My Basement Leads to Another World

Generally speaking, the details are okay and the outline is okay, but the plot development is not very good. It is recommended to write more about the red and blue world (the plot is to enter the academy as soon as possible) The rights in the real world are improved (after entering the academy, return to reality to engage in black technology) There are also readers who will expect the fake prince to become a real prince (personally hope to become the prince of a destroyed country in the east) The plot about women in the end is very troublesome and they don't want to watch it 😥

It's understandable that I skipped the previous plot with a golden finger, but why did I skip it when I started exploring the world for the first time? , And you have assumed the identity of a prince from a foreign kingdom. I don't know clearly what your identity is. Do you think it's appropriate? If a prince comes out of such a big town, maybe the whole town will know about it the next day. You will feel that the local nobles don't know about it. You need to use this identity to first learn to make a name (I'm talking about fame) and directly interact with the nobles before you can be reconciled. Civilian contact is useless. Even if you want to obtain information at the beginning, you should not reveal the identity of the "prince" directly. Instead, you should know the information and communicate with the nobles before indirectly revealing or confessing your identity. As a result, you went to talk nonsense with a commoner. Forget it, there are too many points to complain about. Seriously, you are the first person I have seen to have so many loopholes in the opening.

The writing is very strange. It has the beauty of writing foreign novels using the words of fantasy novels, mixed with some deliberate translations and stereotypes of foreign countries. At the same time, although the protagonist is said to have a harem at the beginning, it is very greasy, really greasy to death, and it is useless even if you are mentally prepared. If there is anything that is better written, it is the background introduction to the different world that is better written, with detailed and smooth descriptions. But this cannot make up for the shortcomings of the eccentric writing style, such as the rice that is cooked without washing, and sometimes there are pebbles in the stomach.

For new readers, this is not a harem story, this is a Mary Sue story about a boy wearing an alien skin.

Fuck women in the real world, Fuck women in other worlds. One hundred sheets, nothing accomplished.

Originally, the author's writing was good, but he ended up spending more than thirty chapters describing the customs, customs, and social background of a different world. Perhaps the readers would be so curious about the world that they read on patiently. However, after returning to the real world, he immediately wrote about love and love... There is something wrong with this writing method.

It feels like writing an ancient fairy tale instead of writing an overseas fantasy, which seems awkward.

Can you stop mixing Chinese and English in such an outrageous way? @

The reality should not be written in such an embarrassing way. It is difficult for Chinese consortiums to work in the United States. It is so embarrassing to write about jealousy. Just skip it and don't write about this aspect in the future. Otherwise, you will really throw away the book.

I always thought it was weird, but later I figured it out. Don't you think it's strange that you, a foreign prince pretending to be a foreign prince in a Victorian environment, would quote a line of ancient Chinese poetry from time to time? It's normal for you, a Chinese American, to understand English. Come and tell me how you translated those ancient poems into English. Isn't it embarrassing? It makes me laugh when I see it.

The third golden chapter is quite a failure. There are a lot of self-talking family background introductions, and there are also a few narcissistic words mixed in, which makes people uninterested. The background introduction can be summarized in 200/300 words. No author can introduce the background of the entire chapter right away.

I just want to ask, what is the theme of this novel? ? ? Now I only see pig's feet picking up girls. If you want to pick up girls, you can pick up girls. But the multi-line operation at the same time makes people uncomfortable (if you are an unmarried man and an unmarried woman, you will be a Neptune or a scumbag at best if you are multi-line operation). But you can travel to another world and even married women with happy families are not spared. This three-dimensional view is awkward...

It's been a long time since I stayed up late reading a book. As long as I maintain this level, the boss of Meituan will definitely reward me with a reward of 50 yen when my salary is paid next month, wow!

It's unclear whether the system is man-made or a natural phenomenon. It doesn't say how the system travels. It doesn't say how much supplies it can bring, whether it can bring living animals. There is no description of the environment on the other side. How to adapt to the gravity atmosphere? How can we communicate without barriers?

I don't have any problem with you inserting some setting pictures and landscape pictures, but I'm speechless if you insert pictures of beautiful women. I might as well make up my own mind. Those pictures you inserted are some of the ugly ones.

It looks good, but I have a headache if I wear it on both sides. Plus, the old-school stallion style Crystal Palace romance scene. No wonder the results are mediocre. The main plot is too scattered.

