Hogwarts: the Magically Chosen Child

Like the title, many places seem to be generated by AI, such as Chapter 13

When you update, subtle flaws will be magnified, and the greenness of the writing will be criticized. When you update twice, a little patience is born, and the progress of the plot is paid more attention to. When you watch the third watch, the slightest praise begins to sound, and the number of dead harvests begins to decrease. When you watch the fifth update, readers' support spontaneously forms, and the voice of praise becomes louder and louder. When you are at ten o'clock, the great Confucian's debate on scriptures is deafening, and the tolerant attitude is implemented both inside and outside. When you are twenty, you will have a place in the bookworm's memories. Even in your long life, your name will leave a dazzling trace. Updating may not solve all difficulties, but more than 90% of problems come from insufficient updates.

The author is a little too eager to write his own thing, so he doesn't explain anything in the first three chapters and just buries the thread. But the first three chapters cannot bury the thread, because whether you want to retain it or not, you only need to read the first three chapters. I couldn't stand it when I saw the bar. The inexplicable gloves, the inexplicable description of the hidden power of the protagonist's body, too many qualifying words, and the shaping of the protagonist into an emotionally unstable person. At least the first three chapters are like this, no matter how good the subsequent writing is. There are not enough people left, so it is better to honestly lead Professor McGonagall, get the wand and then draw out the magic thread in the body, and meeting Harry is a failure. Nowadays, people don't like to watch Harry's line. They like to watch the protagonist's own single line. They like to watch the author write plots other than the original work, instead of early enrollment and making friends with Harry. Inexplicably getting involved in unnecessary events. It is better to learn more magic than saving the world. Now everyone does not like to watch the drama of the protagonist saving the world.

Sorry, I only made it to Chapter 10, and I haven't even bought a wand yet. It can be seen that the author is writing very seriously, but I really can't stand it anymore. The first chapter is good, the rhythm and text are quite catchy, but later on it starts to become confusing, giving me the same feeling as I did when I read those high school students' compositions that were full of rhetoric and mystery more than ten years ago. Dumbledore was talking to himself inexplicably, inexplicably mentioning Tom in front of a Muggle and a young wizard who had not yet entered school when they met for the first time. Is it appropriate to write it as a psychological activity? It's just a bursary, just let him know that there is such a thing and don't have to worry about it, right? The following bar scene is even more outrageous. Quirrell shows Legilimency to the protagonist without any warning when they first meet. He inexplicably asks a young Muggle-born wizard about magic spells. I'll take it as a foreshadowing. Voldemort recognizes what's special about the protagonist, but the protagonist suddenly turns around and confronts Quirrell before entering Diagon Alley? Oh no, that's called Voldemort with the protruding face. Never died? Knowing clearly that he was being caught by Legilimency and had been seen so much, he still dared to turn around and look at her? And threaten Voldemort? And then in Diagon Alley, a clear spring turned into a flood and almost destroyed Diagon Alley. I wanted to ask him where the curse came from? Why does the admission notice include magic teachings? Seeing this, I have a general understanding. It is an obvious feature. The logic of the character's behavior is the author's self-pleasure, which is probably "I think this is cool" or "I think this is very interesting." The dialogues between the characters are often filled with a mysterious and artificial flavor. I guess the author wants to imitate the style of the original translation, but it gives people the feeling of being a tiger instead of a dog. No more to say, please come on, author, and wish you well.

