The Embers of the Sword

1. Group portraits are naturally good, but the author writes too much about some minor supporting characters. Really good writing is about writing more flesh and blood of characters in fewer words. (For example, the memory of the old woman in Oyue Kingdom before she died would be too outrageous to use one chapter.) 2. Switching of perspectives. It is really uncomfortable to switch to some irrelevant perspectives during the high-level meeting, especially for those who are following the update. They have to wait for a whole day and feel lonely. (If you have to switch the perspective to promote foreshadowing, you should describe it in concise language and then switch back) 3. It was not exciting enough, I saw the end of Bei Hunting. This book is called Swordsmanship. I really haven't seen the story of the sword cultivator. The excitement of a swordsman makes readers want to vote for a hundred monthly votes. Even a book like "Sword Comes", which is a reasonable book, has a plot that is so exciting. 4. The plot is procrastinating. It is good to see the gray line of grass and snakes, but the pulse is thousands of miles long. But it's really hard to write about unnecessary plots from time to time and spend a lot of pen and ink. 5. I came from "Fortress of Light". In my opinion, the ending of that book was also unfinished. I guess the author couldn't continue writing. At that time, I thought I could write that the protagonist went to heaven. The same goes for that book. There was so much foreshadowing before the protagonist came out that it was boring. Although Xiao Yan in "Fights Breaking the Sphere" is jokingly called the stuck king, the length of the plot before he got stuck was acceptable, and it was really satisfying when he got to the point. 6. I can keep watching because I still have expectations for Xie Xuanyi. I hope he will lose his vest soon. I haven't watched the rest yet. I hope it won't take too long. 7. The author's description of some scenes and the way of conveying the artistic conception are quite good, and there is no plot such as the traitor in the Sword Palace harming the protagonist, which is quite difficult. 8. Come on!

I watched this ending twice and it really didn't hold my breath, so I'm going to subscribe to it in full. Bai Ze and Qing Deng are really a scourge. They are afraid that the world will be invaded by shadows, so they organize all heavenly beings to commit suicide. If you're afraid that the mole will grow and die, why don't you just kill it directly? This is an outrageous idea. The setting of the line of annihilation is also outrageous: if the annihilation of the Yuan directly takes away the Yuan Yiyi, then there will be no subsequent living beings from the source. In order to prevent all living beings from being killed by shadows, why not let everyone be born from the beginning? As for the Yuan-destroying explosion (mass suicide), wouldn't it still be the world of vitality at the end of the explosion? In the end, the world was still invaded by shadows, which was equivalent to destroying the Yuan and causing loneliness. In fact, the shadow invasion was still very early, and the gods were simply unfounded.

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In addition to the previous evaluation, I have read two volumes so far. In fact, the latter part is still good, but I feel that the writing style is improving. There are still more or less problems with the writing style in the first 20 chapters or so. According to the golden three chapter principle, if it is not well-conceived, some people may run away, but after persevering, I can read the rest of the content. This is based on 80% progress. I have almost finished reading this book now, and I can define the character of the protagonist. It should be similar to Sun Bing, the Sword Emperor. He has feelings but is not trapped by love. He is just more decisive and less passionate. I caught up with the latest, so I won't comment for the time being. I'll check it out again.

This book is very good, but a little lacking

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The more I think about it, the angrier I get. I recently played Sword Bones for the second time, and the transition between the early and mid-term was actually very good. Later, after killing Taizong, the plot became confusing. Many times I didn't understand what the problem was. After reading it over and over again, I feel more and more sorry for Xu Qingyan, but I can understand it and have felt this way before. What I can't understand is that after rejecting Xu, you wrote about Ning Yi going to see Ye Hongfu's body fragment. Don't you think it's very inconsistent? In fact, it was already a novel many years ago. At that time, you had just graduated not long ago, and the later conception was really lacking. I couldn't read this new book in the early stage, maybe it was Jiangu who had the first impression. I only hope that you will get better and better, and so will your work.