The plot of the other world is very attractive, and there is nothing wrong with picking up girls in the real world. Anyway, it is fun, but the plot of the ex-girlfriend and Liu Jiawen is really unpleasant. On the one hand, the plot of the ex-girlfriend is the old-fashioned plot of concealment + misunderstanding. Second, the characterization of the ex-girlfriend is unflattering. I don't know how the author plans to whitewash the ex-girlfriend. But from the current perspective, the ex-girlfriend has a complete side effect on the protagonist and will only make readers hate it. Liu Jiawen's plot is okay, but don't keep insisting on how she was kept, especially in the latest chapter. The rich second generation whom the ex-girlfriend cheated on is the son of the person who kept Liu Jiawen. Is it possible that there will be a plot behind them? What do you want to do, author? Have you visited moderators a lot recently? Was Liu Jiawen threatened by the second generation of rich people and given to her later? And then through Liu Jiawen, other women of the protagonist were drugged? Then the protagonist is framed, and the ex-girlfriend sacrifices herself with her sister to the rich second generation in order to save the protagonist? I was attracted to it by reading the comments in the comment section that the protagonist had a story about someone else. Later I found out that the plot of the alien world was quite good, and the writing was very good. But in the modern era, the rich second generation is like a ghost in front of the protagonist. Now I feel that there is too little excitement in the book. As mentioned above about the modern plot, the girl who was about to get the different world ran away again. I don't know if you, the author, have any grudge against the protagonist. And I don't see how powerful Gold Finger is. The training system of the other world feels like nothing in front of modern weapons. The ring that travels through time still needs to be charged, and it seems that there are no other abilities (forgot). A few comments: The current plot direction of the other world is okay. At least the protagonist pretends to be cool. I hope to improve the strength of the training system and increase the strength of Gold Finger by the way. The real world hopes to get rid of this rich second generation as soon as possible. He is an international student. What are you afraid of? Hurry up and learn something in another world and get rid of him without anyone noticing. Then modern writing is enough to pretend to be x, and a godly novel will do. The otherworld travel novel with more than 1,000 monthly tickets next door has already declared to rule the earth in modern times. , The protagonist in Chou Country and those who objected to it were killed in the street. Some characters specially arrange wives for the protagonist in order to win over the protagonist. They still do it in the living room in front of their husbands. They travel back and forth in several worlds to have fun. Now that the standards are relaxed, the author can write where he likes.

It's so funny. The author was scolded for procrastinating the first chapter, but ended up deleting the first chapter and starting the second chapter without any end. Please, at least explain the time travel and the content of the first chapter in a few paragraphs, right?

"Because many readers said that they don't care at all about how Pig's Foot got the time-travel ring. They only care about how awesome Pig's Foot is after time travel, how to show off in front of the natives, and then how to continue to be awesome after returning to the real world by relying on the things brought back from the natives in other worlds." There is indeed no need to introduce the origin of the ring, but I think the first chapter cannot be omitted I read the content and found it to be very interesting. However, compared to current fast food novels, they are still more traditional. The subject matter can be described as niche. Readers of niche subjects will be more receptive, so there is no need to worry about this issue. I think the second chapter should be regarded as the first chapter, and just add a few hundred words to the front. It is best to explain the motivation of the protagonist to travel to another world after getting the ring. What is the purpose? Maybe the protagonist is suffering from some kind of disease, maybe he owes a huge debt, maybe it is to conquer a different world. Without motivation to promote the development of the plot, for me, it is more like watching a story. With motivation, the protagonist's behavior is more purposeful, and readers should be better able to understand why the novel develops like this. Fast-paced books tend to have a very obvious rhythm, motivation, and context. I think whether it is fast-paced or not, the development of the plot is part of it, and the strong motivation for plot advancement is also part of it.

I sincerely suggest that you reduce the content in the real world, at least 30-70, otherwise there will be a lot of people jumping in to subscribe. If you are not good at writing, write less content, use your strengths and avoid weaknesses, and everyone will like to watch this different world.

What kind of woman are you writing about? You might as well kill and kill and the blood will flow like a river. Make everyone into biomass. Build an army, rob when there is no food, eat people, use the ability to travel through time to smuggle people into other worlds to do some hard work, and feed them some hallucinogens to control them.

Weird stitch monster, you'd better write about urban harems. You're just a mix of distinct alien literature and urban harem stories stitched together, which doesn't harmonize. Your love affair in the harem has nothing to do with the plot. You go to another world and only fall in love for a few chapters. It's very baffling.

The writing is really good, a potential author

The writing is very good, why do so many people criticize it? The writing is exquisite, especially the characterization is a master level!

Potential new book. Write well, come on, keep an eye on you.

Still writing about the city honestly, very nice

If you don't write about the city, just send it. If you write about the city, write about the city seriously. How can fantasy be so good?

It has been added to the collection. It has great ideas and the author's writing is very good. This book title makes people want to click on it. I visited with my work "The Witcher Begins in America". Thank you!