My God, Your Character Is Ruined!

After reading Chapter 150, from the initial shock to the calmness now, I always wanted to say something, so I wrote this article based on my own thoughts. This is the first book I read by Lao Zhou. At the same time, I am also reading the book next door that Li Yuanzhe is updating intermittently. The two have a good relationship, they are both reborn in the realm of scumbags, and even their writing styles are similar. Therefore, by looking at the works from both sides and comparing their respective strengths and weaknesses, we can gain a slightly deeper understanding of the works. Li Yuanzhe's "I Want It All" currently has not much content. I have read it three times and the plot is relatively smooth. The three characters of Xu Yang, Zhou Ziyu and Li Zhe stand upright. The characters of these people are very three-dimensional. To put it simply, Xu Yang is a petty person, Zhou Ziyu is career-oriented, and Li Zhe is a scumbag. These three characters bring the whole book to life. These three people, especially the two female characters, really feel like they are alive in the world. But the problem with the work is that the update is unstable and slow. The plot is relatively smooth, but there are many characters and plots that should not appear. For example, the foreign girl appears at the beginning and leaves after a while. It is not integrated with the entire plot. It is the same without her. The rhythm of the entire article is actually in the early stage. It is disrupted (parents are divorced + the foreign girl flies through the previous chapters in a fast-paced creation, resulting in no deep impression). Another example is a very old-fashioned coincidence, and even the point of coincidence is that one person (Chen). This kind of plot arrangement is very problematic. It can be said that it can be smoother if it is changed to another person. Based on the above problems, another problem arises is that the characters are becoming more and more limited to one area. In the end, there is nothing to say. It is always those few characters communicating, like a drama, not a world. This is also what he said below in the comment area, "the pattern is not big." But judging from the plots before he stopped updating, they were very smooth, and the two lines of career and love can be combined without being separated. I read Lao Zhou's work yesterday to chapter 150. I only read it once, but it took about the same amount of time. Comparatively, it seems that there are some problems with the plot, and the combination of making money and the plot is not smooth (distributing flyers and modeling are good, showing a person's character in the event, other making money, such as writing books, are all brushed off, many times I seem a bit at a loss, the same goes for buying a house, some things are hidden for the readers to discover It's a good thing, but it's a pity to just skip over the content that was originally very exciting). The lack of close connection between Zhou Yuwen's personal plot and the overall plot caused many people's characters to be unreliable. For example, the image of Shen Jue's literary girl was severely damaged (I don't know what the follow-up will be, but from the chapter I read, it was like this), and it was confusing. I like the protagonist and sings confusedly. I have never seen anything related to literature about this character except "Red and Black". This character's malleability is too low. It may be that Lao Zhou is not able to grasp the performance of this kind of person. In addition, there is a collective collapse of various male characters (except for the author's father and a few), and the two roommates What are they? This has directly transcended the genre of drama creation into a stereotype. Whether it conforms to reality or not is unreasonable. I believe that there are indeed licking dogs like Chang Hao and annoying people like Li Qiang, but what they do in the book is not consistent with common sense. Their previous actions cannot be connected with the next actions, and the character is bad. There are also characters like Liu Shuo who have no brains. Judging from the performance, there are indeed such people who know that they can't handle it, so they ask others for advice. But does this mean that this person has become the protagonist's absolutely trustworthy thug? It's a matter of plot and other characters. (Except for the fact that the plot is really broken, I will not point out the minor problems of the plot. Such minor problems are actually a kind of cognitive misalignment between the author and the readers. The author may not think it is good, but the readers may not think it is good, but they respect the author's ideas.) So let's talk about the main character's problem , I see that there are actually many main characters in it. Let me talk about three of them. Among all the protagonists, Zhou Yuwen has the best personality. Although he occasionally crashes (his performance in the wine game is really not good, there are some problems with the language, maybe because he does not know the wine game well enough), The second one is Linlin. There are some flaws in this character (2000 yuan and how poor she is. Actually, the author should connect it from her perspective. I personally feel that it is a bit disconnected). But the character of this character is really tenable, and the whole development process is extremely smooth. In Chapter 150, apart from the protagonist, she is the most fluent person portrayed in the book. This smoothness is very complete. For the third character, I will just cite a typical female character, such as Su Qing. This character is not a single character, but as a person. For adults, her performance is extremely childish and even submissive. The character created by Lao Zhou is an insecure person who lacks love. She is not bad at the same time, but her actions are indeed subversive. The other female characters are basically similar to this, and the character characteristics are not clear. Tao Tian, ​​Shen Jue, etc., These people gradually fall in love with the protagonist because they are rich and capable, but they do not have much connotation. For example, what does Shen Jue usually do? What is her life trajectory like? They don't have their own unique life trajectory, they are a template and look tired. Judging from the environment created in the work, Lao Zhou's control over the environment of the times is actually not very strong. What era was that? What kind of people are there, what are the characteristics of the era, and how does the entire era change as time goes by? Lao Zhou didn't emphasize this. To sum up, every aspect of Lao Zhou is good and present. The characters try not to be too intellectual, and the effort can be seen. The era and environment are indeed sure, but they are all weak. Some authors may score 70 or 80 points at a certain point, but others are not so good, so the results are good. Lao Zhou has all the points, but there are few bright spots, and the same is true for emotional shaping. I personally think that the solution is, firstly, to make up lessons. People who don't know much about the era and people can learn online. Secondly, to be as practical as possible. A little extension of all the fictitious things in the past will be the absolute highlight. Lao Zhou's current situation is that the pace is fast, but the content is slow. It is better to slow down the pace and content and implement it bit by bit. This can also be solved by making up lessons. Third, Lao Zhou is not required to have too many highlights, but at least the main characters and main plots can stand up. They have their own life trajectories. I think this is also a point that can be broken through. In short, Lao Zhou's work is generally good, but it is not particularly perfect. It is obvious that it can get better and better, and it can also make more breakthroughs. In my experience, works and characters like Li Zhe and Zhou Yuwen can be roughly divided into three main levels: The first level is in one's own perception, only the protagonist is happy. This kind of writing is pure cool writing. The protagonist has no wisdom, and the supporting characters have no wisdom either. The main thing is that the author You put yourself into the plot. The author is the main body of the plot, and the characters are just tools for the author. This is very popular on a website that focuses on updates; the second level is to divide your own cognition into many characters. For example, Lao Zhou gave Zhou Yu the wisdom and ability he knew. In the text, the annoying person he knew was given to Li Qiang, the dog licking he knew was given to Chang Hao, and the melancholy girl he knew was given to Linlin... Here the author puts himself into the characters, and then forms the novel driven by desire; the third level is to identify the world he can see as the world , the characters he can see are identified as characters, and the world and characters in it have become things that are objectified by the author. There is no author's subjective existence, and the author's subjective cognition exists in logic. The author uses the logic of various people's interactions to guide the development of the plot, thus forming a novel. There is no distinction between these three levels, but the first level is indeed the best to understand, and the third level is indeed the most real. In fact, you don't have to distort logic to write a novel, which is why I have the title. However, this is just a personal conclusion I have drawn. I hope Lao Zhou will get better and better.

