My Younger Sister Yunxiao

You wrote that Shangqing is like a child, irritable, and acting like a child is quite a show.

You have a problem with your concept of time. It takes 9,000 years for ginseng fruit to ripen for 30 years. It also has the best innate spiritual roots. Immortal apricots only have nine fruits and should only ripen once every 10,000 years or more. You are almost ripe for hundreds of years? You can wholesale Lei Zhenzi directly.

Which is the author's million-dollar masterpiece?

Thirty-six heavens, let's find twelve more Dinghai Divine Pearls

It feels like it's written in a traditional way of cultivating immortality.

For food and grass, the current rhythm is better than that of prehistoric households.

The personalities of all the great masters are too anthropomorphic. Maybe the author deliberately wrote it plainly?

What can I say, the protagonist you created is not very good, I feel like he is a scheming person who has no desires and desires. The same goes for other characters, such as Hongjun, whose writing quality drops sharply. Usually, his normal dialogues are only written when his strength is about the same. Otherwise, some semi-literary jokes will be made in key scenes. The most important thing is Sanxiao. The eldest is supposed to be Yu Jie, a strong person without losing her gentleness. Now I only see a submissive tool. The second child is directly connected to the gods and has no role. The third child has many dialogues and interactions, but is indifferent, lively and active, and has no quirks. It makes me feel that you want to create a tsundere character, but maybe the writing is not good, arrogance, arrogance, and only a little bit of coquettishness.

The Sanqing people you wrote about have not yet become saints, so how come their relationship is so bad? Wasn't it that the conflict between the doctrine and the disciples became so bad after they became saints? Moreover, when you were apprenticed, you didn't mention that you had a sister, and you said it was not easy to mention it. The more you didn't mention it, the more it seemed that you didn't value your sister.

I came here from my brother Kong Xuan's book. Don't blame me for getting angry. This is the author's second book and he didn't learn to improve on the basics of prehistoric literature. From the very beginning, it was written that the main character Jin Peng (Jin Peng, who was born together with Kong Xuan after the Dragon, Phoenix and Kirin Tribulation) was born as a Daluo Jinxian. I was really speechless. The true spirit of Da Luo is imprinted on the laws of the prehistoric era, and controls at least part of the authority of one law. It is a permanent proof that as long as the prehistoric world is not destroyed, the true spirit of Da Luo will not be completely extinct. The other kind of immortality, great merits, great opportunities, great fortune, and great wisdom must always stand on one side, otherwise it will not become Da Luo. The Tai Chi Diagram is already in the hands of Hongjun or Laozi. These old monsters are the Taoists with the greatest authority over the Yin and Yang Laws in the ancient world. Can Jin Peng control the Yin and Yang Laws at birth? Dandan, it's annoying. Even if you write that Jinpeng cultivated from the path of Yin Yang Hehuan to Da Luo, I will accept it. After all, in the later timeline, the Three Thousands of Xuanyuan Princesses finally completed their merits and became Da Luo, which means that this road also leads to Da Luo. Or the Yin-Yang Bagua takes the path of Fuxi Lich after his death and reincarnation. Or the yin and yang reincarnate to seize the opportunity of the underworld. Or the sun and moon rotate, and the stars in the sky mark the time of the day, establishing the path of the four seasons and time calendar. Or you can go directly to Shouyang Mountain and wait for the opportunity for Lao Tzu to become a saint, worship at the gate wall, and learn his Yin and Yang principles. That would definitely work. The author didn't think about anything, just the protagonist was born out of thin air and became a big Luo. It was written blindly and irritating.