The first is the admission list in "Harry Potter". The English version of the admission letter can be found on JK Rowling's official website. 1. Uniforms 1. Three sets of plain work robes (black) 2. One plain pointed hat for day use (black) 3. One pair of protective gloves (made of fire dragon skin or similar materials) 4. One winter cloak (black, silver buckle) 2. Textbook "Standard Spells, Elementary" , by Miranda Gorshak A History of Magic, by Bathilda Bagshot A Theory of Magic, by Adebe Wulfling A Beginner's Guide to Transfiguration, by Emeric Switch A Thousand Magic Herbs and Fungi, by Phyllida Spohr Magic Potions and Potions, by Arseny Giger "Fantastic Beasts (Monsters and Where to Find Them)", by Newt Scamander "Dark Magic: A Guide to Self-Defense", by Quentin Trimble 3. Tools A wand A cauldron (pewter, standard size 2) A set of glass or crystal vials A telescope A brass balance 4. Others 1. Pets (prices are available on the official website and vary, the cheapest toad is 5 gold galleons) 2. Flying broom (not allowed in the first grade, this fee is waived) 3. Various stationery, including homework books (parchment), quill pens, ink and a series of school supplies. If we really want to investigate it seriously, the UP owner of a certain website, "Xiaojiuwudujuquan", did an in-depth data study. The general conclusion is: tuition and miscellaneous fees are about 106 galleons ≈ 17,419 yuan. And the clothes here are still second-hand. The dialogue ratio between galleons and pounds is roughly 1:5. If you convert it again, it is roughly 1 galleons ≈ 164.33 Yuan, 1 sicol ≈ 9.67 Yuan, and 1 nat ≈ 0.33 Yuan. It is said in the original book that 1 Galleon = 17 Sickles, 1 Sickles = 29 Nats, and 1 Galleons = 493 Nats. A Daily Prophet: 5 Knuts A pile of sweets sold in a trolley on the Hogwarts Express: 11 Sickles and 7 Knuts The fare of the Knight Bus from Little Whinging to London: 11 Sickles A glass of Butterbeer: 2 Knuts A quill from the Literary Residence: 15 Sickles and 2 Knuts 12 weeks of Apparition: 12 Galleons How about substituting the prices above for verification? A newspaper 1.65 Yuan A pile of candies 108.68 Yuan A bus ticket 106.36 Yuan Butter beer 19.34 Yuan Quill pen 145.71 Yuan Apparition class 1972 yuan This is written casually. Thanks again to the UP owner "Xiaojiu Five Poisons Complete" for providing data reference.

When I saw Chapter 99, the protagonist was very fascinated and behaved elegantly, but everything showed on his face. He claimed to be smart but was eaten to death by two girls. 🙂

1. Author, as a newcomer, what made you want to write a novel? It was a day on June 20th. I saw a novel on QReading. The author wrote very well (cross out here). Then the more I thought about it, the more angry I became, and then I saw in the comment area, "If you can do it, do it, but if you can't, don't push me." Then I studied hard for 5 days and started writing the novel on the 25th. Submissions began in July, and all were rejected without exception. Then I learned from my experience that I liked my story and I didn't want to give up, so I chose to publish it straight at the same time. 2. As a newcomer, you probably don't even have an outline, right? （｀へ´） Who said that! My outline has been written until the fourth year, okay! Do you know that a protagonist wrote a 50,000-word biography, and his name was designed with the same English word but different synonyms + verb usage! The remaining characters basically all have biographies written by them? As for whether you have the patience? I own a pet store and use a 1 ml syringe to feed 0.1 Ml of yogurt to the nursing rats each time. I also have to worry about using too much force and choking on the horse. I use a paper bag to separate it and suck out the yogurt in my nostrils with my mouth. It won't be a day or two. 3. What is your biggest problem with writing? The biggest problem is of course reading too many "physical books" (ʘ̥∧ʘ̥) Do you know when I first started writing, it was basically 160 words per paragraph, and I felt normal? Being complained about "translation accent". Then I went to see the big brother's works with sadness and discomfort, and found out that the fantasy section is indeed 100 words long, the long section of "The Ring of Destiny" is 146 words, and the "Genius Club" is only ten words long? Then after a week of revising the draft... I found that the more I wrote, the more uncomfortable I became. I always felt that "this writing is too incoherent." Then I wrote the final plan first, and then went back and revised it according to the online text format. Then I discovered the tragedy that if you divide a sentence into so many paragraphs, you always feel that the actions of the characters are missing, and then... I pondered hard. 4. How does writing make you feel? Very happy! ｡:.ﾟヽ(*´∀`)ﾉﾟ.:｡ Even if I write until three or four in the morning every day, I still look forward to readers reading what I write and leaving me comments, and then I feel very uncomfortable. Ah! Should I give them spoilers? No! We must resolutely conceal it to the end! Would you like to reveal a little more? Just a little? No! (◢д◣) 5. Why do your works feel weird? (๑•ૅω•´๑) Because I was originally going to write "Game of Thrones"! But, I don't want to write anymore! Be honest! To be honest (╯‵□′)╯┻━┻ There are too many characters! I have obsessive-compulsive disorder, and the analysis is too tired, so I lie flat. The reason for the separation is that I like "The Catcher in the Rye". I want to leave all the happiness to childhood and all the tragedies to the story of adulthood. That's why Why does your story have a lot of conspiracies? I couldn't help but write "Game of Thrones". After all, Dragon Mother made her debut at the age of 13, and she was riding a dragon to dominate the crowd at the age of 16! 6. How come you seem to define the strength of the protagonist in what you have written these days (including the poor manuscripts)? Very vague? This ᕮ◥▶‸◀◤ᕭ No! Absolutely not! My reason is "Magic is not about wielding a stick, it is an art!" If you only care about how much damage this power can bring, then why don't you use a sledgehammer? This is a concept, and the protagonist is a living person, he is not a "madman". Magic is the foundation of the wizarding world, and we are going to explore its essence and use it to change lives. I will make it clear later (this is not a spoiler!) Don't run away! Come back and tell me something! (*Ӧ)σHim Okay, okay. ٩(๑ᵒ̴̶̷Ո᷄ᗨᵒ̴̶̷Ո᷅)و My story will explain the magical world from a reasonable perspective. For example, in "Ancient Runes", wizards use Latin spells. You may not be familiar with runes, but they are actually "runes", which means "hunters". The one used by "Magic Man" is also from Nordic mythology. Tell me more! ┻╰(‵□′)╯ No one really thinks that magic wands are "from ancient times", right? If it is from ancient times, then there are no more than 20 wand makers so far, and there are "only a handful" of those who are still alive. So, please, more In ancient times, when information communication was not developed and there were not enough detectors, what were wizards like? Where did they live without wands? Where was their original "home"? In a certain movie, humans ended up hiding in Greenland, and some of the existing wand-making masters were very similar to Sly. Trin can be related, oh! Slytherin is also in the UK, and the "best staff maker" is also in the UK, how amazing! Then, the end of an era, and finally those older stories have become the secrets of some "despicable people" to distinguish the noble and the lowly. ☄ฺ(◣д◢)☄ฺ Almost over 1,500 words!

