I Am a Mortal Cultivating Immortality and Being Rewarded for My Hard Work

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The other plots are good, but the relationship with Xiao Han is still not handled well. Xiao Ping should either be a shared secret between the two from the beginning, or it should be more of a family relationship. It's hard to cover up and make embarrassing transactions. In the chapter about the Ascension Order, you can give him the order directly, and then Xiao Han takes the initiative to send two thousand-year-old elixirs in exchange. Then the protagonist looks at the elixirs and looks at him with deep meaning, then pats him on the shoulder and leaves. This is smoother. You can mention it in the subsequent chapters. Later, after Xiao Han learns about the value of the elixir, he later realizes that the protagonist has already noticed the problem and his little secret. Next time they meet, the two of them can smoothly and tacitly trade the elixir normally, and there will be no need to worry about Xiao Han's secret when he asks for the elixir later.

The existence of the golden finger breaking function is Schrödinger-style, completely serving the author's control level. The most outrageous thing is that after the protagonist Nascent Soul collected 80% of the supplies to break through the realm, the protagonist suddenly found a desert island and used Golden Finger to retreat to break through the realm. A few chapters later, the protagonist dug up the best spiritual stone, and suddenly wanted to save it for use in breaking through the realm - Goldfinger's realm-breaking function disappeared in the protagonist's world again.

In fact, no woman really likes Han Li, but as Han Li gradually became stronger, she didn't care whether she was using him or following his orders. She admired the strong man, so she gradually came into contact with Han Li! Nan Guanwan only took away her first time because of Han Li, Mo Fengwu was just a medicinal relic from Doctor Mo that Han Li gave her, and she had a slight affection for Han Li. Forget it, Mo Yuzhu looked down on Han Li when they first met, Mo Caihuan looked down on Han Li for the first time, Yuan Yao felt like a passerby to Han Li when they met for the first time, Chen Qiaoqing didn't even look at Han Li for the first time, she was just saved by Han Li and took advantage of him, Yin Yue also looked down on Han Li at the beginning. If you really look at this book carefully, you will see that there is no love at all. The main plot is to become an immortal and become stronger.

This book has many female protagonists! Emphasis again!

If you don't write about the protagonist being brave and diligent, he should still be as cautious as the original work. Why should I read your book? It would be better to read the original work.

Come on, don't accept the heroine in the early stage. When is the time when Yuanying considers accepting it? I am more optimistic about Ling Yuling. After all, there are many tortoises in the shallow waters of Luan Xinghai. There are only a few Yuanyings who can be on the stage, and the resources are sufficient.

This book is considered a masterpiece among mortals! But the protagonist's brain is not worthy of God's reward for hard work!

It's too fast for you to form elixirs in your thirties!

The writing in the Mortal fanfic is very good, but here are some suggestions for the author. Don't repeat the same old map of Han Lao Mo. It's better to develop more than 50% new maps. After all, everyone who can read Mortal Fans is a fan of old books. If you want us to spend money, we must come up with new tricks. I personally am not willing to spend money to repeat the map of Han Laomo.

To be honest, the writing is quite good, but it's a pity that I didn't accept Fan Jingmei, the number one show in Luan Xing Hai. There is no random collection of books in this book, and the story is reasonably adapted to my taste.

Care for seedlings, I hope it's not a stallion story 🙂

It's the one who accepts Nangong again. . . . The book is okay, but it may not be to my liking.

The heroine is talented, Nangong Ziling Yuanyao Xin Ruyin

Yuan Yao Yanli can be taken in or not. By the time the two protagonists appear, they have basically formed pills. They can be taken in as concubines.

I remember the Fairyland chapter. There is no Taoist ancestor of the origin of wood, because this Taoist ancestor has been wiped out by Gu Luojin, and the law of the origin of wood is in the hands of Gu Luojin. Four Taoist ancestors from the Five Elements of Heaven joined in, but there was no Taoist from the origin of Wood.

It would be considered upper-middle-class among mortal fans. It can be seen that the original work has been read carefully and there are some original plot expansions. The only criticism I have is that the author's positioning of the protagonist is a bit double-standard, and he feels a bit hypocritical... But it's still acceptable.

I think this book is better written by a mortal, a little worse than the Scientific Cultivation of Immortality, but much better than others

I hope you can finish writing, come on!

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It's a book worth reading, and it's considered top-notch among mortals

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