Sequence Fairy Road

I felt it was written too quickly and too dryly. Too fast means: a lot of words and ink are used to describe the dialogue, behavior and background of the main plot. You may think that this is not what it should be? But the effect of this is that other authors write three chapters of a fight, and you finish it in half a chapter; you write something about the main line, but readers may not understand it without paying attention, and they think you are here and there. Too dry means: your foreshadowing is too stiff, and you will even point it out in this chapter. First of all, it is a good habit to bury the foreshadowing, but it does not require readers to see it at the beginning. It is best to realize it later. There are also some small problems such as the golden fingers are not very reasonable and the character behavior logic is a bit strange. Of course I don't know how you will write later, but my suggestions are: 1. Force yourself to write the same plot longer and learn to break it into chapters. 2. In terms of environment and psychology, add more descriptions to set off the atmosphere. 3. Change the method of foreshadowing: Let me give you some examples. In A Song of Ice and Fire, the names of the five direwolves of the five Stark children hint at the fate of their owners; the Taixu environment in Dream of Red Mansions; Jia Baoyu's psychic gem. Of course, I didn't say that you have to reach the level of the books above. You can only control the details yourself. I recommend you to read "Xuanjian Immortal Clan"

I can't understand what it's written about, and the protagonist's character is very weird. He just came here a few days ago, and he dares to try random things without knowing anything, and he repeatedly treats others as idiots. Is this a stand-alone game that he plays alone?

6:00 In the morning 18:00 in the evening It's too painful to play alone

Is the article good? If it exceeds 30 chapters and the number of comments cannot keep up with the number of chapters, it means that the article is not very attractive.

A good book title feeds the dog, but it occupies the title of the book and doesn't write anything