Wizard: Grinding Experience Through Biological Modification

I really don't understand why it is always emphasized that the protagonist is a fool.

"The path of a wizard is like this. From the moment he begins to embark on the extraordinary journey, he is destined to break away from everything in the secular world. Sooner or later, his parents, brothers, and all relatives will leave him one by one." I don't understand. I wonder if the author still remembers this passage he wrote before. Since the protagonist wants to leave the secular world, he did not even choose to intervene in the death of his parents, what is he doing now? Inexplicably, I started to be nice to my niece. I thought that the previous conversation with my niece was just a small episode, but I didn't expect it to be a foreshadowing. It was helping to escape from the family, and it was helping to realize the dream. Next, it was time to help her become a wizard? The dangerous and important thousand-year bloody battle that was previously foreshadowed turned out to be a sideshow, and now I don't know which plot line it is involved in. I originally came here to read wizard novels about transforming creatures, but it ended up feeling like I was trying to sell someone else's meat. Now that the protagonist has moved to the time realm, that's fine. It's acceptable. But the arrangement of your plot is really difficult to evaluate, but since you want to write a plot about your niece, please write Better, at least write some good points. Now I can only see that this niece is very idealistic and has no matching will. She longed to become a knight, so she should know that becoming a knight is difficult, and it is even harder as a girl. As a result, she started crying when faced with a ridicule, and immediately changed her face with the help of the protagonist's deus ex machina. What is the difference between her and the SB who mocked her before? To put it mildly, she is independent. "To put it harshly, it's just a suicide attempt. It's because I've made enough arrangements. If it were anyone else who was so messy, I don't know what would happen." From this sentence, we can see that this niece is very reckless. She has no ideals and no arrangements and plans. She relies on the protagonist to arrange in advance. "Lilith was almost crying under the grid mask. She had never suffered such great humiliation. Tears were rolling in her eyes." There is also this paragraph, the co-authoring is really like flowers in a greenhouse. The feeling this niece gives me in summary is that she is naive, idealistic, reckless, and ignorant. I have not seen any advantages for the time being. Originally, she said that she wanted to be a female knight, which was considered ambitious. However, based on the current plot, she feels very naive, giving people the impression that she is playing a knight game for a noble lady. I generally don't like to write long reviews about novels. If I'm not satisfied, I'll just delete it. However, I basically followed this book from beginning to end. I still hope it can be better, so I'll say a little more. I hope that since the author wants to write about this niece, he can write some fragments that reflect her strengths, instead of letting the protagonist just be a nanny.

