Mountain Hunter: My Everyday Life as a Breadwinner

To be honest, your introduction is a bit outrageous. You said that you were bitten by a poisonous snake and your body collapsed and you couldn't do heavy work. But going into the mountains is a simple matter. It doesn't require physical strength. Are you kidding me?

Too much dialogue. The entire chapter is full of dialogue, and you have to distinguish who said it line by line. Moreover, what he said was childish and illogical. The dialogue is very particular about writing style. When readers read a sentence of dialogue, they will simulate how it will sound in their minds. If it is not well written, it will be very awkward. Especially obvious.

There are many such authors in Qidian. Why don't they block them?

You can take videos and upload them. In the future, if you add a few dogs, you will be alone. After a long time, it will be monotonous. Need green leaves to set off

Very pretty! The details about entering the mountains are well written, but the content is too little. There are younger siblings and two female teachers at home. There are too many scenes. To be honest, I don't like watching them. You can open some plug-ins for the protagonist, such as a better sense of smell, very strong hearing, or similar things, as long as there is no system and some space is too outrageous! There is no rebirth, time travel, or golden fingers. To be honest, it feels a bit unsatisfactory. When you encounter a spearhead viper in the mountains, it is normal for the king cobra to be scared, but you should find a way to kill it next time you go back. Only in this way can there be conflict points, which is exciting and beautiful😁😁

What about updates? Shouldn't it be sent?

Remember to write down the rural medical insurance reimbursement when you are discharged from the hospital.

Just listen to it... Almost all of it is about this... I'm going to vomit.

Author, you should write about the protagonist. His father has no brothers, sisters, relatives or friends. He is in the ICU and no one is there to see him. His mother is there.

"A boy from this world, a cruel dark corpse king appeared in the elf world. He sat on a luxurious toilet made of gold. He often robbed the elves on the way and asked them: Do you think I look like a human being? If the answer is yes, he will sit back on the toilet with satisfaction. If If you answer no, he will become furious and send out his minions to destroy everything. The beautiful elven world is suffering from a great crisis. Please sign a contract with us and become an invincible warrior to resist the Dark Corpse Emperor! " A cute blue bird-shaped elf in the subspace shouted. "I will give you love and tolerance!" A brown and green fat little elf said, blinking his mung bean eyes. "I will give you courage and strength!" A red elf with two horns on his head said, waving his cute little sword. "I will give you happiness and patience!" A purple elf said, swinging his crab hands and tentacles. "And I will give you wisdom and magic!" The cute blue bird-shaped elf stretched out his colorful wings and said. "Who do you want to choose for the contract?" "As a child, I can't tell. I want to try them one by one!" The bald boy said eagerly. As a result, the bald boy named Walkerma von Hindenstein gained unparalleled piety and power. His love was so strong that he claimed to be the spiritual descendant of the God-Emperor and a living saint. He even made up rumors that he was a descendant of the God-Emperor's illegitimate son... His courage was so strong that he would ride into the battlefield in a chariot, shouting spells while wielding a hammer to kill any dirty scum who dared to touch his luxurious carriage with dirty hands. His happiness is so simple. Apart from whipping himself every day, you don't know what he did to the statue of the God Emperor while hiding in his room... His wisdom is so outstanding. He reads ancient scrolls and scripture files in the Imperial Library every day, and from the treasure house of forbidden knowledge, he understands a great truth: justice will defeat evil, otherwise it will be defeated by evil. "After so many years, what is your choice?" The four elves asked in the dark. "Only children make choices, and I, the greatest gentleman in the empire, the invincible pastor, the light of civilization, the holy Archbishop Walkerma, want them all!" The bald middle-aged man stretched out his big hand and shook it tightly. As a result, his body turned into a skeleton, and he was forced to put on the Bone King's armor and the crown of witchcraft. He cut off his right hand and forcibly attached it to a bone melon. His body was repeatedly pierced inside and outside by the black tentacles ejected until it was completely wrapped. Became Nagash, the Corpse King. "What a greedy guy. I've run out of ideas. Let's find the next person to seduce." The four elves named Nurgle, Khorne, Slaanesh, and Tzeentch discussed this. "Young man from this world, a brutal dark corpse emperor has appeared in the elf world..." Before the cute blue bird-shaped elf finished speaking, the bard who was stopped said: "Lovely elf, have you heard of Cathay?" "Um..." The bird-shaped elf seemed to have a strange association, and replied tremblingly: "The medieval one?" "Exactly, I have a long narrative poem of 800,000 words. Please give me some time and listen to me in detail."