I Turned Out to Be the Heir to the Inheritance of the Richest Man in the World?

Old Blind As your pinnacle work: a loyal fan of the common man, some words are really unpleasant to say. Of course, I don't know if you can read it When I saw that you opened a new book, it was also about urban rebirth. I started reading it immediately and found some problems. I also wrote some comments. Originally, I only thought that those comments were just my personal opinions. But then I looked at your homepage and saw that you had published other new books before. I read the book reviews and found that many brothers who read books also felt the same. . I feel that your writing and plot are still top-notch, but some details, dialogue, and character creation are a little behind the times. In other words, the characters you create, and the wording and sentences in the dialogue may make people feel awkward. 1. Regarding character names and titles, don't think that it's enough to change the surname according to the name of a real person you knew before. Then I can only say that the name of the person you knew before is too unpleasant. . It really affects the perception a bit, especially for girls. Chen Yutong and Su Jin are both good at it, but for example, the name Li Jingjing, who sounds like a female supporting role, is also very earthy. . There is no need for an unusual or fancy name, but at least it needs to be in line with public aesthetics. As a layperson, the heroine is called Wang Bo, Xiao Bo, and in this book, she is called Xiao Ying. . . What era is this called? The timeline of this book is 26 years! This kind of name or title issue may not seem like a minor issue, but it affects the perception very much. 2. The problem of dropping the book bag, especially what the male protagonist said, I can't remember for a while. To give a random example, Wang Ying typed to Li Jingjing and said: Do I have the honor to treat you to a free meal before I graduate and leave school? It's really too bag-breaking. How can it be such a way of typing for chatting, flirting and pulling between two young men and women in modern times. . . I think this is one of the important reasons why many book reviews say that your book cannot keep up with the times. 3. The most important issue is also one that other book friends have also mentioned in your previous new book: you have made the male protagonist's character too licky. Example 1: Wang Ying and Li Jingjing were chatting. I forgot what Wang Ying said. Li Jingjing was a little angry and felt that Wang Ying had misunderstood her. Your original text probably means Wang Ying: Don't be angry with Jingjing, I really didn't mean it. If you are angry, I will slap myself twice. . . Too licking Example 2: Wang Ying and Chen Yutong were making out in the classroom. Chen Yutong was a little resistant. Wang Ying: Yutong, please. . . . Example 3: As long as the male protagonist cares about the girl, she will give the male protagonist a little positive feedback. If the male protagonist does not move, he will be so excited that he will sweat, and his heart is like beating a drum. . . Not really, really These bits and pieces of details will push the male protagonist in the direction of dog-licking bit by bit. Now the dog-licking economy has collapsed, no one likes dog-licking male protagonists anymore, old blind When opening a harem, you need to shape the male protagonist into an excellent one, so that women can't stop, instead of relying on the male protagonist's dog-licking and affectionate setting to lick. . . I also really feel that your writing is a bit behind the times, so after saying so much, in fact, your plot and writing style are the first level. I think as long as you correct the problems I mentioned, the results will be much better. Your writing is not keeping up with the times. Read more about the current harem stories and scumbag stories. I think you can write brilliantly with your ability. Come on, of course, I don't know if you can see it, and I found that these problems I mentioned were included in your previous book reviews, but this book still has these problems. . Maybe change is really difficult. .

Can the author update it quickly?

Deliberate, blunt. There are these problems in the first few chapters. They are not too bad, but they are not my favorite style. They are a bit artificial. Xiaobai will probably enjoy watching it.

The writing and the inner drama and interactions are good, but I always feel more and more frustrated the more I read.

Support the old blind man, I love to read any book you write, but I am one of the silent majority, who only read books and do not talk. I think any of your books is very good in terms of authenticity and sense of writing and plot, but don't be a eunuch, don't wait for me to fatten you up before you stop writing and start a new book.

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I remember adding a bookshelf I can't find it It seems to be another vest

I read the news I saw in the old group in a few hours, so keep writing and don't finish it 😁

Damn you, no update today?

Hurry up and write, author It's so good, it's not enough to read.

The plot is good, but I feel that the author is a little too literary in the first few chapters. Come on

The author's writing is extremely, extremely, extremely, extremely, extremely good.

What to say. . I don't know how to describe this book. It smells good and smells good. . . In fact, the author's writing style and plot design are really good and beautiful, but there are some places that make people feel awkward In terms of details, for example, the awkward titles, for example, sometimes the male protagonist's words are too embarrassing The general direction is the problem of the male protagonist's character building. Don't make the male protagonist a licking dog. Seriously, I am still dating Chen Yutong. I can't wait to read the news about Li Jingjing. Why can't I control myself? Brother, are you manipulating women? It's still a woman who is trying to manipulate you. She rejected you with words before, but then she sent you a message and you couldn't control it like a licking dog. . . Difficult to stretch In fact, there is nothing wrong with these plots. It is mainly due to the author's choice of words and sentences and the description of the male protagonist's heart. It really makes the male protagonist a licking dog. It is not like there are 100 million people. . . For the same plot, I don't think it would be so difficult to write it with the male protagonist's mentality That's why I said this book is smelly.

Trivia, Sichuan Foreign Languages, in Chongqing

Is campus life so interesting? Can you write dozens of chapters? Who are the target readers?

Old book fans come to support

I wrote it until it was put on the shelves, but I feel like the golden finger is of no use.

The data in this book are a bit miserable. Can you stick to it?

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Your title really doesn't match the content at all. In just one year, where has your life been, drinking, drinking and living? ? ? ? ?