The Old Demon from Shushan Is in the World of Cultivating Immortals

Anyone who can write about Shushan and remember the background information very well must be an old author. But what you wrote seems too old and decadent. I dare say that your books must have a few fixed points, and they are your own habitual writing points. After seeing what you wrote, I really feel that writing really needs to keep accumulating and growing. Your stuff is too old and lifeless. You need to reflect on your own writing style, improve yourself through multi-system learning, and don't always rely on previous experience. Especially if you look at the advantages of new famous online articles, you have to step out of your comfort zone, otherwise you will be abandoned by readers. Today's readers' tastes have changed greatly. Keep up with the times and don't waste your previous writing accumulation.

First of all, it's okay to have apprentices. As a cultivator, the protagonist can't be his subordinates. The disciples can be regarded as his confidants. Immortal cultivators must have some backup in everything, and they must have the help of their trusted friends. They can also leave their own inheritance in this world, so there is no problem! And the plot description is not obtrusive. When you meet someone with a good temperament, you will accept him as your apprentice. This is equivalent to being happy when you see a hunter. It is a very common description in group portrait novels. It feels very strange. The protagonist of a novel about cultivating immortals can't accept disciples? I think we can write more about the protagonist's apprentice or other supporting characters later on as a group portrait. After all, the protagonist is a bit invincible. Generally, the protagonist is relatively invincible, and the stories are basically group portraits. Even if he travels across the heavens, he will always travel when he is invincible. When he is invincible, he will travel back and forth. If he fights monsters and changes maps too many times, he will become bored, and his combat effectiveness will easily collapse. You can write more stories about other supporting characters to promote the main plot.

The one cultivated in the Shushan world is not an old coin, except for the flowers in the greenhouse, and that one is not scheming. The author looks at the protagonist he wrote, does he look like a scheming devil? Things are dealt with based on strength when they come to you. How did this kind of protagonist with no ability to plan survive to become a Sanxian in his previous life?

The writing is quite good, and the look and feel is great so far, but accepting a disciple is quite abrupt. After all, your disciple's character is not established, just like a passerby, and then he said a few words about destiny and the disciple has good qualifications and then accepted him as his disciple. It seems a bit strange. At least take some time to describe the characters' experiences and establish their personalities.

It looked pretty good from the beginning, but suddenly a certain Zhong Shenxiu appeared and accepted him as his disciple. . . . . .

Can the protagonist figure out the right path of Shushan even with his strength? If you are good at preaching in Shushan, others can see clearly what evil schemes you have up your sleeve.

It's okay to eat evil monsters, but it's best not to eat living beings that are intelligent and do not do evil. This is not because of hypocrisy, because in the real world, we are the sentient beings who are eaten.

Win in a battle of wits? This is the chief eunuch in Toad Gongshu's book 🙂

Everything else is fine, but the apprentice is really a failure. Can't the author see the readers' great wishes and write this poisonous point?

The author should write Infinite Flow. The protagonist can kill the gods in just a few chapters, and your Shushan Taoism doesn't feel that powerful. The power of cultivating immortals is huge. If your cultivation level is stronger than yours, you can beat the protagonist in seconds.

The demonic cultivators in the Shushan world are really at home in the world of mortals cultivating immortality. As long as you have your mind set on the magic and can't keep your original intention, you will definitely fall victim to it.

There every day, Leader Chen, Leader Chen, what if Leader Chen cuts you with a sword, what should I do if Leader Chen senses you? You are so afraid, why don't you say he senses you? It really made me feel the diversity of species.

The exciting point of this book is that the protagonist Shushan's demonic path crushes the world of immortal cultivation, which is somewhat similar to "Shushan Demon Sect Authentic Sect". The Shushan novel is quite interesting and novel. The pace of this book is a bit too fast. After only a few dozen chapters, it starts to feel like becoming a god and becoming invincible. Visual inspection has already begun to go downhill before it is released on the shelves. I just mentioned in the previous article that the protagonist's master Hunyuan Patriarch was accidentally implicated to death when he accepted a disciple. The protagonist immediately accepted two apprentices in a daze. Even if a craftsman accepts apprentices, he must have to suffer for several years. Look at his character. It takes more than ten years for Shaolin Temple to accept apprentices. The law is not taught lightly! What's more, if you are cultivating immortals, accepting disciples will also affect your own Qi. I feel like this kind of plot is something I can't write anymore and I just made up the plot. Maybe the author can explain it later.

This is too similar to "I Practice Shushan Taoism in the World of Immortality". They both worshiped the Patriarch Hunyuan as their teacher, were surrounded and suppressed by Emei, tried their best to belittle their spiritual roots and cultivated immortality, and suddenly accepted a murderous talent (the one was a woman), followed by Tianhe Zhengfa, Flying Sword, Monster Invasion, Demon King... Is it the old eunuch who practiced the Moro magic skill, or is it pure plagiarism? The creativity, setting, and plot are at least 80% similar!

Merely cultivating magic power without cultivating Taoism is called side sect. Buddhism, Taoism and Demon all have their own great ways. If you only cultivate magic power but don't understand the main path, you will go astray. Lianshan doesn't understand the number of days at all. Whether it is Taoism, Buddha or demon, orthodox or side sect, they all have different bodies and the same origin. He first has a discriminating mind. This is his first problem. He does not teach the disciples of the side sect to polish their character and build a "Tao heart" to remove defilements and preserve their essence, but he tries to go against the natural development of the way of heaven by himself, which in itself goes against the dharma. This is his second problem. Lianshan only knows the power of magic but does not know what it means to be the Tao. He thinks that with the help of magic power, he can create a righteous law that only refers to the Tao. This behavior itself deviates from the Tao. The deeper the magic power, the further away from the righteous Tao. How can he walk out of the righteous path? This is his third question. Lianshan's magic power is profound but his teachings are shallow. Any kind of avenue is based on the realization of the way of heaven. Just like the devil's way of seeking to realize the true nature, I am arrogant and comfortable, and I have proved the "I" in the way of heaven. However, Lianshan has not found the core competitiveness of the side door to realize the way of heaven, but delusions of relying on self-generated magic power to create a way of prosperity. This is his fourth question. With these four problems, Lianshan's outcome was actually doomed. Therefore, Lian Shan himself has not entered the authentic Taoism. He has always been a side sect and has gone astray. Even if he practices the authentic Taoism, he will still fall into the side sect in the end.

A person from the classical fairy tale traveled through the underworld to become an immortal.

The Emei sect is so strong because it thrives on having many disciples. If Patriarch Hunyuan had three heroes and two clouds under his command, would they be beaten to death by Emei?

Uh, I don't understand. This part about the spiritual world is really boring. What appeal does this have to readers?

The character and plot are directly reversed

The strong man who emerged from the miracle has a world view that is big enough, bigger than the universe.

I voted for the monthly vote, and I'm a eunuch. I told you earlier, I told you earlier that I voted for someone else.

It's a pity, it's very beautiful and the idea is very good, alas,

After I abandoned this book, and now I look back on it, I really want to be a eunuch. The world view collapsed.

There is no content of its own, and the system of writing Xianhu is mixed with Shushan and prehistoric times. The plot seems chaotic, futile and aerodynamic.

The road is long and far away, I will search up and down, work hard and encourage each other 😁

The writing is good, especially the characters and techniques from Immortal Gourd.

Yesterday I recommended a new book with potential to be read, but today I saw the latest chapter and finished it?

The road is long and far away, I will search up and down😁

After reading it, this book is very well written. I recommend a novel - The Ax Master

I now suspect that you and the Journey to the West book are by the same author They are both reincarnations of old people