West Boy: the Making of an Alchemist

Why are pig's feet the most rubbish talent? In what age are we still doing this?

Whether it is the mortal stream or the wizard stream, the life of the sect (academy) is an important point to watch. Whether it is interpersonal relationships, golden fingers, adventures, battles, etc., They are all various laying points. This book does not include skills learning and development, adventure treasure hunting, making money and development, etc. After entering school. It directly describes a few years or a period of time later, which completely wastes the plot of the protagonist's development.

Advantages: The author's writing skills are very good. Whether it is the description of the environment or the plot of the characters, the plot is very good, and there are many literary paragraphs. The early part has the feeling of combining the mortal flow and the mysterious flow in American western movies. Disadvantages: 1. The author is too adapted to the low qualifications of the mortal stream and relies on the golden finger to pile up resources, resulting in unreasonable characters and plots. For example, wild mages regard one-star cards as treasures, but the protagonist can make more than 100 cards a week, buying whatever he wants. When enrolling, the protagonist's minimum qualifications and minimum strength are clearly described in a large space, which allows the protagonist to directly rise to level 10 in 3 years, which is consistent with the optimal talent speed. 2. The protagonist is immature and unscrupulous. Before the protagonist masters transcendence, the conscious and unconscious low-keyness of a child is not satisfactory. But after entering the extraordinary world, it is completely like a child holding gold in a busy city, and it is basically divorced from the essence of the mortal stream. 3. The emotional line is abrupt and boring, and then inexplicably intersects with Bai Yueguang in childhood, completely breaking the superiority between the extraordinary queen and ordinary people. To sum up, the author is a potential novice, the main line of the outline is not clear and he is slightly literary.

Isn't this a fantasy board about ordinary people cultivating immortality and passing it on to the west?

The place in the west is very interesting. Once you enter the academy, you will fall into a cliché.

Don't cut it, don't cut it, Yang Chenkong has recommended your book

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This protagonist really has no sense of caution at all. He doesn't consider safety issues in everything he does. He relies entirely on the author to cheat him?

I want to add some Cthulhu elements to the later plot, but I'm afraid people won't like it. So let's hold a vote ( ´▽｀) If you want to continue writing according to the mortal style, please leave a message in the comment area: Mortal If you want to unlock new postures with me, please leave a message in the comment area: Cthulhu I won't work overtime this weekend and will code a few more chapters for everyone ↖(^ω^)↗ Love you all

What I want to see is the protagonist as an alchemist (superhuman) interacting with ordinary people. Just like the western chapter

Every time I get to the point where I'm feeling better, it's gone. There's so much foreshadowing, but in the end I just turn around and leave as soon as I see you. There should be something there when I went home last time.

At the beginning of the ten chapters, I still had a feeling of western cowboy + extraordinary feeling. Later, the ingredients were too mixed and the level dropped sharply.

Are there no classes in the academy? Also, let me introduce what the protagonist has learned in the past two years. Magic theory and basic knowledge. Also, the protagonist has to practice potions by himself. There are also theories and basics. Don't be fooled by the formula.

Mortal flow, the worst talent, little green bottle-style plug-in, original ecological protagonist, slow-growing plot, if you can accept the above points, you can watch it

Authors should not irritate readers, just write according to their own outline. Caring too much about readers will only make your writing more confusing. There are 1,000 Hamlets for 1,000 people. If you cater to one group of people, it will make another group of people uncomfortable reading. You have to think about which group of readers you are targeting, and just cater to this group.

At first, the doctor of literature wrote well. Instead, he went to college, so why write it for a kindergartener?

Stitch monster, right? On the one hand, it was the mortal stream from 15 years ago. On the other hand, I thought it was the new system of Wizard's Journey or the Arcane God's Throne. At worst, it was the magician system in fantasy. In the end, I ended up with a version of Harry Potter from the early magic period. Two old-fashioned Internet articles, simply sew them together to make a flower bloom? Although taking shortcuts is stable, it is easy to become addicted, and the upper limit is not high. It can only be regarded as a writing practice.

Not bad, I like this novel very much. The flavor of recent fantasy novels and light novels is too strong, and they often use routines. Although this book also contains routines, many of them are old jokes, and suddenly there is a sense of freshness. I just feel that the author has been affected by the comment area. The slow-style detailed description at the beginning of the novel has become a bit missing in recent chapters. The cutscenes are a bit too fast, and a lot of fun is lost. It feels like the author wants to create a hidden line in the Western Ranch. It should be interesting to build a base in the canyon or something. The same goes for entering the academy, an alien version of Hogwarts, with an iron triangle, which is also a very interesting group portrait, but the cutscenes are too fast. Now that I have opened a new map on the east coast, the details are much less interesting. The protagonist has obtained the disk. There is no need to constantly open new maps like a mortal cultivating immortality. You can completely build your own base for farming. Western Fantasy Farming is very popular and has many fans. If you write it, there will be more readers.

It was a bit interesting when we were in the west. Although the smell of mortal flow was very strong but after entering the academy, it was too vulgar.

Before I first came into contact with Chaofan, the writing was very good. The characters and psychology were all good, the world was well created, and the rhythm was well grasped. However, after I came into contact with Chaofan, especially after entering the academy, I felt that the progress was too fast. I think the author could write down the specific details of training. He only talked about meditation. Do all aristocratic families have the same process? Is there any advantage of other people's background? You can write about the situation of the students who came in the same batch, the college environment, and their characteristics. You can describe the fantasy world in detail. I haven't felt the greatness of the gold master yet, but how can I reach the peak of level 10 as fast as a descendant of a pure-blood family and pass the level? Although there is help from the game, it is very obvious that it feels too disconnected from the previous ones and the rhythm is too fast. I hope the rhythm can be slowed down. I hope the above can be helpful to the author

Isn't that great? Not updated?

The writing is good, but the update is too slow. I didn't start it well at the beginning and then I didn't recommend it.

Ergou, where have you been! Come back and code!

It has been added to the collection. It has great ideas and the author's writing is very good. This book title makes people want to click on it. I visited with my work "The Witcher Begins in America". Thank you!