Dear Lord Broom Knight

The Fourth Scourge is still well written. I have read it three or four times (although I haven't finished it yet), but Hill has a warm and happy feeling. Broom Knight was written a bit hastily, too hastily, and it felt like it was following a template. Lowry was only 12 years old, and he fell into the king's level of intrigue without any ability to protect himself. He didn't have Hill's sense of freedom and lightness. For the sake of the author's great honor, I still invested, and I hope to take a step closer in the future (｡･ω･｡)ﾉ♡

I followed this from the previous book. I have been following this book for a while since the beginning. How should I put it, I am quite satisfied with the rhythm and writing style. I read the last one when I had nothing to do. Of course, I read the first 70%, but I didn't read the last 30%. Why? Because the little bear has become a background board, I have no desire to follow. As for this book, it started well, but then it became a background story. It was based on supporting characters, and the supporting characters were constantly changed, and the supporting characters were constantly changed. If I want to see another person as the protagonist, can I change the book? I'm looking at Lori! Goodbye.

Study

Your parents raised you healthy and owed you nothing, and they didn't suck your blood later. They just wanted to better help your elder brother, so they stopped taking care of you, and then you became strangers? Isn't this protagonist a bit mean? Is it correct that your parents only love you?

This article is really more uncomfortable to read than the Little Bear article. Every time I talk about it, the plot starts to diverge, sometimes adding a lot of psychological changes, sometimes inserting a lot of background information, or suddenly a large background setting. Often when mother and son are chatting, the next paragraph will diverge to a foreign country. They talk a lot and then suddenly return to the plot in one sentence, and then diverge in another direction in the next paragraph 😅. The rich character background is not so rich, it is all fragmented information accumulation. If you read it a little faster, you will miss the main plot. I was stunned for a while. The previous page is about the adventure group struggling to survive, and the next page is about the development of the National Knights. It means that the civilized theme, content setting, and writing style of this article are all better than the previous article. Why are there fewer readers? If you are not an old bookworm, I really can't stand it.

In the previous book, there were no problems due to player adjustment, but in this book, I have been sighing 1 Write about what so-and-so did 2 Sigh about so-and-so's intention 3 Write about yourself now 4 Recall yourself before time travel 5 Make an analogy to so-and-so 6 Promote the plot To put it simply, the plot takes up one-sixth.

The relationship is messy and the story is fragmented. Have you read too many novels? This is a serious Western fantasy story telling.

The previous book involves players, and from the perspective of players, it makes sense. This book is about a bunch of indifferent supporting characters. The protagonist is sleeping. You are good enough. Half of the 2 million words are just water. I stopped reading and slipped away 😅

I wish the author great inspiration and good sales of his new book! Achievements to the next level! Contribute to getting out of the circle, and I hope this book will get out of the circle 3 soon!

Please ask Shen Nong. I think the plot is controversial and the portrayal of the protagonist is also controversial.

A little curious 1. Why are there gods in the low-demon world? 2. Are the requirements for bloodlines in the low-demon world so high? 3. Why does awakening spiritual power mean weak strength? I look forward to the author telling me the answer in the future.

It is recommended to revise it again, otherwise even the old readers will not be able to retain it with your starting point, let alone the newcomers.

The story is well written, but compared to the first book, it is too wordy and watery. When I first read the first book, I could still read the first half, but the second half was just for the sake of reading. It didn't matter if I didn't read it for several pages. Finally, by the time it is finished, it can be considered as the first half of the story. I have made a perfect mark, and now it is better. This second book is just like the second half of the first one, both are so watery. Writing back and forth about psychological activities is not good at all.

After reading Chapter 12, I feel like I still don't understand it. It would be nice if I could talk less nonsense. I quite like the setting.

Dear book lovers, come and check in if you have nothing to do 🙏

Are you crazy? There are dozens of chapters without any role for the protagonist? ? ? Oh my gosh, in the last book Hill participated in plot activities and appeared in player dialogue. Is this crazy that the protagonist doesn't appear in dozens of chapters? ? It feels like it's been more than half a month, and it's all about supporting characters, and the protagonist doesn't even deserve to appear in the supporting characters' dialogue? ? ? 💀💀

The core problem is the author's writing habits, but they are very unfriendly to readers. Originally, for a small incident, the author could write you every character and even the things related to each character, until the author realized that what he wrote was a bit biased. This resulted in the small incident that was originally written about a dozen pictures at most, can be dragged out to dozens of pictures.

Your chatty writing style stuffs a bunch of settings into your head, which is very unfriendly to read.