Su Qing is definitely the heroine. From the current point of view, Su Qing's character is very representative. I like this character very much. She is single-minded, traditional, self-protective, and has the temper of a little girl. She hates iron in the early stage, but later realizes that she can't live without the hero. The divorce is to stimulate the hero to understand how important she is, but in the end, she understands how important the hero is. Then she got into a dramatic fight with the hero's girlfriend at a wedding. The story then unfolded, and both of them were born to start college. From here you can see the double line unfolding, otherwise there would be no doubt about the double penetration, and it would also allow both male and female readers to find a sense of empathy. Then what the male protagonist did when he was reincarnated was very simple, get money and pick up girls. I believe that the female protagonist Su Qing will not only go smoothly in this life, but she will also be able to get money smoothly, and even find a better husband than the male protagonist. However, because of the traditional single-mindedness and feelings for the male protagonist, reincarnation just wants to spend college happily with the male protagonist, and then redeem the decision of divorce in her previous life. This is basically the background of the story of this book. I don't understand why so many people hate Su Qing in the early stage. Everyone makes mistakes. Please take your place in any family where the female is the head of the household and earns money to support the family. Maybe the male protagonist still has a job, but doesn't today's society require men to thrive and work hard? Among these gossips, the heroine did not cheat on her husband and did not give up on the hero. The way she came up with was to divorce first, and then let the hero understand his importance, stimulate the hero to improve, and also protest against the mother-in-law who only wanted her to have children. It was like killing two birds with one stone. Moreover, the purpose of divorce here is obviously to stimulate the male protagonist. You have to say that Su Qing did a great job, and it is true. But if the male protagonist is not a male protagonist, but just an ordinary person, he has no luck and has failed in writing novels. I believe that Su Qing's character only allows herself to like one person for two lifetimes. It is impossible to give up on the male protagonist, and she will still try her best to find the male protagonist. What would happen if Su Qing were a man? A husband who was infatuated but couldn't bear to see his wife living without a goal. He forced his wife to find her own goal in life through divorce. The wife finally found her goal and became famous. She also found many handsome and young brothers as boyfriends. The husband was still infatuated with his wife and tried every means to undo the consequences of his actions. Now he would rather she do nothing and just be his wife, and he no longer cares about the gossip around him. Why doesn't this kind of person deserve a good ending? Su Qing's infatuation lasts two generations. I think her role in this book is also a beacon when the male protagonist has dated many girls and is addicted to money and sex. She is also a light that illuminates him when he is tired of money and sex and feels unprecedented loneliness. Isn't rebirth meant to recover what you have lost but not gained? If the author can allow both the male and female protagonists to be saved at the same time and understand what each other really needs, then this will be a work with depth. By the way, no matter how you look at it, the divorce between the male protagonist and the female protagonist in the previous life was a huge misunderstanding. When it is solved, I think it is also the ending of this book. I am looking forward to it. Please let the male protagonist understand who he loves, not the beautiful girls he met after rebirth, but who just like the male protagonist now.

