Flying Fairy in the Day

The writing style, training system, spells and so on are good, but the plot, tsk tsk tsk, I can't praise it. I can feel that the author wants to write the kind of horse riding in the world, Jin Yong's martial arts style, but don't forget that this is fantasy and immortality, and many things cannot be messed up. It just looks awkward. Maybe there are thousands of people and thousands of books. If you are interested, you will know what is going on if you go and take a look.

I must keep writing this time! One million words is just the threshold for online writing. As long as you carefully write a complete long story, good or bad, and then start a new book, you will see a different world. (Beep quietly, I also send this sentence to myself)

I agree with the statement of a book friend below, but one thing is that I personally feel that the writing style is very problematic. I have read a lot of weird works. In the third golden chapter, the mystery about the Nuo master was not written at all. The overly straightforward description and numerous inner dramas made me unable to get into the play at all. Different works also have different requirements for writing style. For characters in strange and troubled times, it is more reasonable to have stable and mature personalities. Novels that are too out of touch with the normal world will look naive, and troubled times will make people feel brainless. The choice of words and sentences is even more so, "I would like to thank you on behalf of my master and Fengtongzhai." If I just pick it out and look at it from a modern perspective, does it sound a bit weird? Look at that paragraph, I changed it to: "My little sister has little knowledge. Brother Xu said, my little sister has learned a lot." After she finished speaking, she glanced at the sleeping child, with a relaxed smile on her tense face. "When Xiao Yi's parents came last night, they looked anxious I am anxious and frightened. I know they are not easy to come by, so I cannot bear to express the danger of Xiao Yi's symptoms. If Xiao Yi fails to receive treatment in time and the blood epidemic spreads, the little sister will not be able to escape responsibility. Brother Xu's help today not only saves Xiao Yi's life, but also prevents the little sister from becoming a sinner for the ages." "Thank you for your kindness, but reward is one thing. If Brother Xu has any difficulties in the future, Fengtongzhai will definitely help you within our ability!" Isn't it better than your dry "Thank you"? My paragraph: 1. The act of having the protagonist tell so much information inexplicably to a stranger is not that cheap. 2. The girl knows the importance of information and is a transparent person. 3. Girls repay kindness. 4. Why does she know that it is not easy for Xiao Yi's parents to have a child? Because the neighbors in Fengtongzhai treat each other like family, they will help each other. 5. Faced with a very dangerous disease that she cannot handle, she can calmly comfort her family members and stabilize her condition immediately. She is a reliable child who can be entrusted with important responsibilities. 6. A series of clean words, first mentioning that there must be a reward, showing that the people in the village understand the rules, and also saying that they will provide support in the future. Being close to such capable people also adds a security guarantee to Fengtong Village, without losing face, and a female stream has a certain chivalry. How can a girl who is transparent, polite, repaying kindness, reliable, steady, and neat in her actions be so unlovable? So if a female character is scolded, look for your own fault. As soon as I saw that your review was much better than the previous book, I knew that you, the author, still have a long way to go.

Chapter 10 Why can't the protagonist be excited? Chapter 11 Why does the protagonist propose a fight? What does the author think

The yellow elephant is coming! Yellow elephants come from all directions! The soul is back! The soul is back! Ahh...! Ah... The soul is back! (Method) (Dance the Goddess) (Twirl around the stove) (Single incense) 𓀀𓀁𓀃𓀅𓀇𓀋𓀌𓀎 (Method) 𓀙𓀠𓀤𓀥𓀫 (Method) (Chant the mantra) (Twirl Turn) (Ring the bell) (Dance the God) (Sing lowly) (Ring the bell) (Flag the flag) (Light the fire) (Method) (Ring the bell) (Chant the mantra) Yan Wuhuo is here𓀁 𓀂 𓀄 𓀅 .... Yellow elephants are coming from all directions....𓀉 𓀊 𓀋 𓀌 𓀍... Ahh... 𓀎 𓀏 𓀐 𓀑 𓀒𓀓 𓀔 𓀕 𓀖 𓀗.... Yellow elephants are coming in overwhelming numbers....𓀘 𓀙 𓀛 𓀜 𓀝 𓀞𓀀.... The yellow elephant comes all the time....𓀆 𓀇𓀙 𓀚Ahh....𓀐 𓀑 𓀒𓀓

Don't be too active once it's put on the shelves. Judging from your update speed, no one wants to see the good-looking ones.

I was quite looking forward to this book, but the update speed is really impressive. Abandoned

I don't know why my grades are so bad

It's so well written, why did you stop?

A eunuch? Even if you don't update, say a word

In the wind of the rivers and lakes, the clanking sword rings.

I write too slowly, so my performance is poor

The author also liked the book on Fingertips after reading it! The style is very similar! Good

The writing is pretty good but you don't write anymore?