Is This Mangaka Seriously Crazy?

The paragraph comment limit of 150 words is placed here Why does it feel watery? I think there are the following points First, the description of details is insufficient, the key plot passes too quickly, and there is a lack of excitement. The Edgewalker, which was heavily foreshadowed in the early stage, did not make me feel enough impact when it was finished. Instead, my attention was distracted by things like anime adaptations, game adaptations, movie copyrights, and looking for family. In short: like a cow chewing a peony Second, readers had an early impression of Aoyama as an unconscious comic superman. I have high expectations. At the beginning of the novel, Aoyama abandons fame and fortune and the popularity of the comics is enough of a contrast. But now the plot development seems to have a tendency to return to the kingly way and upgrade the monster-killing style, which is a bit off topic Thirdly, there is a lack of a unique and creative world view. It seems that everything is a reflection of the real world. On the surface, it seems that we can save pen and ink and not make redundant descriptions, but the same three-dimensional stereotype is brought into the novel. The middle is to frame the imagination of the protagonist pretending to be slapped in the face. If you have no expectations, you can read it in ten lines at a glance Fourthly, it does not integrate the whole part. Many variables, such as "billionaire", "scientific genius", "world sensation" and "beauties surrounded", may bring new conflicts that can change the protagonist's mentality. However, these settings are thrown out in a short time without being derivative, and some old-fashioned pretending content cannot be used. Enough omission [Although there is a need for objective description, things must be made clear, but the reader's perspective follows the protagonist, and Aoyama's attitude can really determine how much emphasis should be placed on a matter], and there is a feeling of eagerness to shake off the burden Fifth, the description of some "minor" characters lacks a sense of reality, that is, everything outside the field of view is nothingness, and the interpersonal and social environment is very thin It's time to go to bed, so let's write this much first

Author, haven't you understood why your last book with the same comic theme was rejected? Please tell me about comics carefully, Mr. Wenzhao! Is everything centered around comics? Can you please stop writing about irrelevant things and reduce the number of words? Draw comics, editors are amazed, editorial staff are shocked, publish, readers are shocked, feedback, gain fame and money, draw comics... Just write according to this rhythm, don't touch anything else! Otherwise your book will be thrown into the street and you will be able to tj

I feel that as long as the plot is focused on comics, there is no need to include such a long life drama. It feels very useless and not many people like to read it.

As long as you don't write emotional dramas for the main character, and mainly write comics and are influenced by comics to go crazy in normal life, then this book just lacks popularity.

The protagonist is so decadent. I feel like I have a knot in my heart when I watch it. It's not refreshing to watch. It's obviously time travel + system + text copying and yet it's a 5 , the decadent male protagonist that was popular 6 years ago, it is such a cool theme, but it seems uncomfortable to write about a decadent protagonist. This copy of the article successfully stole the limelight, but when I turned around and saw the male protagonist's situation, I couldn't feel happy anymore. Also, why should I call him System Lao Deng? It sounds weird. I am a person who listens to books and rarely stares at them. Calling Lao Deng feels a bit too intimate😟

The previous comment has been deleted. Fortunately, I voted for it for a month before I speak (). I don't have much to say, so as to save the readers behind me: It's a new book by a newbie. There are quite a lot of flaws. The ideas are good, the writing is average, and the future is promising.

I'd give it a 7/10. It's quite enjoyable to watch. The plot of the comic and the events related to the comic are very well written. I almost couldn't sleep at night. But the emotional drama of daily life is too ordinary. In comparison, it is like decorating a chocolate cake with jelly beans. And my personal taste is that the emotional scenes are well written, so -3.

The sense of immersion is too bad. Except for cyberpunk, the feeling behind it is too watery.

This blockbuster made me, who had read the comics, not know what to read. There was a trick in the introduction. With your way of writing a book, you can just write a few chapters and I will go next door to read it before coming back here. This will prevent you from writing too many tricks and the original text will be regarded as plagiarized.

I came back and read dozens of chapters, and I really can't stand it anymore. It's okay for you to draw comics with a weak plot, and it's acceptable to make movies, special effects, and games. But the author is too ambitious, or there is no outline. He writes whatever comes to mind, and just does entertainment. If he insists on pursuing high technology and AI, you are putting the cart before the horse. I thought about it again, and now that I have written it all, let me talk about other content. The first drawback is the development of the Cyberpunk 2077 game. You can just set the background technology to be a little advanced, and then let the protagonist be a producer in name. You have to go out in person, and what is shown is not very clever, which only adds to the jokes. There is also Digital Life. When I saw this terminally ill fan for the first time, I thought I would make an easter egg in the game after the fan passed away. However, when you came to this, I was completely unmoved and even felt it was a bit unnecessary. Other minor problems are acceptable. I just hope that the next book will be well written. Even if it is longer like the plot of the parasitic beast, it doesn't matter. I just hope that I can concentrate on the main plot and not be like this one. The main plot is poorly written and no one subscribes. As a result, the branch plot is even worse. Finally, I suggest that the author read more novels of the same type to improve himself. After all, there are not many authors who are willing to write this kind of subject and are good at it these days.