Mythology: It All Begins with Abducting a Valkyrie

The protagonist, a serf, tries to reason with his ruler, a baron?! Is that a joke? What gives him the audacity? His mother is the village chief's daughter? Is it a rebellion? Or does it affect the baron's succession? Does the duke he serves dislike him?

A book title like "Kidnapping the Valkyrie" followed by a series of comprehensive and overwhelming suppressions of the protagonist—is it torturing the protagonist or the reader...?

Author, you're writing a historical myth. The protagonist is a transmigrator with the identity of the son of a heroic white dragon and the assistance of three Valkyries, not a pure historical novel about a serf's rise. You've managed to turn a wish-fulfillment story into a protagonist-torture tale. How did you do that? People say it's all about building suspense before climaxing, where's the climax in your story? Are you trying to tell me the Baron can kill three Valkyries?

There's too much empty talk involved; it's like trying to reason with a bunch of Vikings. It'd be more reasonable to just punch him.

After reading it, I realized it's all just nonsensical, repetitive popular science. You could have just given an introduction; I don't want to read your tedious annotations of myths and biographies. I'm reading this book for your story, not for those ancient Greek and Norse myths.

Seriously? A time traveler, a believer in God, and now Odin? Do you even know what you're writing?

Whether from a mythological or historical perspective, the protagonist's first reaction should be revenge—to kill everyone involved in his poisoning, including the Baron. Otherwise, he'd just be a coward, no matter how many reasons he gives. It doesn't change the fact that he's a coward.

Bored, I want to see battles, killings, and fucking. I'd be willing to die just to see a fight between the strong.

It's all over the place, and the watered-down parts are way too obvious.

Shennong's feedback: The idea is great, the descriptions are rich, and the titles were revisited in the first 20 chapters; it's just a bit too detailed and verbose, but that depends on individual preferences. Mythological stories do require some repetition, otherwise I'd forget the titles after reading the first few chapters…