Mountain Hunter: My Everyday Life as a Breadwinner

To be honest, your description is a bit far-fetched. You said you were bitten by a venomous snake, your body is ruined, and you can't do heavy work, but going into the mountains is easy; it doesn't require physical strength, are you kidding me?

There's too much dialogue. The entire chapter is dialogue, and you have to distinguish who's speaking line by line. And the dialogue is incredibly childish and illogical. Dialogue requires excellent writing skills. When reading a line of dialogue, the reader has to mentally imagine themselves saying it; if it's poorly written, it feels very awkward. This is especially noticeable.

There are so many authors like this on Qidian, why aren't they blacklisted and banned?

You can record videos and upload them. Later, I'll add a few more dogs; it gets monotonous to have just one dog all the time. I need some green leaves to complement it.

It's pretty good! The details about going into the mountains are well-written, but there's too little content. The younger siblings and two female teachers have too much screen time; honestly, I didn't enjoy it. You can give the protagonist some special abilities, such as a keen sense of smell, extremely strong hearing, or something similar, as long as it doesn't involve a system or any…

What about the update? Could it have already been sent?

Remember to write down the rural medical insurance reimbursement form when you are discharged from the hospital.

I just listened to a few songs... It was almost all "ne ne ne ne"... I almost threw up.

Author, you should write that the protagonist's father had no siblings, relatives, or friends; even though they were all in the ICU, not a single person visited him, only his mother was there.

"Young man from the mortal world, a brutal Dark Corpse King has appeared in the elven world. He sits on a luxurious toilet made of gold, often robbing little elves on the way, asking them: 'Do I look human to you?' If the answer is yes, he will sit back on the toilet contentedly. If the answer is no, he will fly into a rage and send his minions to destroy everything.