Stop using the characters of Qiao Linlin, Su Qianqian, Jiang Ting, Wang Zijie, and Liu Zhu as roommates. They are already deeply rooted in the hearts of the people. Since you have tried to recreate it so many times but it didn't become popular the first time, then let go of this obsession and start over, writing a new character, just like you tried different plots in this book, writing a new character and plot to recreate the glory of the year. If you keep reusing the same characters and old plots, you will not only torture yourself, but also our readers and listeners who have always supported you. Stop being stubborn and look forward to it.

The writing is really strange, I don't understand where the score comes from. Some of the dialogues in the book do not have double quotation marks, and the character descriptions are also strange. The kind of person and things that the heroine is are explained for most of the chapter, and then Su Qing's role is reduced to Lu Lin and Zheng. To be honest, this kind of male protagonist really needs to be the protagonist, otherwise he is just a scum of society. The most important thing is to write about rebirth and making money. The writing is too petty and can't be compared with other urban novels. The plot is thin and boring, the characters' dialogues are strange, and there are many poisonous points. It is really a "masterpiece"

This book is so different from the previous ones. The more I read it, the more disgusting it becomes.

I've almost finished reading and want to comment on this book. The good part of this book is definitely the best in the city, but the bad parts are also really bad. It feels like a novel ten years ago 1. Let's talk about the good parts first. The best feeling is that it is real. Various small details in the early stage describe the changes in the characters' inner emotions and small actions. After reading it, it makes people feel particularly real. Some of them are really subconscious reactions in daily life. It may be small things that other authors would not pay attention to. Anyway, this book describes it and makes people feel particularly immersive [Of course it is only in the early stage, the realism in the later stage is simply a piece of shit] 1. Zheng Yanyan, although many people don't like this character, but I think this is the most realistic description in the whole book. For a real 19-year-old girl who first wants to fall in love, there is one who can accept a boy's influence. As for vanity, who dares to say that she doesn't, and how clingy the girl is, I can only say If you really talk about it, you will know that it has been written very conservatively, and from the beginning of fighting against various demons to the later lying down and laughing, it completely describes a process of not getting it but being reluctant to give up and finally having to accept it 2. Mother-in-law It is not advisable to write a book to entertain yourself and mix in private goods. You can't fuck your mother-in-law every day just because you like it. No matter how good-looking the mother-in-law you describe is, if the reader really has a mother-in-law, you won't be able to bring her in if you try to read it. Just like the sister control has absolutely no biological sisters, the evaluation is that they have been deleted and have no impression at all 3. Qu Jing and Jiang Minmin (Tao Tian's two roommates) I feel that these two are the same as the mother-in-law above. Deleting them has no impact at all. The only role in the book is to satisfy the author's desire to find a female seductress 4. Buy a castle and discover treasures. Brother, this is the United States. Is the environment in the United States suitable for living in a castle? It would be better to change this paragraph to say that all the outstanding architects are in Europe and then fly to Europe together to buy them. Let's talk about discovering treasures. Brother, this is too vulgar. I thought I was reading a novel twenty years ago. This paragraph is unnecessary. In the end, the treasures did not play a role and can be deleted. Moreover, the immigration area of ​​the United States is really not as good as going to a small European country. Not to mention being eaten up. The weather and environment in North America are not as good as Europe and the United States does not allow polygamy, but small European countries can. 3. Lu Lin's dad This thing popped up at the end. If I hadn't seen that it was going to end soon, I would have even thought that he was going to start cultivating immortality. What do you mean by the appearance of this character? Wouldn't it be better to change his parents' occupations to any other than this one, (mistress) (priority to boys), or even the same family situation as Li Shiqi's, but in the end, a mercenary pops up, which makes people dream back to the novels of twenty years ago? 4. Of course, there are many well-written places, like 2 that I particularly like. One is the concert singing rush that year, which was basically a small climax in the early stage The second favorite is the long period of fun after accompanying Su Qing to the United States, especially when I felt that I had been suppressed by the Jiang family at home. After I went abroad, I felt that the situation had reversed. This period lasted for a long time. I feel that it lasted until the second time I went abroad to buy a castle I can only think of this much for the moment

