Bleach: the Forbidden Person of Soul Society

There is too much nonsense at the beginning, why do you say it is nonsense? If it is not attractive enough and boring, then it is nonsense. The first picture can be a setting picture, but it should be interesting. The Golden Three needs to hone its writing style and must be right about the subject matter, while Invincible needs to be a little more relaxed. I hope my personal opinion is helpful to you. Goodbye Jianghu

This... Looks like a fog.

Some small details were not handled well. For example, Hana-chan changed her name after being defeated by Zaragi. Xiao Yaqianliu's name is Hana-san's name.

The one with the lowest popularity at the beginning of the Sea of ​​Death is the God of Death, and the gap between him and the other two is not that big.

Do you have to talk so much just to enter the captain's dojo? How many words do I need to write to express the journey of these steps?

To be honest, when I saw the protagonist's name being forcibly changed, I didn't want to watch it. Author, do you understand what it means to change your name, especially giving up your surname?

Not many people write about the Grim Reaper. Death fans can tell the author's level or writing style by seeing a few photos of him touching the hairspray hand (mainly because Lan Da is a tough guy and has too high a personality). Will confirm if it is (white text). Then confirm whether the book will be abandoned. The God of Death is very difficult to write. Come on, author. Also, don't choose the name of the fantasy protagonist. . .

Come on! The big brother who writes about Death! 🙂

First. . First change the name of the protagonist to one that suits the style of the painting. Secondly, after writing the character's dialogue, read it yourself or let an artificial voice read it. . Then at least your writing can be a little better

Looking at the title of this book, what I fear most when reading fan fiction is that it's all about pretending to be a slap in the face, being stupid and not having a good plot.

The quality is still there, but there are a few people. I hope I can stick with it.

Come on! Wonderfully written!

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Sad, the only comment is the starting point

Sister-in-law Chun Shui's death was a bit forced