Sword Dao's Last Ember

1. Group portraits are naturally good, but the author writes too much about some minor supporting characters. Really good writing is about writing more flesh and blood of characters in fewer words. (For example, the memory of the old woman in Oyue Kingdom before she died would be too outrageous to use one chapter.) 2. Switching of perspectives. It is really uncomfortable to switch to some irrelevant perspectives during the high-level meeting, especially for those who are following the update. They have to wait for a whole day and feel lonely. (If you have to switch the perspective to promote foreshadowing, you should describe it in concise language and then switch back) 3. It was not exciting enough, I saw the end of Bei Hunting. This book is called Swordsmanship. I really haven't seen the story of the sword cultivator. The excitement of a swordsman makes readers want to vote for a hundred monthly votes. Even a book like "Sword Comes", which is a reasonable book, has a plot that is so exciting. 4. The plot is procrastinating. It is good to see the gray line of grass and snakes, but the pulse is thousands of miles long. But it's really hard to write about unnecessary plots from time to time and spend a lot of pen and ink. 5. I came from "Fortress of Light". In my opinion, the ending of that book was also unfinished. I guess the author couldn't continue writing. At that time, I thought I could write that the protagonist went to heaven. The same goes for that book. There was so much foreshadowing before the protagonist came out that it was boring. Although Xiao Yan in "Fights Breaking the Sphere" is jokingly called the stuck king, the length of the plot before he got stuck was acceptable, and it was really satisfying when he got to the point. 6. I can keep watching because I still have expectations for Xie Xuanyi. I hope he will lose his vest soon. I haven't watched the rest yet. I hope it won't take too long. 7. The author's description of some scenes and the way of conveying the artistic conception are quite good, and there is no plot such as the traitor in the Sword Palace harming the protagonist, which is quite difficult. 8. Come on!

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Overall, the book is fine, and the writing is stable, but the storyline is extremely screwed Before Lotus Scroll, it kept a normal pace. It may be that I haven't read it for so long that I forgot to apply a beauty filter But it started to show signs of success from the beginning of Beikari. Stand up, and finally highlight an unclear meaning. Nothing happened. You can say that the setting completes xxx, but in terms of perception, it just highlights an unclear meaning. Xie Xuanyi does not have any obvious gains and does not advance the plot much. The image of Lu Yuzhen, which took a long time to write, is not impressive in just a few chapters. The most damning point comes. To quote the above, before the end of the Lotus Volume, it was relatively normal development. In the end, it was full of joy at the end of the volume and a huge amount of revenue was obtained at the end. However, since then, the author seems to have been in conflict with the protagonist, and there is no cool enough point. He also likes to lay the groundwork for a long time and then tell you that nothing happened at the climax of the story. The feeling of the sudden end is really invincible and outrageous, and it is not once or twice. Just list two examples. Come on, I've been stuck for ten minutes before this, and I don't even bother to say it. The benefit from the previous volume was almost zero. Then, when the plot reached its peak, Chen Yuzhong's body happened to be lying on the ground next door, no different from a half-dead man. He was forcibly persuaded by the bald donkey who appeared out of nowhere. It was really difficult to see the person being rescued in the end. Furthermore, today's update really made me live in the place where I abandoned the book. Jiang Miaoyin's line was all over my mind. I don't remember where it started. It started a long time ago. It was the bond from the past life and her love was still intact. After recognizing her identity, she was given the heroine position. Then hundreds of chapters later, she came back to recycle the foreshadowing. The last chapter just finished confessing her love, and the next chapter told me that the protagonist has no feelings😅The heroine is not destined. Then tell me what the significance of this role is, to highlight the impermanence of the world or the protagonist being manipulated. Forced by the situation, if you want to write like this, you shouldn't use her to do it, or you shouldn't give too much space in the front. There is a beauty of forcing a single female protagonist. It's not that you care about this, but that you don't give many scenes in the front, and you can't recycle it as a passerby in the end. To put it bluntly, this is a big poisonous point in online articles. There are really not many authors who dare to write like this. They also specifically say that they are concentrating on the road. Then who is Deng Baiyi? Were they still not familiar with each other at the end of the relationship, or were they forced by the situation and unintentional? The book can be considered a good book. After all, the writing style is not bad, but the author's ideas are really hard to understand. The previous book was quite good, but the plot of this one stands out in an unknown way. The final summary is that it builds momentum in ten chapters and is discouraged in one second. I can't see any high-spirited swordsmanship, only endless compromises and concessions.