Everything took a long time to write, the plot progressed too slowly, and any branch dialogue could take a long time to analyze. The writing was like an old lady's foot-binding cloth, it was too ink-stained. This is not an ordinary article, a bland emotional description, the scene description can make people feel emotional, the author's ink is all kinds of so-called plot analysis, this is too nonsense, abandon it.

I very much agree with the author's handling of family members in Lori's past and present lives. After all, feelings are mutual and partiality is obvious. I can only say that Lori is lucky and was not blinded by superficial family affection. After all, there is a saying that love is where the money is. Giving money to others only with words is definitely not the love you say you love. It is now 2024. Raising a child is not just about food, clothing, housing and transportation. Spiritual needs and stable emotional values ​​are also very important for children. It's just that this kind of family is rare and desirable. But it doesn't mean that you don't know what it means to truly love your children. Unfortunately, many people still have outdated concepts.

What are you writing about? It's so hard to understand and uncomfortable to read, but the setting is okay.

Too much psychological description and exposition. No useful information.

In fact, the writing is okay, but the author likes to write too loosely, just like your chatty friend calling you out in the middle of the night to talk about the wonderful adventures in his dreams. It is interesting, but if it doesn't fit with the author's brain circuit, it will be like watching a pirated novel where the subject person and the opposite adjective have been replaced and the subject person and the opposite adjective are replaced, and the reader frowns.

I can't watch it even if it's limited and free, but the writing has a lot of room for improvement. The narrative must be logical, structured, and linear, and the writing must be crisp and clear.

I thought it was a brother who wrote about swords and magic, but when I saw Runaway, I thought this book should be placed in the Japanese light novel category. 70% Is describing psychological activities or scenes (you can also think of it as water), and the remaining 30% is the advancement of events, but haha, this author has almost no combat plot. In other words, after writing 400,000 to 500,000 words, I finally have a battle description of a few hundred words. In summary, he should not appear in the game category! He's on the wrong track!

As a long-time reader of the author's last book, I admit that the author's book has some "problems", such as the plot progressing slowly, the content being scattered, and the writing style being a bit dry. However, this is not a quick and enjoyable article. If you want to read these two, you can leave. In addition, everyone comes to Qidian to read novels. The writing style is not the key point. Don't be too demanding, just smooth and good fonts. I personally feel that this is a Western fantasy novel that is more orthodox and friendly to newcomers. At least those who are not familiar with the DND world view can read it (I am) (I should say so, I don't know, so I will say so next).       Furthermore, the DND elements of this book and the previous book are the smooth connection and reasonable interpretation of the DND worldview and plot. At the same time, it writes a realistic, rigorous and reasonable multiverse framework, explaining the existence of a world without low, medium and high demons. The division of camps is not a cold and rigid nine-square grid (each world has its own standards but the major categories are the same). God is not a simple large-sized person (emphasis!) (Many books have the problem of simply treating gods as large-sized people. If humans can grant gods, I will not I have to mutter a few words about being a natural god. Born before humans, they must have their own unique behavioral logic. How can it be consistent with humans? Moreover, the levels of life are different. Even if they are similar to humans, the underlying behavioral logic is also different.) It is not just a few words on the background. The historical context of the multiverse and this world has gradually been clearly revealed, and the behavioral logic of humans and gods has also been explained. Each camp is not a stereotype of pure good and pure evil, it is very realistic (emphasis!). Moreover, the process of gradually unfolding the worldview will not be confusing, and you can slowly integrate it from the online western fantasy In addition, a message to the author: opening limits and exemptions always requires a few words (no cost for scolding, but discussion). No one can be pleased, and most of them are silent, and not all those who like it will type or read book circles or join groups one by one. Keep your mentality, keep a steady pace, and continue to write good books. Don't worry too much

By the time I reached the 800th chapter, I was completely familiar with this style of writing, without any discomfort.

Although Lowry wants to go to Toril to meet the players, the progress should be very early. The main text should be about the restoration of world consciousness and the opening of the world. If we go to other worlds later, we may have to make an extra chapter. There is a high probability that players will not come here. Although there are various things in this world, it is still generally controllable. World awareness should not require help from players. But you can still eat some melons from Little Bear.

After I said on other reading software that the author was slow to update, I suddenly remembered that I could check the update time in Qidian. I found that the author basically updates two chapters every day. I wrongly blamed the author. Maybe I misremembered the last time I read this book. He updated two chapters every day. He is very dedicated to updating basically every day. I hope the author can stick to it.

Although the writing is a bit scattered, there are many details that I have not considered. For example, the protagonist's mother's natal family may be married with money, so the protagonist can securely have a territory. I will look at this later. It's quite valuable as a reference.