performance, plus some skills) Description, a little application can tell whether this set of skills can destroy the world. Like Xiao Yan's Burning Technique, there is no problem in swallowing two strange fires. It can be seen that it can probably swallow all the strange fires. You can just fantasize about it in the early stage. At most, you can put a patch later to say that the protagonist is now at a higher level and you can see something. You can definitely set a very awesome tone first), plus The protagonist's thoughts on some evil ways to overtake can completely show that this is an act of 1+1 greater than two, which can be an endorsement of the protagonist's ability to create an awesome system. In this way, it is not like my power of thinking. What the reader wants is just a logical statement from the past that can be said. After all, we have not traveled through time and cannot show up to speak out In summary, the whole book can be fast-paced, like the fast-travel theme, so that readers can enjoy reading one world after another. I hope the author can increase the number of updates. After some estimation, about 35 pictures per world are quite suitable. Depending on the type of world, the writability can be increased or decreased appropriately. If the author can The current quality is guaranteed to be one world per week. I guarantee it, but the author still needs to fill in the details. For example, the functions of some props need to be explained. The character processing is pretty good so far. It is quite comfortable to watch at the moment. It is just that there is a little lack of detailed explanation. I hope the author can gain something from reading my comments.

Come here in admiration and return disappointed. A poor imitator of Chen Laomo, it's barely watchable. After reading dozens of chapters, the seven chapters of Xuanjun's Secret Records are completely finished.

After reading the first few chapters, I wanted to establish an image of a researcher similar to Chen Laomo, but the expression was that I was thinking, I can change whatever I have. There is no research idea or principle analysis, just name it and change it. It is not even as good as adding some points to the system and at least having a data panel.

Okay, it feels like Taibaishui-kun's book, but the pace feels a little faster, and there's something in it that I'm thinking about.

It can be seen that the author wants to write a book like Dr. Chen, who constantly travels through the world, analyzes the abilities obtained in each world, knows its essence, and forms his own cultivation system. However, the author's knowledge reserve is not enough, or the author has not thought about how to write out the process of analyzing abilities, and there is no self-justifying explanation. The reader seems to describe the abilities in a very general way, and it is very different from another novel of this type that I recently read.

After reading three chapters, I have a lot to complain about. The protagonist can touch any medical book and it is a peerless magical skill. Let's not say anything about it for now. Once you get the talent of gazing, you can immediately see the national fortunes of several countries. Let's not talk about it. Let's just think that the talent of gazing is awesome. After practicing for a long time, he can practice three breaths and see the city. There is a demon inside, and then the demon is destroyed in one breath. Let's not talk about it. Let's just say that this skill is very awesome. After that, the protagonist learned genetic modification and human body modification without any teacher. When I saw this, I really wanted to say something. What you wrote was too sudden. Without any foreshadowing, you get the magical skill, and then... Suddenly I saw the demonic energy, and then suddenly destroyed the demon, and suddenly became capable of genetic modification and human body modification. There is no foreshadowing. Let's not say that the magical power cannot be practiced casually. You have practiced it, and you have not introduced this magical skill. It is not that I want to introduce this magical skill, but that after you have practiced the magical skill, something else suddenly happens. I just got over it and it felt a bit fragmented, and then I saw the monster, why did you suddenly want to destroy it? There was no foreshadowing. I'm not saying that you shouldn't destroy the monster, I just said that there was no foreshadowing. Then suddenly I learned about human body modification and genetic modification. I only read three chapters and there was so much to complain about. I won't say more.

Didn't you just pick up a snake carcass in the first chapter and learn the snake's abilities in the second chapter? ? I wonder if this snake is the reincarnation of a saint who can teach people things in seconds? The folded book is not an online game book, can it drop a skill book? How did you do that? ?

Why does the writing become more blunt as you write?

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