As for the first graders in the Snake Yard, why not just set them all as the reincarnation of the old man?

Children, unlike Ma Jia, should be students and be more tolerant

The problem of piling up words is very serious ~ too many unnecessary modifiers are very procrastinating. I only read four chapters and I don't know what happens next. Friends who have read it can add it, I removed it ಥ_ಥ

In response, the author said that he liked the novel The Catcher in the Rye and thought it was the Badger Court, but it turned out to be the Snake Court. The main problem for me is that the author's writing style is too similar to a high school composition, too young and not colloquial enough. The important thing is that the tone of voice is the same over and over again. Character description is really about the key paragraph, which one becomes the author's puppet. The shadow of the puppet master can be seen everywhere. The so-called love of foreshadowing, is it possible that the foreshadowing in your eyes, the author, is the outline in the eyes of readers? I thought that with great difficulty, there would be a protagonist like Cedric in Badger Yard.

The author is very careful to describe a world, a character, the character's way of thinking, and the causes of his way of thinking; It is very difficult to tell stories in a metaphorical way. At a time when the direct trust relationship between authors and readers is in tatters, the patience of readers has become a luxury. Readers who have been devastated by too many "failures", "defective products" and "junk" are filled with anger and begin to question every author and every work. Those who are in line with their preferences will do their best to defend them and attack anyone who questions them. It is easy to go to extremes, which is not good, but there is nothing you can do about it - people who have been devastated need a place of peace of mind. When the last scar has not healed, new "works" will add new wounds. Going to extremes is inevitable... The story hopes that readers can understand the characters in the book through thinking and speculation, resonate with the story, have feelings, and become curious. For example, I am speculating on the way the author likes to tell stories, and I am very curious and interested in the "process" of how to write this story... It is normal and reasonable to pay attention to the process in order to obtain results. However, nowadays, because of the many people and things we come into contact with, things go wrong at the beginning - there is no process, let alone the future. In the case of constant disappointment and even despair, because of uneasiness and fear, we hope to get the results directly and do not want to. I don't want to be desperate again, so I am very impatient, so I hope that the protagonist of the story will continue to become stronger, I hope that the protagonist can break all obstacles, and I will not even allow the story to not meet my imagination, or even allow the protagonist to be weak. This is the author who faces many, many problems... I feel so guilty that I cannot give a solution... I can only hope that the author will maintain the courage to write a book May the wind of courage always be with you and me

I don't know what the author wants to express, but after reading the first five chapters, it's really baffling. From the third chapter, it seems that the protagonist should be a time traveler, and even knows something about the world of Harry Potter. However, the protagonist behaves like a native, without any adult feeling. The plot is the same. Although Quirrell is not good, he is also an outstanding graduate. Why should the protagonist intimidate him and suppress his murderous intention?

