Bottom of Thick Fog

Cool! Cool! Cool! The crazy world and human beings, there are many settings similar to Cthulhu in the article, but the flavor is really written out. With such a smooth and delicate technique, I feel that I am definitely not a novice. The indescribable scenes in the article are really creative, my brain Hai can definitely imagine the crazy scene of majestic and overturning the world. I am also an old bookworm who has been reading books for several years. This book is definitely a fairy grass in my eyes. The current data may not be very good, but please stick with it. This book has the potential to become a god.

The author's writing skills are excellent, and the writing is smooth and comfortable to read. However, I didn't get the key points of the web article at all. The description of the plot is not detailed enough, and I don't know what is attractive. , often skip these attraction points, and deliberately render some details and atmosphere that they take for granted. The plot and outline are designed with the same issues mentioned above, so everyone in the comment area feels the same. The plot is boring and unattractive. Naturally, some book friends will suggest that you delete something. First of all, it can be thought that the subject of fog has defeated 90% of the blind writers from the starting point. One advantage is that he has strong basic writing skills and can express the plot arrangement smoothly. Finally, if you can carefully polish the ups and downs of the plot and some design points that are very inspiring for the world view. I believe your next book will be a hit. Think about it, Daogui, in fact, his writing of some plots is not as smooth as yours, but with his unique world view and the design of the protagonist's crazy and split personality, he is so attractive that you can't stop watching. The plot has twists and turns and climaxes one after another. Think about your book again, why do you attract readers to read it? Apart from the background of a foggy movie, what else is there at its core? It felt like I was watching TV series from the 1980s and 1990s on CCTV 8, such as "My Fathers" and "Spring Grass". Even your plot doesn't have as many ups and downs as these TV dramas. . . Having said all this, I also like novels with the theme of fog, and I hope to see an excellent online novel with the theme of fog. Come on, I suggest you reorganize it, otherwise it will definitely be tepid.

The Madonna plot at the beginning was immediately deleted from the book.

How should I put it? To say that there is no writing style is simply to slander the author. But the first three chapters can only be said to be mediocre, passable but not outstanding, and have nothing outstanding. Let me share my personal views: First, judging from the first three chapters, the theme of the novel is definitely towards horror and weirdness, but the beginning does not create a scary and weird atmosphere, or there is nothing interesting about it. Secondly, there is a group fight at the beginning, there are too many characters, and it is difficult to remember. Of course, logically speaking, you must first stick together when encountering problems. Moreover, it also involves your own safety issues. There is nothing wrong with the author's writing. But personally, I prefer solo play to team play. Finally, I personally think this book is not outstanding, but it is definitely not bad. You can try a few chapters in case you find it interesting.

In terms of subject matter, it has surpassed 90% of the starting point of heavy entertainment literature.

Okay, I've read three chapters, at least the writing style is better than the average author 😁

It looks so uncomfortable. I suggest you delete the paragraph.

It's really well written, with a strong sense of immersion. It would be better if there were some side-effects of monsters that are scary to think about.

Very appetizing, come on, author

The first one is about signal isolation. It is isolation. It does not directly shield the signal for you. It is similar to the fact that there are countless spaces in the fog, not just on the earth, so it is directly useless to the outside world. In most cases, the signal in the local area can be used, but the effect is not good. I can't say anything else. After all, it is a hole that has not been filled. Second, I will read the comments carefully. If you have any questions, just ask them directly. Posting questions and expressing anger are two different things. There is no need to attack personally. Third, there is already special software for typos, but I have to say that machine translation is a bit tricky, but most of the problems should be solved.

It is necessary to describe more about the protagonist's feelings and less about narration, especially when the plot is tense, it will be very out of touch.

It's a bit grammatical, but at least the first few chapters are okay. After that, the story started to flow (although it was advancing the plot, it was very bland) and it lost its attraction for me. It's not very powerful, and I have a feeling that there may be an upgrade to fight monsters later, but I can't see it. What the author wrote is still okay, and friends in the future can try it. Is it just that my taste is weird?

I want to know what this black claw looks like.

The word count is a little less. Let's read it again when it reaches over 200,000, right? I hope it's not the Virgin, the harem!

I have two teddy dogs, one named Mi Dou and one named Milo😂 I suddenly found this book, it's such a strange feeling

It's not that easy to write a Christian novel about anchors. You must first figure out what the core elements of a Christian novel are. Sanity and madness are the elements of genre novels, and your novel must revolve around these two points. Be afraid of the unknown, dare to face the unknown, and accept the unknown to have a chance of survival.

You can kick this protagonist out and let Shen Liang be the protagonist. It's really like being mentally retarded.

The author's writing is still a bit poor. Monsters can't climb walls? Aren't you afraid if the door on the first floor is locked? ? ? Is the author writing about a zombie apocalypse? ? ? And the author also wrote that those who poke their heads out from high floors will be eaten by monsters? ! ! And there is backup power. Is it necessary to break open the door on the first floor? ? ? The author has no brains.

It is recommended that the author divide into paragraphs more frequently, and a whole sentence can be divided into one paragraph. Your paragraph is too long. It's tiring to read on mobile phones. Many people don't want to read it.