This book, I think, the writing is quite good and the plot is good, but the intention is too high. Ten years ago, the whole world wanted to kill the protagonist and took action. Ninety million out of 100 million chose to stand idly by and add fuel to the flames, even including the protagonist's sect. Ninety thousand people out of a billion offered a helping hand to the protagonist, but it was in vain. The protagonist was chased to the sky. Finally, the body fell into the North Sea. There are various desperate situations and betrayals intertwined, not to mention the protagonist being locked up in a dark room for ten years after his death. After being resurrected through the Fountain of Youth, the protagonist's mood is complicated at first, and variously accommodating at other times. Are you sure these emotions are the emotions of the reborn protagonist? Not to mention that in the Secret Avenue Furnace, he temporarily lost his head and put a big Madonna halo on the protagonist. What does life and death in the world have to do with you? Can you help the world? Mei Ming Qi said that if you stick to the Taoist heart, isn't there a demon who wants to make an enemy of the whole family? To be honest, I thought it was funny when I saw this. When you wrote the furnace, you originally wanted to quickly improve the protagonist's strength, but you were afraid that the water would be too obvious, so you lost the name and didn't use it for the protagonist? I suggest the author write a paragraph at the beginning: The protagonist stands on the top of a mountain range in Qingzhou, looking in the direction of the master's door, his eyes flickering, his face uncertain. In the end, the protagonist seemed to have made some kind of determination in his heart, fixed his gaze, took a deep breath, put his hands in front of his mouth and shouted: I decided to reconcile with the world and forgive those who hunted me, world, here I come! Then start picking up the plot behind you, so that readers who have a sense of immersion will not feel uncomfortable. After all, the protagonist has conquered the whole world Haha, let's not talk about it anymore, book friends will help me kick it when the finale comes. Let me take a look at the ending chapter.

Before I woke up, I was tied up by an expert and tied up with a very courageous woman Two steps outside and I met a banshee. It just so happened that this banshee was related to the protagonist, an old friend who could make the protagonist feel guilty I just wanted to leave the banshee alone Immediately came the earthquake impact. Regardless of the banshee, the banshee would die Forced to be taken in The protagonist's path was clearly arranged.

The plot progresses slowly, very slowly. Moreover, as mentioned earlier, so many protagonists returned to the Cipher Sword Palace to investigate the case, but the master came out directly and said that he had given you the Fountain of Immortality, and he knew that you would not die, so he closed the mountain and was not used to it. After reading the files for a while, I immediately figured out who leaked the secret. I have spent so much time describing being hunted and killed, and there is an evil spirit in my sect. It seems that the protagonist is just a pure clown🤡

The author wrote the story as an accident instead. Contradiction. I can't reach literature and art again.

What I want to complain about the most is the emotional drama. Either the protagonist is the type who doesn't have a woman in his heart to draw the sword or the god of nature, or the heroine and emotions are written with the mother-in-law and mother in the middle...

I've always found it strange that the protagonist doesn't hide and recover. He ran to the imperial city without even recovering his Yin Shen cultivation. He wished he didn't die soon, right?

From Xie Xuanyi to Tang Fengshu, everyone has their own arrogance and arrogance. No one's character is popular and flat. They all have unique confidence and frivolity in their own fields. What is attractive is not only the protagonist, but also the supporting characters. Any supporting character alone can open a book. I even think that they should not be called supporting characters. They can all be called the second protagonist in terms of personality charm. There is no "confidant" who blossoms everywhere, and there is no "famous genius" who can outwit and slap people in the face. Everything is told like a storyteller. On the streets and alleys, they are knights with swords in the world, but once they pick up the sword, they will become the unparalleled genius who can turn clouds and rain with their hands. Where it's light and comfortable, it's full of fun, and when it's depressed and frustrated, it's full of emotion. I like a saying that the world is not built around the protagonist, but our story unfolds with the protagonist. Everything they have is not because they are the protagonist, but because they have achieved it, they become the protagonist.