Slytherin persuaded him to give up. This choice would reduce the attraction, unless there is a certain Rock's talent.

First of all, as a veteran Muggle who has read hundreds of Harry Potter fan works, I can feel the seriousness of the author! The first chapter of the opening chapter is very well written. Although I think the content could be written in more detail, overall the flaws are not concealed. After reading the first chapter, I feel that this should be a good work worth collecting. But the content of Dumbledore's sudden visit in Chapter 2 became a little bit poisonous, and then what happened in the bar, the flooding in the streets, and the purchase of wands made me frown, and I finally couldn't read anymore until the semester started. The content is too jumping, and the protagonist suddenly becomes confident and powerful? (Perhaps it is understandable because of the genius setting of Rebirth, knowing the plot), but the author has laid many foreshadowings, which makes the whole content together feel so inconsistent when reading. It's really a pity, the first chapter of the opening chapter is really well written. However, I hope the author will continue to work hard and look forward to reading your work again in the future.

In the magical world, the political landscape is complex and full of power struggles and family disputes. Hogwarts, as an important center of magical education, is not only a place to train young wizards, but also reflects the political dynamics of the magical world to a certain extent. Students in various colleges come from different family backgrounds, and their behaviors and ideas are often affected by family traditions and political stances. Most of the students in Slytherin College come from pure-blood families. These families have deep historical heritage and powerful power in the wizarding world. With the mission of safeguarding the glory of pure blood, they are closely connected through family marriages and other methods, forming a powerful political alliance. The twenty-eight sacred tribes are the representatives. They support each other, advance and retreat together, and try to maintain their dominance in the magical world. However, the magical world is not completely controlled by pure-blood families. With the development of the times, more and more non-pure-blood wizards have emerged, and they have challenged the traditional pure-blood concepts. Students in houses represented by Gryffindor, Ravenclaw and Hufflepuff come from different backgrounds. They pay more attention to personal abilities and courage and are skeptical of the concept of pure-blood supremacy. The Ministry of Magic plays an important role in the magical world. It is responsible for managing the affairs of the magical world and maintaining the order of the magical world. However, the power of the Ministry of Magic is not absolute and is often restricted by forces from all sides. For example, Dumbledore, as the headmaster of Hogwarts, has a strong influence, and his decisions and actions can often affect the political direction of the wizarding world. In addition, pure-blood families also have certain influence in the Ministry of Magic. They use various means to try to influence the policies of the Ministry of Magic to safeguard their own interests. During the period of the rise of the mysterious man, the magical world fell into great turmoil. The mysterious man attempts to overthrow the rule of the Ministry of Magic and establish a world ruled by pure-blood wizards. His actions triggered a fierce war in which many families suffered heavy losses. After the war, the political landscape of the wizarding world underwent major changes. The Ministry of Magic regained its dominance with the support of Dumbledore, but the power of pure-blood families cannot be underestimated. Currently, the political landscape of the magical world is still in an unstable state. The forces of all parties check and balance each other, and no one can completely control the situation. In this case, the family's choices and actions become crucial. Some families choose to cooperate with the Ministry of Magic to safeguard their own interests, while others remain neutral and bide their time. At the same time, the younger generation of wizards is also gradually growing up, and their ideas and actions will have a major impact on the future of the wizarding world. My story was born under such a background. A storm caused by butterflies is brewing, and all parties are watching, competing, and placing bets.

This introduction doesn't look good.

There are too many words to describe expressions and it feels very verbose.

When I first started reading it, I thought it was okay. I read the previous reviews and all said it was good. I felt that the content was not worthy of the reviews, and the quality of the hp fics I read before made me want to read the next chapter after reading one chapter. You explain too much in many places and use some words to modify it. The gloves are a bit poisonous. Although MJ gave them to them, it really makes people look forward to the story inside. However, the inexplicable power you added to the gloves does not match the power in your own body. There are many places that feel very inconsistent. I can't describe it, but it feels like the writing is average.

Good-looking, good-looking, put it on the bookshelf 🙂 Is there an official supporting role for the protagonist?