It can be seen that the author wants to write a fantasy magical world similar to Harry Potter style. It can be seen from the design and item performance of some magic plants. It also incorporates the characteristics of traditional wizarding literature, but the fusion effect is very average. Harry Potter is a children's book with a style of relaxed adventure mixed with some humorous narratives, while Qidian's wizarding novels are in a magical reality style, where power is supreme and wizards pursue the truth. (1) Suggestion: The protagonist and companions written by the author are obviously innocent and kind-hearted, and even stupid. Considering their age, I can understand it, but 80% of the public readers cannot accept it, so I suggest improvements. (2) Suggestion: There are too many descriptions of the appearance of characters unrelated to the plot. It is best to delete them all. The descriptions of landscapes and buildings are okay, but there are still too many. It is recommended to delete 50%. (3) Suggestion: The tradition of Qidian wizarding literature has a cruel core. While you emphasize the sophistication of human nature, you also imply that this perception is wrong, but 99% of the people around you show this trait. The sense of contradiction is too strong, and the reading performance is reduced by 50%. (4) Suggestions: The plot arrangement is unreasonable. The protagonist's status as a serf is despised by the apprentices. With the characteristics of honesty and resignation, it is actually okay, at least on the qualified line. But in wizard novels, what readers want to see is a wise and calm protagonist, and the plot starts with the soul crystal, temporarily breaking through the halo, and paying for one's own greed. You should use magic or wisdom to solve problems and show a sense of control! It would be more reasonable to arrange the conflict between the fire dragon and the dark wizard later, after all, the latter time is a real life and death crisis. (5) Suggestion: The manor dinner was like a poor-quality moldy cake. Once again, human accidents and private goods made by choice over effort were mentioned. This concept is fundamentally inconsistent with the tone of wizarding literature. In addition, for this traitor enemy, the character you gave him is crazy and extreme. If he dares to kill people in the white wizard's territory, it would be more reasonable for him to attack and kill you directly. (6) Suggestion: The concept of pure blood is inconsistent with the starting point wizard novel. Wizards pursue individuality and truth, and pursue equal exchange. The second-generation character design you applied is like the brainless second-generation in Xiaobai's fantasy novel, which leads to poor reading experience. (7) Suggestion: You actually have a more relaxed writing style, and those paragraphs look more comfortable and smooth. You should focus on learning and research, and design more interesting magical plants and creatures. Your theme is biological modification, so you should focus on this aspect. One fire dragon is far from enough, and the latest knowledge involving the three systems is too complicated, so the establishment should be streamlined. Write down the improvements you get every time you do daily experiments. In the early stage, you will use magic pets as the main means of combat, and in the middle and later stages, you will carry out human body transformation. (8) Suggestions: This is a small problem. For example, the name of the wizard faction can be more in line with the background. The refining system is too abstract and is not as good as the blood system, enhancement system, life system, etc. In terms of spells, you can add unique spells of the biological modification school, such as biological distortion, flesh and blood splitting, eyeball guard... And so on. The content continues to be enriched and expanded. There is a common problem in fantasy backgrounds where people's names are difficult to remember. Plot characters can be designed to have more physical characteristics, give them nicknames, or have some impressive characteristics, which can be praised or criticized. (9) Suggestion: If the plot involving characters is a piece of shit, you can write a warm little story about a magic pet to expand the story line, which is more suitable for your writing style. Either the warmth and relaxation can be carried out to the end, or the cruelty and darkness can be carried out to the end. You are caught in the middle, which is really a contradiction. Finally, rewrite it, design the outline carefully, and hopefully it will be a good one.

Poison is not an ordinary poison. It is a biological modification that was promised, and the result is that the pure wizard upgrades the article. The character set up at the beginning is so stupid. Doesn't the author know that many readers are tired of being stupid? The introduction also said that the protagonist was prudent and prudent, but in the end he decisively left the safety circle to give away a gem. I thought the protagonist had some backup plan to escape, but it turned out that he suddenly awakened when he was about to die. Is this what you call prudent and prudent?

The title of this book starts with biomodification. I came to read this book because of the biomodification point. However, except for adding a pair of bat wings to the lizard when I was not an apprentice at the beginning, which is the so-called biomodification, the so-called biomodification is no longer mentioned later, and it becomes an ordinary wizard novel. I really don't understand it. The idea of ​​biomodification is obviously good, why not think of some creative ideas for biomodification? I guess it was the studio asking again. I originally had high expectations for this book, but then the more I read, the less interesting it became. It's a pity.

This kind of bio-modification wizard should transform himself and add all kinds of weird and weird things to his body to make it interesting. The cool thing is that the things he combines together are unexpectedly strange and powerful. This is interesting. You have to have a big imagination, the author.

Poisonous, that's all I can say. After reading the introduction, I thought it was a wizard transforming the legion to conquer the world, but I didn't expect it to be a mess. The protagonist learned a bunch of things and all kinds of full-level knowledge, and then practiced like shit and made a knight career plan. The so-called transformation did not show any nerves from the beginning to the end.

I thought I had found a good novel, but it turned out to be a good one. Then Aiwei popped up, forcing the protagonist to run around, wasting time and money, bye bye.

The setting that wizard apprentices can quickly recover their spiritual power by practicing the Knight Breathing Technique is so nonsense. Are other wizard apprentices and official wizards stupid? For such a simple thing, even the so-called noble apprentices have never practiced the Knight's Breathing Technique before? You must know that the protagonist's Knight Breathing Technique itself was obtained from a wizard apprentice... This setting is too poisonous, I will leave first

It doesn't matter that the original owner was called a fool by his friends. Why is it that the protagonist is still called a fool after traveling through time? After passing the test, he is still called a fool. Is he sick? Would you like the author to let you go? I call you a little fool every day, whether it is with good intentions or ill intentions. Doesn't your IQ increase after traveling through time? Is the original owner a fool? Is the protagonist still a fool?