Hunting in the Qinling Mountains, 1983

The pacing is too slow, and the plot sequence is illogical. Wouldn't it be better to write the chapter on cotton shoes later, first bring the pigs back to give the readers a good laugh, and then get to the emotional part?

All that fancy stuff, coming and going, online novels are just a straightforward narrative, why bother with all that back and forth? There were so many characters appearing at once, it was giving me a headache.

Let's rename it to "Old Niu's Day." This is a historical fiction story, 16 chapters in total, still focusing on just one day.

There are 49 chapters in total, but only the first two are about hunting; the rest is all nonsense. How can anyone keep reading?

Wow, amazing! You got a contract after only one day! I'm impressed! Could you please tell me what's missing from my three golden chapters? It's been four days since I posted them, and I still can't see any sign of a contract. It seems like it came, but it also seems like it never came. Why must one repay a life borrowed for immortality?

The logic is a bit messy, and I can't keep up with the train of thought.

Writing about the time spent hunting and returning home takes too long. You can go hunting two or three times, but you can't write this many chapters.

Does anyone have anything to say about this book? Suggestions, guidance, or criticisms are welcome. The author will carefully read and consider all feedback. Thank you.

My new book, "Dreaming Back to 1983: A Fisherman's Life," has been released. Those interested can check it out; the story's pace has quickened.

Dude, your writing has too much of a serious literary flavor.