Swallowed Star: Master of the Primordial Chaos

Are you kidding me about the Stone Luan King's storyline? With 23 times the genetic potential and 41 times the body amplitude, how could someone so invincible as a king go to the extraterritorial battlefield? The plot of the protagonist being a realm lord is just too outrageous! He gets discovered to be a realm lord by a mere king—where's his vigilance?

The opening of the first chapter is too redundant. Is it really necessary to write about the protagonist's life before he transmigrated? Did that woman also time-travel? Otherwise, why mention it? Just start writing about the preliminary martial arts assessment and casually mention that the protagonist time-traveled and then got a cheat code, wouldn't that be enough?

Forget it! Another case of the nanny mentality! With your system around, you haven't received any help from anyone! Why should Hong deserve your help? You can even ignore Luo Feng! You could easily create the sixth major power with this system! And don't you think you've made the protagonist too overpowered?

Special life forms with a gene multiplier of 1,000 or more are born immortal. Those with a gene multiplier of 10,081 are born as masters of the universe, such as the eight born beast gods. All those with a gene multiplier of 10,081 or more are true gods or void true gods.

You should check carefully to see if there are any grammatical errors 😥

Could you tell me how many levels the protagonist has advanced through cultivation?

The progress is quite fast. 👏👏👏

After reading it, I feel there are many areas where the author could improve. For example, when you try to reach the tenth level, wouldn't your master cover for you?

The protagonist spends a year in Chaos City, which is equivalent to over 300 years in the secret realm. If he spends 30 years there, 10,000 years will have passed in the secret realm. Gaining recognition from the laws of time after 10,000 years is nothing special; even Luo Feng, who lived for several thousand years, gained recognition from the laws of space. 30 Years in Chaos City, 100 years in the primordial universe, 10,000 years in the secret realm.

I've done the math and this book is going to be abandoned. The pace is too fast. They've already written the genius battle, which is only a few hundred thousand words long. There are no details or opportunities, and the time transitions are too fast. If the author keeps writing like this, it won't be long before the author realizes that they don't know what to write or how to write it, and then the book will be abandoned. After all, the time transitions are really fast.