Walking the Heavenly Way

No, bro, aren't you from the LOL fan section? Dancing to Immortality is a big change, isn't it? 😰

Disadvantages: 1. Although there are only the first few chapters, it gives me the feeling that it is foggy and even inexplicable. It feels like a novice writing about cultivating immortality for the first time... (Isn't it really a sales account?) 2. I understand that you want to write about the open-minded and cheerful feeling of people cultivating immortality, but the protagonist gives me the feeling of aimlessly looking for trouble? It feels exactly the same as the previous book! 3. The protagonist's strength is not clearly described, nor is the opponent's strength. Then the protagonist inexplicably defeats the fox, and becomes friends inexplicably. What's going on with the strange emotional line. 4. Even if you want to cultivate immortality, you should have a system for seeking Taoism. Not to mention refining the void and returning to the spirit - Jindan Yuanying, at least you should know the obvious manifestation of the protagonist's strength. What's the list, and what's going on with Luo Tiandanzhan, I feel very strange... 5. The most important thing is that the paragraphs are too dense, which is annoying to read. Maybe it's because I've read too much of Bai's novels, but I always feel that nothing is quite right. Advantages: 1. The writing style is relatively stable, and it looks like it has been read in many books. 2. The characters in it are relatively close to life. It is recommended to add a small amount of slang occasionally. 3. Content quality is guaranteed and updates are stable. 4. The rhythm is well controlled, and the stories follow one after another. 5. Please point out if there are any fallacies.

I have read the author's "Lux's Magic Penetration Stick" before. It is very well written. The author's story is smooth and natural, and the amount of information is very high. It is not watery at all. The data is very sophisticated and the three perspectives are also very good. Unfortunately, I don't know how to develop the story in the later period and it is unfinished. The customs, human geography, natural ecology, and political concepts described by the author can be said to have structured the world in such detail that almost the LoL heroes could be renamed as originals. It's a pity that the lower limit of fan fiction is high and the upper limit is low. It would be nice for the author to change the track. I just read three chapters and spent forty minutes. As expected, the material is very sufficient. In addition to the description of scenes and characters, there are also original hymns. I can't tell the level of the book, but it can be written like this, which shows that the author has put his heart into it. At the beginning, the master asked the protagonist to do something. It can be seen that cultivators participate in the mortal world, which shows that magical powers and spells are also a natural part of the world. It is good not to separate mortals and immortals. The protagonist takes the initiative to help the scholar, which shows that he has the chivalrous spirit of a fairy and a kind character, which I also like. Maybe because of the slow pace, I haven't seen any explosive or exciting moments yet, but I still want to believe you and wish the author better and better results.

Are you planning to change your style or have you changed your name? Alliance fan writing is very good 🤔

10086 Days, I miss him as an alliance fan, can you please open two copies?

Isn't this track changed to be too big? Instead of writing Alliance fanfics, you can also write fanfics about other games.

Ah? ? ? Aren't you going to write about the LoL background? Although the last one ended without a beginning or an end, I really liked the one about the Magic Penetration Stick. I hope the author will write better and better, and this book will go to tj 🤝

It's quite good. Some people don't often read Xianxia, ​​so they may find it a little uncomfortable. But for us old bookworms who like to read Xianxia, ​​it's just right. It's rare to find such a flavorful fairy tale. Come on.

Dear book friends, please wait patiently for the release of the author's new masterpiece!

Have you ever considered writing a story about Rhodes in Faerûn?