Immortality: Starting from Taking Care of Dao Brother's Wife and Mother

Let's first analyze the Taoist brother, wife and daughter (I won't go into details about the good points, let's talk about the shortcomings): 1. The Taoist brother's book feels more like fantasy to me than a fairy tale, and it doesn't feel right. 2. There is really almost no description of environment in Brother Dao's book (it's been a long time, so I may have forgotten it). This is not a matter of the author's lack of word count. Other types of descriptions are better if there is no description of environment. Xianxia really lacks a bit of flavor. 3. There are quite a lot of women in Brother Dao's book. How can I put it, women feel a little uncomfortable when they write but don't accept it, so many women actually don't need to write. After all, it's a bit boring if there are too many plots. It's easy to write in the early stage, but it's really difficult to write in the later stage, and the plot is very slow. 4. The main character's cultivation in Brother Tao's book is a bit too simple. This does not refer to the difficulty of cultivation but to the process. It's hard for me to describe this. I don't want the author to write about cultivation without a plot (I also hate books that keep practicing and have nothing to learn). I want to write about the protagonist's cultivation in a way that explains the cultivation system. 5. The world structure of Brother Dao's book is a bit "poisonous". It's not that there is a logical problem, it can only be said that it is a bit bad. This point can be easily written by the author by looking at the world structure of other immortal heroes (I personally think that the world structure of Wu Dong Qian Kun is very good, of course, it does not refer to the invasion of evil gods, but to the power and distribution of power). ——————The above are my personal views and suggestions on Brother Dao's shortcomings. The new book can learn from it 😁😁 Suggestions for the new book: 1. Since the protagonist's cheat in the new book needs to kill demons, there is no need to It is necessary to keep the protagonist within the family. Don't give up on growth out of caution, otherwise it will be a bit choking (and maybe a little poisonous. Anyway, if I have such a cheat, it is impossible to stay in the family. At most, I will be more cautious and obscene when slaying demons 🤔🤔). Two, you really shouldn't write about too many women in the early stage. I slept with two in just ten chapters, and four appeared. I guess all four will be accepted 😏 Third, it is not recommended to establish a family in the early stage. You can write more about the growth of the protagonist (not mind and experience, but cultivation and strength), and explain the early training system by the way. Fourth, the ability and boundaries of the plug-in must be set well. If it is too strong, it will collapse easily, and if it is too weak, it will not be easy to develop. Therefore, I hope the author will make a clear outline for the setting of the plug-in. Fifth, you can learn from some views on the cultivation system: 1. Spiritual roots: The speed of practice between different spiritual roots can be roughly explained (for example, it takes five years to build a foundation with a single spiritual root, ten years for a double spiritual root, twenty years for a three spiritual root, forty years for a four spiritual root, and eighty years for a mixed spiritual root) 2. Characteristics of different realms: For example, during the Qi training period, the most primitive spiritual power is accumulated to forge the body. There should not be much spiritual power to cast spells, and the ability to cast is also a fire ball. (You shouldn't be unable to fly with a sword, otherwise it would feel like you are lowering your level of immortality); in the foundation period, you can truly embark on the path to immortality, extend your life for a hundred years (around 200 years old), and begin to accumulate spiritual power (the setting of the foundation period in Brother Dao's book is very good), practice various spells (the most distinctive one is flying with a sword), and you can only use it in the foundation period. Beginning to refine elixirs (this is really important); the alchemy stage can be said to have broken through the level of mortal life. It takes three small tribulations to break through, extending life for 300 years (about 500 years old). It can activate the spiritual energy between heaven and earth. The power of spells is huge, and the spiritual power in the body is endless. It can complete the four realms of front, middle and back, divided according to the degree of condensation of the golden elixir; the Nascent Soul stage requires nine small tribulations to break through. One Generally speaking, the lifespan will not be increased (it can range from hundreds of years depending on the quality of the golden elixir). The biggest feature of the Nascent Soul stage is to seize the body (there is no limit to the number of times to seize the body, but it will consume the lifespan of the soul. The lifespan of the soul is the lifespan of the physical body. When the lifespan of the physical body is exhausted, the soul will also dissipate). Generally, it is not an accidental death, nor will it be reborn by seizing the body. Another ability is to travel to the world, and the soul can be separated from the body for a long time. I have no thoughts about the realm after Nascent Soul 🔨 Sixth, (the most important thing), the author can slightly polish the process of sleeping with women. For this, you can read the newspaper man and The Silence of the Lambs ( I haven't read other books by Lamb, but the one written by "Sleeping with a Woman" is a masterpiece, especially elegant. You can go and observe the description techniques of the reviewed chapters 😍😍. ————I may be too talkative in some places. I don't know your outline as the author, so some of your suggestions may not be pertinent. I hope Hai will understand. 😁😁 (I have been writing for almost two hours and I am so sleepy that I feel dizzy. I hope you can understand the shortcomings)

