Mortal: Grandmaster Li Huayuan

Li Yuanhua, a golden elixir monk, has a body of three yangs and has the talent of Nascent Soul. Unfortunately, he coveted a few elixirs. His disciples were killed, he himself was killed, and his wife was gone... Everything must start from accepting a named disciple.

As I continue to this day, the protagonist looks more and more like a clown, the supporting characters become more and more witty, the Nascent Soul monks are smiling, and the Great God is so excited! I can't stand the poison anymore

Your words. . . . Cut it

At first, I wanted to stay calm, so I kept doing things, as if I was working hard to retire.

Sleep with the red Buddha, beat Yunlu, beat the old devil 😜

The system's space movement to save the apprentice is a bit poisonous, exposing some abnormal situations that cannot be explained. How to explain that it can fly so far in time? This is really like being a nanny. It seems that it will collapse later. There will be a lot of poison points

Just reading your profile, I think it's enough. If you haven't practiced cultivation yet, in the cruel world of immortal cultivation, even Taoist ancestors have to be careful when re-cultivating. If you are a cultivator walking on thin ice, it's better for you. If you haven't cultivated yet, why don't you go to heaven?

Can the style of writing be more serious? The whole article is about making fun of myself. It's okay to be a little more serious and produce a high-quality product.

It's too funny, just for fun. Pass

I'd like to give you a suggestion, don't write about women, just write about cultivating immortals. It's disgusting to see mortals being harem stallions.

I ran to the Sea of ​​Stars to snatch the opportunity of Old Devil Han. Was this to raise Old Devil Han to death?

Having picked out such a large array of battles in advance, it is estimated that the plot will still be copied according to the original work. Cut it, don't waste time.

This funny expression must be used, right?

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This book was good at the beginning, but now it is broken. The bad thing is that Li Huayuan went to the Sea of ​​Chaos Stars alone, and Old Devil Han was useless. Another thing is that the teleportation array on the side of the Sea of ​​Chaos Stars was cut off. If Li Huayuan was teleported back to Tiannan by the golden finger system to save people, he would not be able to return to the Sea of ​​Chaos Stars. The solution is to rewrite it from Chapter 84 and take Han Li and Xin Ruyin to the Chaos Star Sea together, then you can continue to use it. Haha, my personal opinion, the author's reference

If you can take Zi Ling's mother into your hands, you will gain power. Wouldn't it be nice to build the Miaoyin Sect yourself?

Do you think a great master + funny author is really suitable?