Twilight City

It is recommended to read Chapter 20 first to see if you are the target group of this book. Anyway, as an omnivore, I ate with relish Refining the key words of this book This city was destroyed The ancient tradition The channel of bionic people

This Zhuo Ying is so bad. Tens of millions of years from now, human beings will still use power for personal gain. It's terrible to think about it. In short, I also want to learn this profession

The background setting is quite interesting, and so is the writing. Small issues in emotional and character aspects can also be covered by settings. Seeing that the author seems to be double-editing? I still suggest you finish writing a book carefully first, it will be easier to read this way

Why did it stop updating? I support a monthly pass and hope the author will continue his efforts

Even after reading the first 3 chapters, I can still read it. He is also a god.

In the far future, human beings have evolved to a very outrageous situation, but several wars have also destroyed many civilizations. In this era, the protagonist as a child (100 years old, human lifespan in this era is as long as 10,000 years) triggered the ability of the exorcist and began a wonderful journey of growth. Recommended trial reading. Speaking of which, I noticed a familiar smell after watching it. The narrative style of this book is similar to that of My Age of Magic and The Extra-Dimensional Warlock, so I'm afraid it will take tens of millions of words to write.

Damn, he's not like a novice writer at all. He's at least in the top ten.

The concept is a little new. After reading it for a while, I found that there are really few effective words. It was very uncomfortable to read. I kept turning the page and turning the page.

It is very good to start with a detailed description of the writing, then expand the world and explain the background. However, the focus of the explanation was not grasped well. We must grasp the key points and take into account other key points. Some explanations were too much, resulting in some things not being explained clearly. The other thing is the language. The language is a bit white. You can try to create a writing style, but I still recommend that the dialogue should reflect a person's personality. The protagonist is a little boy, and other people, such as Judge Xiu Ming, can be a little more old-fashioned and not too straightforward. For the narration type, it should be a little more capable. It is best to focus on the focus of the chapter. Some less frequent ones can be placed in other related chapters. Generally, new authors choose a subject they like, always have a lot of ideas to share, and cannot control the desire to express. Expression is a good habit, and ideas are the source of creation, but too many ideas will destroy the balance of the content. Another point is that a new author cannot control the number of words in a chapter. Expressing freely will make a chapter have a lot of words. If he wants to refine and shrink it on the plot, he will not be able to write a lot of words. He has to learn how to make the structure attractive. From the aspect of information density, high information density is difficult to understand, reading is slow, and reading pressure is high. Science fiction is inherently a dense genre. In addition, this kind of cyberpunk-like world view has many settings and the density is even greater. Therefore, it is very necessary to dilute this density. It is strongly recommended to spread out the introduction and follow the plot more. Then we will deal with it visually. The number of words in a paragraph can be a little less, both long and short. The original ten pages of words can be stretched to twelve or thirteen pages, which should be much better visually. In addition, it is the core of online novels, the creation of conflicts and the advancement of plots. It can also be said that the creation and development of plots are more enjoyable. There is no explanation for the conflict. The other is the advancement of the plot. The advancement of the plot must be supported by strong content, otherwise no matter how good the writing is, it will be a mess. It can be seen from this book that the protagonist is an F-level professional, so this can be used as a reason to advance - to become stronger. Many books advance like this, constantly becoming stronger, infinitely stronger, surpassing all, and then the finale. Well, it is best to add a few more groups to your cyberpunk novels, such as exploring a certain issue (such as pursuing the truth of the world, who behind the scenes shaped the world like this, protecting someone...

I hope to see more interactions between the wet and weird aunt Ruan Qi and the protagonist, and more weird auntsฅ՞•ﻌ•՞ฅ

From top to bottom, your introduction is the content of two books.

... From a child's perspective, although the protagonist is a child, some parts are still too childish and too young.

Then the protagonist is not a time traveler, and the native character is also conservative. To put it bluntly, he is obsessed. I don't know how to write plot conflicts to promote the development of the story.

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It's not fun enough and the main character is too weird

Now it's interesting. The water in this world is very deep. Humanity has developed for so many years, accumulated so much, and has countless technological and spiritual abilities. Yet it is still living in the solar system. This is obviously abnormal. The early information about high-level people and human development is one-sided and superficial. But starting from today's chapter, something is wrong. The level involved in the 10,000-year human life span is really starting to touch the truth of the world, and at the same time unfolding deep-seated information The author writes well, and I hope it gets better and better.

I've caught a cold recently and can't breathe. Everyone should be careful not to catch the flu.

I really like the world setting of this book, and the author's writing style is also very logical, but the results still haven't improved. I feel that the power system is vague and there is no direct hierarchy, so there is no sense of upgrading. The main character's child setting is good, but he can't always be a child. Even now, he still has a childish attitude. The plot advances too slowly, there is no main line, and it feels like it just wanders around casually. It was prematurely incorporated into the grand narrative poem, and a primary school student was born to save the world, which was too inconsistent. . .

Folklore Suspense/Modern Mystery/Future World, you are running towards a dead end. These three target areas have become so cold that there is no such area. The folk horror category in the previous Battle Royale was almost completely wiped out, and the future science fiction area is even more unpopular all year round. In my impression, the science fiction novels that have emerged are only a few or even a few years old. In the end, The most recent one is Interstellar Cruise (2013). Even if you label it a fantasy or even a light novel, you won't be so cold. Although you have to be strong, but you are living in these areas, it is useless even if you are a diamond. Think about Qing Yunxian, the life of the big red fire encounters the science fiction area, tsk, the performance will be cut in half.

A man who turned to Yuanshen was supported to death by the souls of ordinary people. The author is such a talented person.

I still need to think of a main plot, but it's a bit stuck right now. I feel confused at the beginning. After reading a few chapters, I feel like I have nothing.

Some values ​​​​are too divorced from real life, please modify them

Still updated? Very pretty

Author, the introduction of the novel is too bad. I clicked the X in the upper right corner when I saw "Professional Is Respect" several times. It is obviously a very interesting book, the narrative rhythm is quite steady, the daily writing is quite humorous, the number of jokes is moderate, and there are not many bad sentences. In my heart, it is a good book. But your introduction is not attractive at all. It is clearly about the cyberpunk journey of Shota Cowherd and the exorcist. After reading the introduction, I thought that the world is in danger and the exorcist saves the world, and then the protagonist fights monsters and upgrades to change the map. The result is not at all 😰

It's rare, it's a novel about both parents and a happy family.

A pig's foot is still a child at 100 years old, are you pretending to be young?