To be honest, there are nearly three hundred chapters and there are so many female characters that it feels very tricky to deal with. Originally, according to Lao Zhou's routine, Shen Yu should inherit Jiang Ting's character in the dormitory. However, so far, Shen's roles have been relatively small, suppressed by various roles, and he has no hope of becoming a regular character. Then there is Zheng Yanyan. To be honest, I feel that this role should be positioned as a lover. The coquettishness in that state is more interesting. It always feels less interesting to directly take the lead, and all kinds of teasing become a sideline. And now that Zheng is fighting with his ex-wife every day, she makes me feel like a spirited little girl. As for Lu Lin, having a secret lover set up on her made Lao Zhou have to spend more words to perfect the character plot and figure out how to deal with various relationships (I have a headache just thinking about it). Now that Zheng Tiantian is fighting with his ex-wife, I feel like she is just a spirited little girl. And Su Qing, although I personally like the character of my ex-wife, I can be forgiven for suppressing her. However, there are too many female characters. If she does not appear, it will be easy for me to forget this character, especially the plot of Tao. As for the two characters Tao and Qu, they appeared too quickly and were unnecessary. The impression given to me was that they were just a side story. Lao Zhou probably wanted to use the senior character to make it more interesting in the early stage. After all, he had high hopes for this book, but there were too many side edges that made me tired of aesthetics. The last one is Li Shiqi. When she appeared on the scene, I already felt that there were too many female characters, and she didn't appear in dozens or hundreds of chapters. I thought I had to abandon the character, but Lao Zhou suddenly said that she would appear soon. There is also a master wife. This plot feels like the plot ended early due to Zheng's rise to the top. Then a master wife, a character with a lot of xp in one, can make it more exciting. However, there are already 8 related characters. I started reading Lao Zhou's books in my freshman year. At that time, the book I read was a pirated version that had not been blocked. I didn't read it for a while, but found out that it was blocked. Then I read his second book and fell in love with the character Jiang Yue. From then on, I started to follow every book of Lao Zhou. This was also my first time to follow up on the books (I used to think there was no point in reading two chapters a day, but now I know the torment of waiting for these two chapters). Now Zhou Mouniao has changed from a young Zhou to an old Zhou. As he gradually enters middle age, he has forgotten the beauty of youth in college. He vaguely remembers watching the contents of "The God of Love" at that time. It really made me feel that those contents were happening around me. Today's content is mainly focused on the jealousy and jealousy of various heroines, and there is not much content related to campus. I know that Lao Zhou has high hopes for this book and wants to be good at it, so he has created a lot of content to attract readers. This is understandable, but he still hopes to be steady and complete the plot. The heroines can appear slowly. After all, eight heroines have been booked so far, almost 300 chapters. Although it is also a harem novel, at least I remember that this is a harem novel related to campus, not a stallion who is promoted all the way. There are too many heroines and it is easy to get tired if they are repeated. Finally, I hope that Lao Zhou's grades will get better and better and he will continue to write books that everyone loves to read.

When reading this book, please stay away from tissues and the opposite sex. I can't get carried away...

Hahaha

You dare to write about double penetration, I'm afraid you don't have a masochistic personality and I won't count you🐮

With a little bit of humanity, can there be a center? It seems like they have this one and that one, but in fact they are all lacking.