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Overall, the book is fine, and the writing is stable, but the storyline is extremely screwed Before Lotus Scroll, it kept a normal pace. It may be that I haven't read it for so long that I forgot to apply a beauty filter But it started to show signs of success from the beginning of Beikari. Stand up, and finally highlight an unclear meaning. Nothing happened. You can say that the setting completes xxx, but in terms of perception, it just highlights an unclear meaning. Xie Xuanyi does not have any obvious gains and does not advance the plot much. The image of Lu Yuzhen, which took a long time to write, is not impressive in just a few chapters. The most damning point comes. To quote the above, before the end of the Lotus Volume, it was relatively normal development. In the end, it was full of joy at the end of the volume and a huge amount of revenue was obtained at the end. However, since then, the author seems to have been in conflict with the protagonist, and there is no cool enough point. He also likes to lay the groundwork for a long time and then tell you that nothing happened at the climax of the story. The feeling of the sudden end is really invincible and outrageous, and it is not once or twice. Just list two examples. Come on, I've been stuck for ten minutes before this, and I don't even bother to say it. The benefit from the previous volume was almost zero. Then, when the plot reached its peak, Chen Yuzhong's body happened to be lying on the ground next door, no different from a half-dead man. He was forcibly persuaded by the bald donkey who appeared out of nowhere. It was really difficult to see the person being rescued in the end. Furthermore, today's update really made me live in the place where I abandoned the book. Jiang Miaoyin's line was all over my mind. I don't remember where it started. It started a long time ago. It was the bond from the past life and her love was still intact. After recognizing her identity, she was given the heroine position. Then hundreds of chapters later, she came back to recycle the foreshadowing. The last chapter just finished confessing her love, and the next chapter told me that the protagonist has no feelings😅The heroine is not destined. Then tell me what the significance of this role is, to highlight the impermanence of the world or the protagonist being manipulated. Forced by the situation, if you want to write like this, you shouldn't use her to do it, or you shouldn't give too much space in the front. There is a beauty of forcing a single female protagonist. It's not that you care about this, but that you don't give many scenes in the front, and you can't recycle it as a passerby in the end. To put it bluntly, this is a big poisonous point in online articles. There are really not many authors who dare to write like this. They also specifically say that they are concentrating on the road. Then who is Deng Baiyi? Were they still not familiar with each other at the end of the relationship, or were they forced by the situation and unintentional? The book can be considered a good book. After all, the writing style is not bad, but the author's ideas are really hard to understand. The previous book was quite good, but the plot of this one stands out in an unknown way. The final summary is that it builds momentum in ten chapters and is discouraged in one second. I can't see any high-spirited swordsmanship, only endless compromises and concessions.

This book, I think, the writing is quite good and the plot is good, but the intention is too high. Ten years ago, the whole world wanted to kill the protagonist and took action. Ninety million out of 100 million chose to stand idly by and add fuel to the flames, even including the protagonist's sect. Ninety thousand people out of a billion offered a helping hand to the protagonist, but it was in vain. The protagonist was chased to the sky. Finally, the body fell into the North Sea. There are various desperate situations and betrayals intertwined, not to mention the protagonist being locked up in a dark room for ten years after his death. After being resurrected through the Fountain of Youth, the protagonist's mood is complicated at first, and variously accommodating at other times. Are you sure these emotions are the emotions of the reborn protagonist? Not to mention that in the Secret Avenue Furnace, he temporarily lost his head and put a big Madonna halo on the protagonist. What does life and death in the world have to do with you? Can you help the world? Mei Ming Qi said that if you stick to the Taoist heart, isn't there a demon who wants to make an enemy of the whole family? To be honest, I thought it was funny when I saw this. When you wrote the furnace, you originally wanted to quickly improve the protagonist's strength, but you were afraid that the water would be too obvious, so you lost the name and didn't use it for the protagonist? I suggest the author write a paragraph at the beginning: The protagonist stands on the top of a mountain range in Qingzhou, looking in the direction of the master's door, his eyes flickering, his face uncertain. In the end, the protagonist seemed to have made some kind of determination in his heart, fixed his gaze, took a deep breath, put his hands in front of his mouth and shouted: I decided to reconcile with the world and forgive those who hunted me, world, here I come! Then start picking up the plot behind you, so that readers who have a sense of immersion will not feel uncomfortable. After all, the protagonist has conquered the whole world Haha, let's not talk about it anymore, book friends will help me kick it when the finale comes. Let me take a look at the ending chapter.

Before I woke up, I was tied up by an expert and tied up with a very courageous woman Two steps outside and I met a banshee. It just so happened that this banshee was related to the protagonist, an old friend who could make the protagonist feel guilty I just wanted to leave the banshee alone Immediately came the earthquake impact. Regardless of the banshee, the banshee would die Forced to be taken in The protagonist's path was clearly arranged.

The plot progresses slowly, very slowly. Moreover, as mentioned earlier, so many protagonists returned to the Cipher Sword Palace to investigate the case, but the master came out directly and said that he had given you the Fountain of Immortality, and he knew that you would not die, so he closed the mountain and was not used to it. After reading the files for a while, I immediately figured out who leaked the secret. I have spent so much time describing being hunted and killed, and there is an evil spirit in my sect. It seems that the protagonist is just a pure clown🤡

The author wrote the story as an accident instead. Contradiction. I can't reach literature and art again.

I've always found it strange that the protagonist doesn't hide and recover. He ran to the imperial city without even recovering his Yin Shen cultivation. He wished he didn't die soon, right?

What I want to complain about the most is the emotional drama. Either the protagonist is the type who doesn't have a woman in his heart to draw the sword or the god of nature, or the heroine and emotions are written with the mother-in-law and mother in the middle...

