The Wizard's Secret Journey

I've read over 60 chapters so far, and I've already seen some major flaws. Witcher novels should have a development direction or spell improvement, right? This one has none of that; it's just waiting for some kind of cheat code to boost their power.

The ex-girlfriend, a supporting character, is portrayed in an excessively over-the-top way. This includes, but is not limited to: pretending not to know the male lead when they first meet, and then openly acting like a couple a dozen chapters later; At first, she was completely open and honest with the male lead, listening to his every word and making all the preparations and choices.

The initial setup creates a precarious and exploitative environment for the protagonist, then they suddenly become incredibly powerful and transcend the ordinary. Immediately after that, the culprit is exonerated, making the protagonist grateful and tearful, only to have the villain resurrected. That's the free part of the story. It's hilarious!

The wizarding genre has been overused, and it's very difficult to truly develop a solid framework for a world. That's why works with excellent writing like Shiyuan's are so engaging. And to be honest, seven or eight years ago, industrialized wizarding stories were everywhere. What new ideas are there left in the wizarding genre today?

This is really boring. It's just constant conflict, one conflict after another. Shouldn't wizards be learning, accumulating knowledge, expanding their horizons, and advancing in rank? This feels like a monster-slaying, level-up story. Sigh, I'm leaving. My assessment is: a reskinned traditional fantasy novel.

It's a pity, it's a fantasy novel disguised as a wizarding story. The wizard/scholar attribute has been downplayed, and he/she is now seen as a cheat code for possessing powerful scientific research capabilities. Making money through murder and robbery! Acting as a merchant, buying and selling at a profit margin! Anyone can commit murder and arson, or become a businessman, but very few people can do scientific research.

A sword technique is even divided into lower-level perfection, limit, and intermediate beginner levels. 😵 Why are all wizard novels so disgusting now? Even a novice can write something with just an outline. I complain about every chapter I subscribe to, and I'm too lazy to read the free ones.

First, the protagonist encountered a female supporting character who abandoned him and took most of his wealth in pursuit of better treatment. Later, the protagonist forgave this female supporting character, and the subsequent plot consistently whitewashed her, subtly suggesting she was the female lead. 😁 It's not wrong to cut off one's beloved after leaving the mainland; the wrong lies with the person who was cut off.

Did you give yourself to Elena? Writing about her like crazy, what a simp.

The pacing of your book was good at the beginning, but you focused too much on the plot, making it feel like filler. This book is just a reskinned version of the "mortal cultivation" genre, with elements of loan-based cultivation and underworld cultivation. But that's not the problem. Your pacing is good, but there's no climax.