There's no point in the rest of it, it's just going to be repeated over and over again with the daughter-in-law's conflict and reconciliation.

Is there a cousin in this book? Cousin, I want to read it

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If the counselor's girlfriend and the high school beauty accept it, monthly tickets will be given to them, so get a few monthly tickets first to show your sincerity.

Happy New Year

When will Li Shiqi be updated?

I just started watching it, and I wanted to ask my ex-wife when she found out that the hero was reborn.

The seventh time I write a book at Qidian... The daily update rate of 4,000 yuan is really a bit unbearable. Alas, the writers of a small website for eight years have been working on the 20,000 yuan daily update. I will show you the 20,000 daily update when this book is on the shelves

In fact, as long as you make the first book more lightning-proof and optimize some plots, we will pay for it even if you copy it again.

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Lao Zhou's books were incomparably beautiful in the early and middle stages, but in the later stages I became tired of aesthetics and couldn't read them. I commented on this account when I changed my mobile phone and re-created it. I have 15 days of free reading of the works.

Lu Lin

People say that Qiao Linlin is coquettish simply because she has no sense of boundaries when it comes to men and likes to be in the limelight. But first of all, the reason why she teases other women's boyfriends is because her father's betrayal of the family led her to want to play with men all her life and not want to be hurt like her mother. It is also due to her own personality. Secondly, even if she no longer has a sense of boundaries, is coquettish and leans on the male protagonist, it will only be limited to the male protagonist. She likes the male protagonist because of her strong psychology, likes the charm of the male protagonist, and likes a man like Zhou. After the New Year's Day when she slept with Zhou, Zhou ignored her and Qiao Linlin was alone. When she was devastated and heartbroken in the dormitory, she came alive the moment she heard Faye Wong's reserve. I also listened to Faye Wong and it was very consistent with her state of mind at that time. Lao Zhou was quite attentive in this regard. After being with the male protagonist, he also deliberately stayed away from Wang Zijie and devoted himself to the male protagonist. Later, the male protagonist After the main character started her career, she was still a beauty. It was a bit annoying to always call and harass the main character when he was busy, but her character did not collapse until the ending. The plot with Zhou Xiaoyu was also very eye-catching. After saying so much, I just didn't want this dedicated and humble female protagonist to suffer. Too many people have misunderstood her as a coquettish woman. Lao Zhou's book was supported by Qiao and Jiang. Both heroines are vividly portrayed but have their own shortcomings and are not perfect. Compared to the other two, Zhang Nannan's most perfectly portrayed heroine is perfect but cannot be forgotten 🪖

To be honest, twins are difficult to write. After thinking about it, is it really necessary for the heroine to pester the hero? You can achieve success by yourself. Since you can get divorced, it already explains everything. But after all, it is Lao Zhou's book, and the following plot can almost be guessed 😏

The first time I watched this, I felt shocked and exploded, and then I became addicted 😭😭

Slow down when you are confused. I am not used to reading your book with so few typos in each chapter. A slightly slower pace is acceptable, but the pace of the book in the middle is a bit strange. In the male god book, Su Qianqian, Jiang Qing, Qiao Linlin, including the heroine in the back, I still remember their characters after so long. They all wrote their own characteristics and charm. It's really hard for me to criticize the female protagonists in your book. Each of the female protagonists is more of a shrew than the last. It's not necessary to describe the female protagonist as such a shrew when watching a quarrel. Originally, Zheng's character was not likeable, she was incompetent and had a bad personality. This description of her made me a little annoyed. Writing about so many women, I only like Jiang and Lu a little bit, but what about the others? In high school, that girl just disappeared for two hundred chapters and didn't appear. Zhang Nannan wasn't so outrageous when she went to the entertainment industry. A b Zheng Yanyan broke up with her for dozens of chapters and finally didn't break up with her. I always feel that in order to promote the plot and create conflicts, I don't take the heroine seriously. What are the heroines written here? None of them are favorite characters. Now that I have ordered all the latest chapters, I don't want to read further.

Men are called to show off, women are called to enjoy life. Society's opinions on men are that men have no right to choose their own lives. Men must be self-motivated and the backbone of the family. Men should work more than women. Men should take priority in hard-working jobs. Your parents say this to you, your boss says this to you, your colleagues say this to you, and even strangers on the Internet say this to you. It's scary to think about it.

Shen Yu😃

If you don't make hundreds of millions first, how can you have the confidence to open a harem? Make money first!