From Xie Xuanyi to Tang Fengshu, everyone has their own arrogance and arrogance. No one's character is popular and flat. They all have unique confidence and frivolity in their own fields. What is attractive is not only the protagonist, but also the supporting characters. Any supporting character alone can open a book. I even think that they should not be called supporting characters. They can all be called the second protagonist in terms of personality charm. There is no "confidant" who blossoms everywhere, and there is no "famous genius" who can outwit and slap people in the face. Everything is told like a storyteller. On the streets and alleys, they are knights with swords in the world, but once they pick up the sword, they will become the unparalleled genius who can turn clouds and rain with their hands. Where it's light and comfortable, it's full of fun, and when it's depressed and frustrated, it's full of emotion. I like a saying that the world is not built around the protagonist, but our story unfolds with the protagonist. Everything they have is not because they are the protagonist, but because they have achieved it, they become the protagonist.

And regarding the female protagonist, I hope the author will only have one female protagonist, and not make the female protagonist look like a second female protagonist, and make the second female protagonist a pure tool with no ending.

What you saw on Little Sweet Potato is quite interesting

It's so annoying! ! ! There is no distinction between priorities and there is nothing to say!

So big, I mean🗡️(trust me)

The content of the previous volume was to write about a villain supporting character who didn't know what role he would play in the future, and then there was a comeback at the end of the volume. This volume started again, leaving aside the protagonist and starting to write some conspiracies. I waited for three days and watched the protagonist enter a city gate to chat for a day? There is no problem with foreshadowing. You are all foreshadowing. Should I wait for the finale to see the twist?

Halfway through this book, I felt uncomfortable. I can tolerate many things, but there are some that I really can't stand. Some of them I found too verbose so I skipped them. But the emotional drama, if you never get married and stay single all your life, then don't write about relationships, don't write about women, and don't spend so much ink laying the groundwork and telling women that you only want the high road. If you have a female protagonist in the end, then don't torture her so much in the early stage. She has died once and is not young anymore. What are you doing?

Can a novice like Deng Baiyi, who has been practicing for a few days, fight in such a scene? It's really unnecessary. The protagonist's combat power is already all kinds of unscientific~ I thought it was okay, but this woman has to force the scene... It's a bit boring.

I have been laying the groundwork for so long, thinking that after finishing this volume, I would finally be promoted to Yin Shen after eating the fruits. However, the most disgusting plot has come. Kill decisively and reborn the protagonist. When the dungeon is settled, you will be given a whole wave of Holy Mother operations. I vomited.

The plot of Beishou feels a bit forced to create conflict. You have to do it by yourself to get the god fruit. You are not alone. Isn't this an easy thing for the two Yang gods in Sword Palace? Going to the Imperial City at the risk of exposing one's identity gives people an awkward feeling in the plot The rest is nothing more than the protagonist slapping those Dragon Girl, Daozi and the like. They are 10 years apart and they are not of the same generation. Moreover, in order to create conflicts, there are always such arrogant and arrogant villains. These villains have never touched the protagonist back then. Don't their elders know what level Xie Xuanyi is? Villains always think that they are better than Xie Xuanyi back then, and their elders can't figure it out? Anyway, I was a little confused when I saw it

The road is ruthless, but people are affectionate. Your master has arranged the match, so let Jiang Miaoyin be promoted from supporting actress to heroine! Don't make any plot points where the protagonist is alone. It's too uncomfortable to watch. Don't make any more changes. One is enough.

1/ I personally think that the previous article does not actually pave the way for the strength of Persimmon. Rather than foreshadowing how strong Persimmon is, it lays down a lot of clues and information about the past, such as the changes in luck between the Sword Palace and Kendo, Sword Palace and Dao Sect, the secrets of the Sword Palace, etc. Persimmon is just an appearance, a splash that the male protagonist encounters when the tide of the times hits the Sword Palace. From the writing of Persimmon's obsession with stepping on Xie Xuanyi's name and his bad state of mind, it has already been shown that his path of cultivation cannot be long-term, and his strength is no better than a paper tiger with a somewhat thick skin, but he has not yet encountered a sharp sword with a handle that can pierce the paper skin. 2/The various emotions caused by pursuing reading are understandable. However, in terms of plot, layout, foreshadowing, rhythm, detail, etc., I think that when you tasted it in the Chinese class, it was a story that had already been written, and the plot of the book has not yet been fully developed, so the judgment at this time is a bit hasty. Everyone has their own way, whether you want to gain some weight before reading it, or whether you want to slowly deepen the story, I think with some patience and time, Panda will give us a good story. (The above is just my subjective opinion, if it offends you, just forget it~) Finally, cats please take good care of themselves! People who support you will always be with you.

There has been a book shortage recently. I looked through the monthly ticket list and found this book at the back. I found that it was written by an old acquaintance of Light Barrier. After reading this book in one sitting, it was quite enjoyable. The pace is slow and the story is more delicate, suitable for reading as a child.

Xie Zhen, Lu Yuzhen, Miaozhen, wouldn't the author know how to name names without the word Zhen? Lazy! Random!

By the way, I haven't read it since the chapter of Asking the Heart. Should I start reading it now or wait?