I read a book in the past two days: Dou Po, but the script of the heroine 🙂 made my head buzz after reading it. The comment section said that the protagonist was pouted by anti-inflammatory 😓😓, and I was so scared that I didn't dare to read anymore. If you continue reading, come here and calm down your thief's heart 😥, otherwise it will feel like something big will happen if you continue reading There is a saying: When you stare into the abyss, the abyss is also staring into you. The ancients did not deceive me, and they really understood what they said. (To be honest, I still want to see what happens next, but I feel like I won't be able to bear it if I continue to watch... I still don't have a strong enough mind 😟)

I have read your book, the author, and there are too many women. I like harems, but you also have too many in each book. I hope this book is not so outrageous. I think harems should also accept women who have status, status, and good talents. Not just everything, too many, but each heroine will have less roles, and the characters created will also be very boring.

Eunuch again? Slipping away.

Come on, author, I have been following it all the way from Dou Po Zhi Ba. Although I have been chasing pirated copies in school, I will definitely subscribe to the original version when I graduate in June this year. I must write high-quality products with over a million words, you bastard!

This name is a bit too outrageous, what the hell is Brother Dao 🙂

A lot of explanations, but the logic still doesn't make sense. As I said before, longevity is not guaranteed for everything, including leaving a daughter-in-law for others. Then he said that if you can cultivate, you will have longevity, and if you kill the rats who can cultivate, you will have longevity. Finally, it is written that the daughter-in-law has spiritual roots and is at the second level of Qi training. This kind of person has no longevity? Then he wrote that if his wife practiced Qi at one level, she would be able to live about thirty years longer.

Don't hang too hard, otherwise it will easily crash later.

Two monthly passes

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This is from a Taoist brother, wife and daughter. I hope this book will not suddenly speed up the pace in the later period like that one. It is better to have a slower pace in the article about cultivating immortals and farming. Please make it as long as possible.

All I can say is that I don't know how to write about daily life. It's no different from writing about a stallion. I should study hard.

If you want to win by quantity, then cut if you don't get results.

Which one has been done? I'll go take a look and see what the author's writing is like. I'm reading it.

I feel like the author could add a limit on longevity storage, a limit of one or more times the longevity of a pig's trotters, and add that the level of obtaining longevity cannot be too low than that of a pig's trotters. Pig's trotters can be cultivated or cultivated, and it cannot be too simple. Otherwise, if it is too big, there will be no plot, and you can only use daily or innovative techniques and spells to complete the plot. After all, it's hard to explain if it's accidental or targeted too much. In the future, Pig's Foot can be used to open a beast-controlling and breeding family, and the immortal and beast-controlling stories can be brought together. There can also be many creative ideas. In the later stages, the immortal version of the beast-controlling evolution will follow the path of fate and good fortune. Wasn't the author complaining before that he couldn't write well above the level of becoming a god? How about using this setting for this book? How about learning from the realm of beast-controlling literature and the level of killing and transforming it into immortality-cultivating literature? In the early stage, the taste of cultivating immortals became available. In the later stage, life and time were used to promote the way to control beasts. After all, the avenue of time or lifespan is too high. Even if a pig's trotter is passed through by an ordinary person, it still has low qualifications. This is just a suggestion. If anyone has any other clever tips, you can also discuss it. There is no need to say anything to criticize me. I have not discredited or brushed off the praise. Don't be a clown.

The harem is good, but there are too many people and the names are so complicated that it's hard to remember them, so it's boring.

Although I was ready to move the bookshelf after reading the chapter about reproducing heirs at the beginning, I would like to advise you, don't be so weird with chapter titles. It's three words, three words. Why don't you put this three-character classic aside?

To be honest, isn't it troublesome for you to have a title? It's only three words long, and it's not easy to read.

Are you driving so fiercely and fiercely now?

Why do so few people watch it?